What does economy mean to you? (What does it cover?

)
Economy has had a great impact during the last century all over the world,
nearly everything revolves around it. I think that economy has an immense
importance nowadays to everyone, anywhere because whether we like it or not,
it is economy that controls the people, even if the people are the ones who
control economy.
The way that I see it, people live, kill and die for money. It has taken so much
power that it has become really divisive in terms of society. It divides continents,
countries, cities and social classes, it defines everything. The wealthiest ones will
always be on top of the others no matter what and even if we open our minds to
a community of equality; the richest will be worth more than the ones lacking the
monetary resources.
To the majority of the people around the world, we can have a good life if we
possess abundant luxury, but is that really a good life? Economy covers the
possibility of having more, but is that really what matters? There are things that
we do need to cover with economy, like health and education. It may also include
fun and innumerable things that come along, such as home, clothing trends and
new watches, but so does it include suffering. Even surrounded by every
millionaire that pretends to be a friend, people get lonely.
We have become so blind to what is really important in life and we have lost the
meaning of living happily because we have craven too deep into possessing the
most and newest. It is hard to change people's minds when in such a short time
a human creation has taken control over humanity and yes, economy brings
some joy but what truly matters, money cannot buy.
Natalia Torres Jaramillo, 8C.
A very strong opinion piece, well done.
Area
Task Response

high
fully addresses all parts of the task
presents a fully developed position in
answer to the question with relevant,
fully
extended and well supported ideas

Coherence and
Cohesion

uses cohesion in such a way that it

attracts no attention
skilfully manages paragraphing
uses a wide range of vocabulary
with very natural and
sophisticated control of lexical
features; rare minor errors occur
only as slips

Lexical Resource

Grammatical
Range and
Accuracy
Formatting

uses a wide range of structures with

full flexibility and accuracy; rare minor
errors occur only as slips
Emails have name, class, and title in
subject line.
Essay has a title, name, and class.

low
barely responds to the
task
does not express a
position
may attempt to
present one or two
ideas
but there is no
development
has very little control
of organizational
features
uses an extremely
limited range
of vocabulary;
essentially no
control of word
formation and/or
spelling
cannot use sentence
forms except in
memorized phrases
Student fails to use
formatting

20-0

Grade
20

20-0

20

20-0

20

20-0

20

10

10

Paragraphs

Capitalization and
punctuation.

Other formatting guidelines are

followed.
Student uses paragraph structures.
Forming them correctly based around
subject
Student uses both competently and
fluidly.

Student fails to use

any form.

Student fails to use

any.
doesnt use sentence
structure

100-0

total
100