Profile Essay (Farm Runoff)

by Christopher McLaren

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1652 9411

TIME SUBMITTED PAPER ID

14-OCT-2013 11:32PM 362273134

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more than unfortunate. what does this indicate to you?

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GRADEMARK REPORT FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

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Impressive research here--looks like you actually got interested! I'm glad. I'm not going to ask you to re-do this, but you do need to read the comments to find the areas where you need to add some citations.

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Great hook.

Your opening strategy is engaging. Additional Comment Eeeuuuw.

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Comma splice: A sentence must have both a subject and a main verb in order to be complete, but it cannot have more than one subject or main verb. A comma splice is a variety of run-on sentence that occurs when two complete sentences, each with its own subject and verb, are joined mistakenly by a comma. There are generally three methods of correcting this problem: 1) Replace the comma with a stronger mark of punctuation such as a period or semicolon, 2) use a coordinating conjunction ("and," "but," "or," "nor") to join the two constructions, or 3) make one of the two sentences a dependent construction by linking it to the other with a subordinating conjunction ("if," "when," "so that," "although," "because") or relative pronoun ("that," "which," "who," "whom," "whose").

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Word choice error: Sometimes choosing the correct word to express exactly what you have to say is very difficult to do. Word choice errors can be the result of not paying attention to the word or trying too hard to come up with a fancier word when a simple one is appropriate. A thesaurus can be a handy tool when you're trying to find a word that's similar to, but more accurate than, the one you're looking up. However, it can often introduce more problems if you use a word thinking it has exactly the same meaning.

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Citation Needed

Cite Source: Please use the link below to find links to information regarding specific citation styles: http://www.plagiarism.org/plag_article_citation_styles.html Additional Comment Can't tell where one source begins and the other ends.

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Word choice error: Sometimes choosing the correct word to express exactly what you have to say is very difficult to do. Word choice errors can be the result of not paying attention to the word or trying too hard to come up with a fancier word when a simple one is appropriate. A thesaurus can be a handy tool when you're trying to find a word that's similar to, but more accurate than, the one you're looking up. However, it can often introduce more problems if you use a word thinking it has exactly the same meaning.

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Design prob

design prob Additional Comment only include a graphic if you intend to use it for some purpose. say something about it right next to or under or above it.

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Text Comment. Text Comment.

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ARGH! more than unfortunate. what does this indicate to you?

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CRITERION 1 Style:
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Frequent stylistic or sentence level literacy issues that cloud meaning or diminish readability. There are frequent areas that need more description, background, or definition for less experienced readers. Missing citations or citations that can't be easily tracked down by reader. Usually addresses audience with an appropriate, clear, and succinct style. Usually attends to audiences needs, experiences, and values, although there are occasional areas that need more description, background, or definition for less experienced readers. There may be errors in the ways sources are cited, but there aren't missing citations or citations that can't be easily tracked down by reader. Addresses audience with an appropriate, clear, and succinct style. Attends to audiences needs, experiences, and values. Cites all sources properly. Scale 3

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Frequently strays from conventions of either academic essay or magazine article format; typical introduction, body, and conclusion organization hard to identify. Often missing captions or headings for sections. Usually follows conventions of either academic essay or magazine article format; includes introduction, body, and conclusion. Would benefit from (where necessary) headings, captions, etc. Follows conventions of either academic essay or magazine article format; includes introduction, body, and conclusion. Includes (where necessary) headings, captions, etc. Scale 3

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Reader may be unsure of which person, place, event, organization, technique, or trend author is profiling. Assignment purpose may not be achieved. May provide some relevant background or hint at why readers should care, but not in a coherent or cohesive way that engages readers' interest. Reader is not shown why this subject deserved coverage (distinction). Needs a smooth, logical organization within and between Ps. Claims need logical, relevant, credible and authoritative evidence. Informs readers about a person, place, event, organization, technique, or trend. Provides some relevant background, hints at why readers should care. Reader may not be shown why this subject deserved coverage (distinction). Sometimes lacks a smooth, logical organization within and between Ps. While some claims are supported, others need logical, relevant, credible and authoritative evidence. Informs readers about a person, place, event, organization, technique, or trend. Provides

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Informs readers about a person, place, event, organization, technique, or trend. Provides relevant background, illustrates why readers should care, and shows why this subject deserved coverage (distinction). Organizes results and paragraphs in a smooth, logical pattern. Supports all claims with logical, relevant, credible and authoritative evidence. CRITERION 4
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