Prompt 6 "Hamlet" Essay

by Thuc Nguyen
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Prompt 6 "Hamlet" Essay
GRADEMARK REPORT
GENERAL COMMENTS
Instructor
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Some slight mistakes, but overall good job. I like how
you questioned why Horatio lived after Hamlet died.
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C/S
Comma splice:
A sentence must have both a subject and a main verb in order to be complete, but it cannot have more
than one subject or main verb. A comma splice is a variety of run-on sentence that occurs when two
complete sentences, each with its own subject and verb, are joined mistakenly by a comma. There are
generally three methods of correcting this problem: 1) Replace the comma with a stronger mark of
punctuation such as a period or semicolon, 2) use a coordinating conjunction ("and," "but," "or," "nor")
to join the two constructions, or 3) make one of the two sentences a dependent construction by linking
it to the other with a subordinating conjunction ("if," "when," "so that," "although," "because") or relative
pronoun ("that," "which," "who," "whom," "whose").
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Missing quote
Missing quotation mark:
Quotation marks are used to enclose direct quotations which are less than three lines long (longer
direct quotes should be blocked). Quotation marks are also use to enclose dialogue in your writing.
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Thesis Statement
provides a meaningful thesis that is responsive to the writing task
provides a thesis that is responsive to the writing task
provides a thesis or main idea that is related to the writing task.
may provide a weak thesis or main idea that is related to the writing task
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Support for Thesis
thoroughly supports the thesis & main ideas with specific concrete details and commentary.
adequately supports the thesis and main ideas with concrete details and commentary
minimally supports the thesis or ideas with limited concrete details and commentary due tor
edundancy and/or generalities
ails to support the thesis or main ideas with concrete details and commentary due to
redundancy and/or generalities.
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Organization
*Each topic sentence clearly connects to the thesis and offers an identifiable, well-phrased
idea to be proven in the paragraph, concrete details are well-chosen and incorporated;
paragraphs are well- organized to create a coherent, carefully developed and supported
argument, writer maintains focus and control of argument so that the point of each
paragraph is always clear
Each topic sentence generally connects to the thesis but in one or more TS the main idea
may need to be clarified; concrete details are generally well-chosen though some may be
irrelevant or insufficient as evidence to effectively support the thesis and/or TS; paragraphs
are generally well-organized, focus and control of argument may need improvement because
the point of a paragraph may not always be clear
Topic sentences are present but more than one is weak in the following areas: main idea
not discernible, concrete details are present but weak because they provide insufficient
evidence to support TS and/or are irrelevant because they do not support an insightful
inference. Lack of coherent organization of ideas within individual paragraphs or from one
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paragraph to the next, paragraph(s) may lack clear point(s), content of paragraphs does not
consistently support or connect with thesis and/ or TS.
Topic sentences absent or consistently lack focused ideas, either offering general,
irrelevant comments or stating facts about the text; there is no discernible argument or point
guiding essay; concrete details are absent or ineffective/ insufficient, points of paragraphs
are unclear
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Transitions
*The paper moves smoothly from one idea to the next.
*The paper moves from one idea to the next, but there is little variety.
*The paper moves from one idea to the next, but there is little variety.
*The transitions between ideas are unclear or nonexistent.
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Style & Sentence Fluency
provides a variety of sentence types and uses precise, descriptive language.
provides a variety of sentence types and uses some descriptive language
provides few, if any, sentence types and basic, predictable language.
may provide no sentence variety and uses limited vocabulary
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Language Conventions
contains few, if any, errors in the conventions* of the English language.
may contain some errors in the conventions* of the English language.
may contain several errors in the conventions* of the English language.
may contain serious errors in the conventions* of the English language.
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MLA Format
Paper has a title, 12 pt font, double spacing, 1 margins, indentations and headings
may contain some errors in the MLA format.
May contain several errors in the MLA format.
may contain serious errors in the MLA format
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Citations & Sources
Paper cites concrete details correctly (with a lead-in, parenthetical documentation & quotation
marks) and provides a Works Cited page.
Paper cites concrete details and has a Works Cited page, but contains some errors.
Paper cites concrete details and has a Works Cited page, but contains several errors.
Paper cites concrete details and has a Works Cited page, but contains serious errors.