What the world economy means to me?

Economy for me is the producers, distributors and consumers of goods

and service in a community.
Economy is the science that means that the producers need consumers so
they gain money and for example in Christmas the Christmas trees are
more expensive because in that time is when everybody buy, also when
people need to buy toys in Christmas the price goes up because the
know that people need toys, even if they are expensive people need
them so they buy them.
Also you need to have a balance of prices because if they are very
expensive people will not buy so you will lose consumers, but if you
put the price short everything will end fast and you will also lose
consumers, but if you have a balance the sellers and consumers will
get benefit because the consumers have what they need and sellers will
have money to produce more of their products. In economy there are
three different things, the supply, demand and price. Supply are the
ones that sell, demand are those who buy and price is what keeps everything moving.
In conclusion economy is very important because it is what moves all the
world, it has power because as above is written it moves all the word.
Money plays an important role in economy because basically it is what
moves economy.
Diana soto 8

You have made a strong start here, but it quickly starts to sound repetitive, you need to
make a statement and then move on. I also think you may be plagiarising the opening.
It needs punctuation badly! It is actually starting to limit meaning.
You also have a few mistakes in word choice, form and with prepositions.

Area
Task Response

high
fully addresses all parts of the task
presents a fully developed position in
answer to the question with relevant,
fully
extended and well supported ideas

Coherence and
Cohesion

uses cohesion in such a way that it

attracts no attention
skilfully manages paragraphing
uses a wide range of vocabulary
with very natural and
sophisticated control of lexical
features; rare minor errors occur
only as slips

Lexical Resource

Grammatical
Range and
Accuracy
Formatting

uses a wide range of structures with

full flexibility and accuracy; rare minor
errors occur only as slips
Emails have name, class, and title in
subject line.

low
barely responds to the
task
does not express a
position
may attempt to
present one or two
ideas
but there is no
development
has very little control
of organizational
features
uses an extremely
limited range
of vocabulary;
essentially no
control of word
formation and/or
spelling
cannot use sentence
forms except in
memorized phrases
Student fails to use
formatting

20-0

Grade
18

20-0

16

20-0

17

20-0

18

10

10

Paragraphs
Capitalization and
punctuation.

Essay has a title, name, and class.

Other formatting guidelines are
followed.
Student uses paragraph structures.
Forming them correctly based around
subject
Student uses both competently and
fluidly.

Student fails to use

any form.

Student fails to use

any.
doesnt use sentence
structure

100-0

Total
89