Reviewer:

Writer:
Peer Review: Exploring an Event
Directions: Please respond to the following questions in as much detail as possible.
Writers: list two or three questions or concerns you have about your draft that youd like to discuss with your
group. (Reviewers: Be sure to address these questions here)

Clarity
1. Point out any confusing sentences or passages. Were you able to follow the general direction of the
story easily? Explain. Yes, I was able to follow the general direction of the story, it had a good flow
and the writer explained herself on why writing made her second guess yourself.

Persuasiveness
2. Is the change or revelation apparent? Is it subtle and nuanced or does it feel too explicitly stated? No,
it does not. The writer went into detail on why writing made her nervous and gave an example of
when writing made her nervous.

3. Are there any ideas or phrases that strike you as well-worn or clich? No.

Concrete Details
4. Point out places where the writer effectively uses concrete, sensory details to illuminate their ideas,
making them come alive. The writer talked about how her family influenced her that she is a great
writer and that boosted her confidence.

Strength of Introduction and Conclusion

5. Does the introduction/hook create interest? How? Yes, because the writer starts off by talking about
how writing is a good stress reliever.

6. Does the conclusion feel like it has weight? Does it feel meaningful, like a mic drop, or insubstantial?
How could it be improved? Yes, its a meaningful conclusion because the writer is talking about what
she would like to get out of writing and explains how she feels after.

Most Successful Passage

7. Choose a passage (1-4 sentences) and explain why it is successful. When the writer gave her example
about her paper for breast cancer I think the writer did a good choice and read and did research on the
topic and talked to her family.

8. Point out any special successes with the structure of the narrative, whether its linear or utilizes
flashback or other more complicated elements.

Style
9. Long sentences are fine if they move well, but point out any parts that seem choppy (short) or
pretentious (wordy). The writer did a great job with her essay there is no parts that seem choppy or
pretentious. She explained why writing made her nervous and gave an example of when it made her
nervous.

10. Do any words or phrases stand out as particularly striking, beautiful, or unexpected? Which ones? I
liked when the writer explained why writing became a stress reliever to the writer, and also that she is
doing what she can to become a better writer.

Editing
11. Dont do a complete editing job, but do point out the most distracting slips in usage and mechanics.
The writer did a good job at proof reading her essay everything seems to fit together.

Other
12. Note any other questions or feedback you have for the writer here. This is important: since every
paper is unique, they will each have their own successes and concerns that may not be addressed
above. I have no questions about the writer essay, she explained everything the best she could.

Next Steps
13. Work with the writer to devise a plan for revision. Summarize the writers next steps here.

The writers next step are to go to the writing center and seek more help on improving her essay.