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or other reasons of
the change.

How this change

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readers to understand

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different genres.

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give this is so close to being a I rewrite the second part

specific formal explanations thesis statement that I to

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of why things happened to absolutely love. I think non-academic

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achieve my real goal: to

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explore the conventions

papers,

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share several similarities. your argument?

papers. Both authors

of academic papers.

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formal

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paragraph clearer and

choose

fairly

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there is a big headline of intended to explore the the

background

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sentence at the start of

introduction to each paper.

every paragraph.

my paper more flow.

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the

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writing generally.

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sounds informal? Rhetoric from using free-floating the course reading, Janet

readers to understand

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the

appropriately for a given probably going to be left to show why I would use

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situation, one [situation]

wonder what does this

wondering,

Who

is this quote and where

that is determined by the saying/citing this, and did it come from.

expectations

of

cited

evidence.

quote mean?.

your how/why is it relevant?

audience. (Janet 57)

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To help to explain one

well-educated audience, the opportunity to explain the after it These terms are

of

author of the Forecasting significance/style of these so professional that they

terms and make this

uses many terms, like types of words. What can

point more solid.

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the authors use?

the

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people

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that these terms are
only selected for the
well-educated ones.

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author cites many quotes
from government officials
like Franklin D. Roosevelt
and other significant
oil-entrepreneurs to back
up his argument.

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Make a single word

casual.

more formal and make

enhance

the tone of the whole

paper more academic.