Economy

By Jose Luis Tarazona

To me economy means the quality of life, the ranking of each country, and how good its is
its the administration.
Economy has different meanings for each individual, but for me it has several meanings
like the quality of life. The quality of life, of each country depend on how good its economy
is, because it is the main muscle that move it social order, it government, cultural aspects,
and internal or external business. For example, Colombia is a clear examples of how
countries depend on economy to determine prices of food, work, or the quality of life in
social classes. The economy of each country helps to know how good it is in general
aspects, show how stable it is, its social order, and how at international terms in other
words its global ranking. Im trying to say that economy is the main pillar of each nation;
economy gives data that show how good it is and this is compare with the other nations
information giving the global ranking and showing how good it is. Economy play different
roles in nations, but it doesnt mean that it work alone. A good and strong economy need a
good administration, in other words a good government is the clear example of a good
administration.
Concluding, economy have a very great importances in our society and lifes, it cover
different aspects such as quality of life, the global ranking of each country, and country or
political administration as I already mention this is the way that most of the global nation
move .
Ok, you have some good material here, but it needs work. Problems with word choice and
conjugation. One sentence that I dont quite understand, so can help you correct it.

Area
Task Response

high
fully addresses all parts of the task
presents a fully developed position in
answer to the question with relevant,
fully
extended and well supported ideas

Coherence and
Cohesion

uses cohesion in such a way that it

attracts no attention
skilfully manages paragraphing
uses a wide range of vocabulary
with very natural and
sophisticated control of lexical
features; rare minor errors occur
only as slips

Lexical Resource

low
barely responds to the
task
does not express a
position
may attempt to
present one or two
ideas
but there is no
development
has very little control
of organizational
features
uses an extremely
limited range
of vocabulary;
essentially no
control of word
formation and/or

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Grammatical
Range and
Accuracy
Formatting

Paragraphs

Capitalization and
punctuation.

uses a wide range of structures with

full flexibility and accuracy; rare minor
errors occur only as slips
Emails have name, class, and title in
subject line.
Essay has a title, name, and class.
Other formatting guidelines are
followed.
Student uses paragraph structures.
Forming them correctly based around
subject
Student uses both competently and
fluidly.

spelling
cannot use sentence
forms except in
memorized phrases
Student fails to use
formatting

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10

10

Student fails to use

any form.

Student fails to use

any.
doesnt use sentence
structure

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