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mark Total score You have achieved a very good result be applying good observational and sketching skills. The shape and proportion of your elephant are very accurate and you have done a good job of giving dimension by shading and defining detail. If you pay closer attention to the direction of your strokes, you can give more depth and dimension to your subject. The straight lines of your shading across the flank give it a one dimensional, flat appearance. Giving more defined detail to some of the leg and trunk creases would also take your work to a higher level. This is a bold drawing with good overall proportion and composition. Closer attention to shading and defining detail could help make your elephant more lifelike. If you spent a little more time on this piece, you could achieve an even better result. Try to always 'proof read' what you produce. This does not just apply to written work or maths - everything you do can always be improved if you are prepared to spend a little extra time and effort. This is the most important advice I could give you Andrew. I believe you are usually capable of a greater achievement than you show evidence of and this is directly related to your effort.
Student 1
effort (out of 5)
4.5
4.5
19
Student 2
effort (out of 5)
3.5
4.5
16
Student 3
effort (out of 5)
3.5
You have produced a very striking and interesting drawing with excellent shape and proportion. You have begun to use some techniques such as 15.5 shading and defining details. Using feather strokes for your line work instead of heavy solid lines and developing your shading skills will give your work greater depth and dimension.
Student 4
effort (out of 5)
3.5
You have achieved good proportion for your elephant and applied some good sketching techniques such as feather strokes and shading. To improve, try looking more closely at the 14.5 individual parts of the subject and carefully representing them. For example, the ear on your drawing is a very round shape whereas the one on the model was triangular. Attention to detail will help you produce more authentic drawings.
Student 5
effort (out of 5)
3.5
3.5
15
You chose a more challenging subject to draw and have achieved a good result. You have used a good feather stroke technique and introduced shading and defining detail. If you work on perfecting your shading technique, you can start to produce drawings without such a pronounced outline.
Student 6
effort (out of 5)
4.5
You have produced a drawing of a well proportioned elephant with good attention to detail and shading to give depth and dimension. Your 19.5 drawing is interesting and striking. You could improve the result by refining your shading technique and making some of the details a little less stylized. You have produced an excellent example of what can be achieved using good observational and sketching skills. You have drawn the elephant in proportion and given it depth and dimension by applying shading and detail.
Student 7
4.5
effort (out of 5)
19.5
Student 8
effort (out of 5)
4.5
3.5
16
You have applied some good sketching techniques such as shading and defining detail and your drawing has good depth and dimension. In order to improve it, you could try to represent the subject more authentically and pay closer attention to the proportion, shape and anatomy. Your elephant more closely resembles a cartoon character than a real animal. Both sketching and cartooning are good skills to develop.
Student 9
classroom participation and cooperation (out of 5) classroom participation and cooperation (out of 5)
effort (out of 5)
3.5
3.5
3.5
You have made a good start on your sketch and started to apply some techniques such as feather stroke lines, shading and defining detail. If you 15.5 work on developing these techniques, you will find your drawings will look more interesting and authentic.
Student 10
effort (out of 5)
Student 11
classroom participation and cooperation (out of 5) classroom participation and cooperation (out of 5)
effort (out of 5)
3.5
Your drawing has some depth and dimension and parts of it have excellent attention to detail like the 16.5 top of the head. Some more robust shading and defining techniques could really lift your drawing and enhance the authenticity of your work. The sketching and observational skills you have applied have resulted in a very authentic elephant 17.5 drawing. The proportion and scale look accurate and the shading and detail you have added give excellent depth and dimension. Always do your best to follow instructions and if you are unsure, ask for more explanation. The choices you make are as important as the outcomes and taking the easy way will not help you 14.5 to learn. Your elephant drawing shows you an understanding of how to apply shading and to add definition by including detail. You have achieved a good result. You have achieved a very good result be applying good observational and sketching skills. The shape and proportion of your elephant are very accurate and you have done a good job of giving 16.5 dimension by shading and defining detail. By making your defining detail more accurate and perfecting your shading techniques, you will greatly improve an already impressive piece of work.
Student 12
effort (out of 5)
4.5
4.5
4.5
Student 13
effort (out of 5)
3.5
Student 14
effort (out of 5)
4.5
Student 15
effort (out of 5)
4.5
3.5
3.5
You have begun to apply some sketching skills such as feathered lines and shading to give your elephant some definition and depth. You may be 16.5 able to achieve a more authentic shape if you refer more to the 'model' while sketching and think about the shape of the outside (space around the subject) as well as the subject itself.
