DooleyHum9HowTo

SelfAssessment.Writeafullparagraph(5sentencesminimum)foreachquestionbelow.Useat
leastonepieceofevidencefromyouressayineachparagraph.

a.Whatdoyouthinkisthestrongestelementofyourpaper?(concessivethesis,NPA,useof
semicolons,useofevidence,etc)
Ipersonallythinkthatthestrongestelementofmypaperwouldbemyconcessivethesis.
Myconcessivethesisstatesthefollowing:WhileJohnthinksthatShakespeareistellinghimto
commitsuicide,Shakespeareisinfactsayingtoenjoylifewhileyoucan.Ifeellikethis
concessivethesisgetstothepoint,isnttoowordy,isclear,andquitepowerfultotheright
person.Ifeelthatthisisareallypowerfulturningpointinmyessaysoitsnotjustacharacter
analysisbutitsalsoaninterpretationofaveryfamousauthorsworks.Whilemyconcessive
thesisissomewhatcomplexwhenyouthinkaboutit,itisphrasedclearlyandsimplywitha
powerfulmeaning.

b.Whatdoyouthinkisthemostbeautifullywordedsentenceyouwrote,andwhy?
ThemostbeautifulsentenceIwrotewasinmyconclusion.Inallhonesty,thisisoneof
thosepointsthatexpresseshowdelusionalthehumanracecanbeandhowvulnerableweareto
misinterpretation.(McKenzie,2)Thissentencecarriesalotofmeaningandstrength,especially
whenyoulookatthephrasing.ThisisoneofthesentencesthatIactuallydidntrefineuntilthe
lastsecond.AtfirstIsoundedreallyunsureofmyselfbyusingwords/phrasessuchascanbe,
maybe,andsomewhat.Iendedupgettingridofthosepartsofthesentencealtogethertomakea
beautifulandstrongsentence.

c.Howdidthegrammarlessonshelpyoustructureyourwritingmoreclearly?Bespecific.Ifnot,
whatotherideasorlessonsmighthavehelpedyoumore?
Thegrammarlessonsreallyhelpedmestructuremywritinginafewdifferentways.
Learninghowtouseasemicolonwasprobablythemostusefulbothintheessayandingeneral.
Inmyessay,IhavethreeusesofasemicolonwhichIthinkmakemelooklikeIknowalot
moreaboutwritingthanIactuallydo.ItmakesmywritinglookmoreprofessionalandIdont
thinkthatthiswouldlooklikeanyofmyfriendswritingfromotherschools(inagoodway).
Semicolonshaveaveryspecificuseandifusedincorrectlyjustmakeyoulooksomewhat
incompetentbutIhopenevertomakethatmistakesinceInowknowwhenandwheretouseone
correctly.

d.Whatoverallgradedoyouthinkyoushouldgetforeachofthefollowingelements?Usea
lettergrade.Bespecificandexplainwhy.


1.Introduction
IthinkthatmyintroductiondeservessomethingbetweenanAandaB.Thisisbecause
itsquiteinformativeandgivesyousomegoodinformationonBraveNewWorldbutitisalso
quitewordy.
2.Firstbodyparagraph
MyfirstbodyparagraphdeservessomethingbetweenaBandanA.Ithinkthisbecause
itsalittlebitmuddledandconfusingatpointsbutingeneralitisveryinformative.
3.Secondbodyparagraph
IfeelthatmysecondbodyparagraphdeservessomethingbetweenaC+andaB.Itsnot
thestrongestparagraphforsupportingmyargumentbutitisratherwellwritten.
4.Conclusion
IwouldsaythatmyconclusiondeservesaC+oraB.ItsquiterushedandyoucantellI
didntcareasmuchatthatpointwithmyessay.Ireallyhatesayingitbutitstrue.
e.Overall,whatgradeshouldyourpaperreceive?Why?Behonestwithyourself.
IthinkthatmyessayasawholedeservessomethingbetweenaBandanA.Ithinkits
quitewellwritten,hasaninterestingtopic,andisprettywellrevised.Ontheotherhand,towards
theendoftheessay,itgetsabitsloppy,maybeabitofftopic,andyoucanreallytellthatIdidnt
wanttodoitanddidthebareminimum.Itisstillwellwrittenanddeservessomethingbetweena
BandanA.