What does economy mean to you?

What does it cover?

Stephania Vargas 8C
Gavin hill
March 10, 2015
English

Economy around the world

Basically economy is the system that a country/city country or city uses for the
production and distribution of supplies that generate the country and receive
(what?). The purpose of this essay is to explain how economy affects small
countries or cities and also what economy covers in the countries and cities.
Economy is important for the development of every city/country. Economy
brings in money for the country by exchanging materials with other countries,
for example: Colombia has many oil wells and Puerto Rico has many water
resources, so they can trade water for oil and this helps for the reproduction of
both countries.
Economy does not just cover economically countries, it also covers all the
needs of the people. For Example: by distributing resources inside the country
that other cities need, it benefits people that live there because they are
receiving the resources they need.
When you say economy covers education and health it means that with the
money the country collects when trading with outsiders it is used to improve
the public schools and hospitals buildings, safety and quality.
Economy does not only bring great things to countries. The selling of poor
quality resources in countries causes "weaknesses" for/in the country, because
you can run out of good quality resources to exchange and this also generates
a serious drop in the country's development. If the material received from other
countries is of bad quality, it can bring economic stagnation, health problems,
etc., because the materials received can't help to struggle against these

problems, medicine can't cure patients and there are high levels of
unemployment.
When exchanging with unknown countries (this sounds as if known countries
never cause problems like this?), it can bring drug trafficking inside the country
and this generates political and critical drug addiction problems.
In conclusion I think economy is fundamental for every country or city because
money is essential to live and economy generates that. Also if it is used
properly, it can bring new work opportunities and help to the development of
many companies and that help to the development of the country. If not, it can
bring several problems as it has happens in Colombia. Economy must have a
proper use for the country to get benefit and benefit others.
A nice essay and quite well reasoned.
Problems with pronouns, prepositions, word choice, conjugation and in places
word order (or strange or inappropriate usage)
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Task Response

high
fully addresses all parts of the task
presents a fully developed position in
answer to the question with relevant, fully
extended and well supported ideas

Coherence and
Cohesion

uses cohesion in such a way that it

attracts no attention
skilfully manages paragraphing
uses a wide range of vocabulary
with very natural and
sophisticated control of lexical
features; rare minor errors occur
only as slips

Lexical Resource

Grammatical Range uses a wide range of structures with

and Accuracy
full flexibility and accuracy; rare minor
errors occur only as slips
Formatting
Emails have name, class, and title in
subject line.
Essay has a title, name, and class.
Other formatting guidelines are followed.
Paragraphs
Student uses paragraph structures.
Forming them correctly based around
subject
Capitalization and
Student uses both competently and
punctuation.
fluidly.

low
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may attempt to present
one or two ideas
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development
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organizational
features
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of vocabulary; essentially
no
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memorized phrases
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formatting

Grade
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Student fails to use any

form.

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doesnt use sentence
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