Student 16
effort (out of 5)
3.5
3.5
15
The head and body shapes of your elephant both look good but they don't go together as they are the wrong size. If you try to keep the proportions correct, you will produce a much more authentic result. You have used some good feather stroke and detailing technique and can add greater depth and dimension to your work using shading and fewer solid lines.
Student 17
classroom participation and cooperation (out of 5) classroom participation and cooperation (out of 5)
effort (out of 5)
4.5
Your drawing is very impressive because of the attention to detail and the techniques you have 19.5 demonstrated, such as good use of proportion and shading. You applied yourself well to this task and you have achieved an excellent result. You have applied some good sketching techniques such as shading and defining detail and your drawing has good depth and dimension. In order to improve it, you could try to represent the subject more authentically and pay closer attention to the proportion
Student 18
effort (out of 5)
18
Student 19
effort (out of 5)
4.5
You have achieved a very good result be applying good observational and sketching skills. The shape and proportion of your elephant are good 17.5 and you have done a good job of giving dimension by shading and defining detail. If you develop your eye and refine the shading, you could achieve even more realism.
Student 20
effort (out of 5)
3.5
3.5
15
You have good drawing skills but you need to extend yourself beyond the flat stylized character you have produced if you want to develop a more authentic composition. You have only applied minimal shading technique and the detail you have added is a good start but in order to give dimension, it needs to be refined. Also, please ensure you follow the 'brief' next time - It was specified that this was a lead pencil sketch with NO colour which you ignored twice.
Student 21
effort (out of 5)
16
You have produced a good drawing but it's appearance is more like a cartoon character than a lifelike elephant. You have achieved a good general shape and begun to apply some shading techniques but the details you have included are mostly stylized and not authentic. Sketching and cartooning are different and it would be an advantage to understand the differences and develop skills in both.
Student 22
effort (out of 5)
4.5
You have achieved an excellent drawing demonstrating good proportion and composition. You have shown good use of a range of sketching 19.5 techniques including shading and your attention to detail has helped make your elephant look very lifelike. You have applied some good sketching and drawing techniques in your drawing and achieved a great result. Your shading and texturing look very effective but one area of improvement could be to ensure you study all the details of the anatomy carefully. The feet of your elephant look a little different to those of the 'model' and detract a little from the authentic style.
Student 23
effort (out of 5)
4.5
4.5
19
Student 24
effort (out of 5)
4.5
Your drawing is very impressive because of the attention to detail and the techniques you have 18.5 demonstrated such as good use of proportion and shading. You applied yourself well to this task and you have achieved an excellent result. You have achieved a good overall shape for your elephant although your composition may have been improved by using the available space more effectively. Better attention to detail - such as the shape of the ear and areas of definition such as ankles and knees could help give your drawing more depth and make it appear more life-like.
Student 25
effort (out of 5)
13
Student 26
effort (out of 5)
4.5
You have used some good shading techniques and definition of detail to give your elephant dimension and depth. To make it even more 16.5 lifelike, you could focus on incorporating more detail and including a little more contrast eg, some darker wrinkles. I like the way you noticed the detail of the hairs on the head.
Student 27
effort (out of 5)
3.5
You have achieved a good shape and proportion for your elephant but it still looks a little flat. Some 14.5 more shading and definition of details would help give your drawing depth and make it more lifelike.
Student 28
effort (out of 5)
4.5
You have achieved a fantastic result with your elephant drawing. The shape and proportion look very accurate and the shading and detail you have 18.5 added give your drawing depth and dimension. You could add more detail and refine your shading technique to give even greater authenticity. This is a bold drawing with good overall proportion and composition. Your elephant still looks a little 17.5 stylised and closer attention to shading and defining detail could help make your elephant more lifelike. Overall, your composition is pleasing but a straight border would look better in this case. You have started to apply some shading techniques to give 17.5 depth to your drawing. To make the elephant appear even more lifelike, you could focus on adding more shading and defining the details. You have produced a drawing of a well proportioned elephant with good attention to detail and shading to give depth and dimension. You could improve the result by refining your shading technique to make it more graduated.
Student 29
effort (out of 5)
3.5
Student 30
effort (out of 5)
3.5
Student 31
effort (out of 5)
3.5
3.5
16