Natalia Rojas

8C
Mr. Gabin Hill
What is economy for me?
We all depend on money because of the evolution humans have
had during the times. In order to satisfy the desire people have for
material things, money is needed. This money is what supports
everything around the world, from the smallest lemonade company
to the biggest World Trade Center. //These companies, shops, and
small business need to have something called economy. This thing
called economy is how society is organized in order to produce,
distribute and consume the its material needs over time. Most of the
material things that are consumed by society are usually used to
evolve and while they evolve their prices increase too. The
economic system works in 3 stages: production, distribution and
consumption of different goods and services that you find in the
same place or in the outside. The economy is used in different
agencies that need the three stages. They can be individuals,
businesses, organizations or governments. The economy also
shows the progress of something, for example, culture, education
and all the things an agency needs in order to progress in the
economic world. The economy can be divided into 2 big fields,
which are: microeconomic and macroeconomic fields.
Microeconomic field is the one in charge of the agencies,
employees and consumers. It also explains the reason for
the prices of services and the salaries that is given to the people.
Macroeconomic field is the total of national production and also
what it has to do with national exportation.
In conclusion economy its is really important for the world and to
each nation. As its really important is we needed to take care of it
because there are some people that are really selfish and can be
corrupted with by money. when this happens the economy can be
damaged.
A very strong start here, well done.
Though I would have been nice if you could have spelt my name correctly ;)
You have some mistakes with prepositions, youre mistaking the use of its and it
s.

Area
Task Response

high
fully addresses all parts of the task
presents a fully developed position in
answer to the question with relevant,
fully
extended and well supported ideas

Coherence and
Cohesion

uses cohesion in such a way that it

attracts no attention
skilfully manages paragraphing
uses a wide range of vocabulary
with very natural and
sophisticated control of lexical
features; rare minor errors occur
only as slips

Lexical Resource

Grammatical
Range and
Accuracy
Formatting

Paragraphs

Capitalization and
punctuation.

uses a wide range of structures with

full flexibility and accuracy; rare minor
errors occur only as slips
Emails have name, class, and title in
subject line.
Essay has a title, name, and class.
Other formatting guidelines are
followed.
Student uses paragraph structures.
Forming them correctly based around
subject
Student uses both competently and
fluidly.

low
barely responds to the
task
does not express a
position
may attempt to
present one or two
ideas
but there is no
development
has very little control
of organizational
features
uses an extremely
limited range
of vocabulary;
essentially no
control of word
formation and/or
spelling
cannot use sentence
forms except in
memorized phrases
Student fails to use
formatting

20-0

Grade
18

20-0

15

20-0

18

20-0

17

10

10

Student fails to use

any form.

Student fails to use

any.
doesnt use sentence
structure

100-0

total
87