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Requirements: Five paragraphs totalling 500 words, typed in Arial black 12 point font. Each body paragraph
should include two quotes, either from A Long Way Gone or from an article.
Outline due Friday, February 27
Final draft due Friday, March 6
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Another form of pain is emotional also Ishmael feels fear all the time and finds himself running from his
own shadow. The reason he run from his shadow is because he know hes not himself so he cant look his self
in his eyes because he feel ashame and he always afraid someone after him. Often my shadow would scare
me and cause me to run for miles. pg (49) He was caught between not wanting to sleep because he was
afraid but didnt have no choice but to sleep because being awake brought back painful memories. I was
afraid to fall asleep, but staying awake also brought back painful memories. (Beah) pg (19) This shows he
could never be from of those bad memories he had in the past.
In this paragraph It will show you how children in Sierra Leone get affected by the violence socially.
People were terrified because they heard rumors of the young age boys that they were force to kill their
families and burn their villages. People were terrified of boys are age. (Beah)pg (37) During the war even
young innocent boys were treated like they were killers. This made them feel ashamed and feel like their bad
human beings even though they were force to kill. He press his fingers on his eyelids because he miss his
family and is stress out ! wish he could do something . I pressed my fingers on my eyelids to hold back my
tears and wished that I could have my family together again.(Beah 45) Children were in deep pain from losing
their family.
Violence affect children physically,emotionally,socially Children was affected by hunger losing their
family and torchured and abuse to kill when they dont want to. Violence is terrible for kids to face.
2nd DRAFT
INTRODUCTION
Hook
Imagine losing your family and being force to fight in a war at a very young age.
Background
Im writing this essay to show how violence affects children. I will explore how
violence affects children who are forced to fight in wars. this happen in Sierra Leone
during the civil war.
Thesis
Introduce quote
Quote
(with citation)
That night we were so hungry that we stole peoples food while they slept. pg (Beah
29)
Explain quote
This shows the pain of hunger made him do things he never would've done before.
Introduce quote
The pain of hunger made him so hurt that he couldnt even cry from the incident that
had happened.
Quote
(with citation)
Explain quote
PARAGRAPH 2 TOPIC:
Topic Sentence
Another form of pain is emotional also Ishmael feels fear all the time and finds
himself running from his own shadow.
Introduce quote
The reason he run from his shadow is because he know hes not himself so he cant
look his self in his eyes because he feel ashame and he always afraid someone after
him.
Quote
(with citation)
Often my shadow would scare me and cause me to run for miles. pg (49)
Explain quote
Introduce quote
He was caught between not wanting to sleep because he was afraid but didnt have
no choice but to sleep because being awake brought back painful memories.
Quote
(with citation)
I was afraid to fall asleep, but staying awake also brought back painful memories.
(Beah) pg (19)
Explain
This shows he could never be from of those bad memories he had in the past.
In this paragraph It will show you how children in Sierra Leone get affected by the
violence socially.
Introduce quote
People were terrified because they heard rumors of the young age boys that they
were force to kill their families and burn their villages.
Quote
(with citation)
Explain quote
During the war even young innocent boys were treated like they were killers. This
made them feel ashamed and feel like their bad human beings even though they
were force to kill.
Introduce quote
He press his fingers on his eyelids because he miss his family and is stress out !
wish he could do something .
Quote
(with citation)
I pressed my fingers on my eyelids to hold back my tears and wished that I could
have my family together again.(Beah 45)
Explain quote
CONCLUSION
Restate Thesis
Sum up main
points
Children was affected by hunger losing their family and torchured and abuse to kill
when they dont want to.
Final conclusion
OUTLINE
INTRODUCTION
Hook
Imagine losing your family and being force to fight in a war at a very young age
Background
Thesis
Introduce quote
Quote
(with citation)
That night we were so hungry that we stole peoples food while they slept pg (29)
Explain quote
This shows the pain of hunger made him do things he never would've done before
Introduce quote
The pain of hunger made him so hurt that he couldnt even cry from the incident that
had happened
Quote
(with citation)
Explain quote
PARAGRAPH 2 TOPIC:
Topic Sentence
Introduce quote
The reason he run from his shadow is because he know hes not himself so he cant
look his self in his eyes because he feel ashame and he always afraid someone after
him
Quote
(with citation)
Often my shadow would scare me and cause me to run for miles. pg (49)
Explain quote
Introduce quote
He was caught between not wanting to sleep because he was afraid but didnt have
no choice but to sleep because being awake brought back painful memories
Quote
(with citation)
I was afraid to fall asleep, but staying awake also brought back painful memories.
pg (19)
Explain
This shows he could never be from of those bad memories he had in the past
In this paragraph It will show you how children in Sierra Leone get affected by the
violence socially.
Introduce quote
People were terrified because they heard rumors of the young age boys that they
Explain quote
During the war even young innocent boys were treated like they were killers.
Introduce quote
He press his fingers on his eyelids because he miss his family and is stress out and
wish he could do something
Quote
(with citation)
I pressed my fingers on my eyelids to hold back my tears and wished that I could
have my family together again. pg (45)
Explain quote
CONCLUSION
Restate Thesis
Sum up main
points
Children was affected by hunger losing their family and torchured and abuse to kill
when they dont want to.
Final conclusion
Works Cited
Beah, I. (2007). A Long Way Gone. New York: Farrar, Straus and Giroux.
Smith, D. (2001, September). Children in the heat of war. American Psychological Association. Retrieved
from: http://www.apa.org/monitor/sep01/childwar.aspx
Community Violence: The Effects on Children. The Child Study Center. Retrieved from:
http://www.aboutourkids.org/articles/community_violence_effects_children