December 9, 2015

Dr. Leslie Bruce

Department of English, Comparative Literature, and Linguistics
California State University, Fullerton
P.O. Box 34080
Fullerton, CA 92834-9480

Dear Dr. Bruce,

This letters purpose is to demonstrate that I have improved mastery on all of the student
learning objectives throughout the fall 2015 semester. The documents include: my original iFixit
Resume with both instructor and peer-review with comments along with a revised copy;
Electronic Waste presentation slide with bibliography, and the September 17th Writers Notebook
entry on rhetorical situations. In order to demonstrate I have mastered each SLO, I will discuss
how each document meets each student learning objective in the order of how they are included
in Weebly.
The first document I included is my iFixit Resume, which satisfies four of the SLOs. In
order to meet the first student learning objective, Rhetorical Focus, I wrote in a formal manner
using a visually attractive and persuasive resume. In order to include evidence of leadership
qualities I wrote using an objective tone rather than using diction from the first or second person
point of view. Evidence was written in objective language in order to persuade you that I was
qualified for a leadership position in the iFixit project.
Another SLO satisfied by the iFixit Resume is Persuasion. The purpose of the resume
was to persuade you that I was qualified to be an effective leader for the iFixit project. Although
I included an adequate amount of evidence, I believe I could have included more. In order to
address this, I not only included more evidence, but also improved my word choice by replacing
common verbs with strong verbs. This error has now been fixed by including more evidence and
has been uploaded to the final portfolio in order to demonstrate that I have improved upon my
ability persuasive capabilities in writing.
The third SLO the resume fulfills is Organization. The iFixit Resume meets this objective
in a variety of ways. My organization on the resume includes using headings and subheadings to
address various topics such as Key Skills and Experience. Under each heading are the
subheadings such as: Verbal Communication, Listening Skills, and Time Management. I think
my resume will convince you that I am capable of organizing my thoughts logically.
The fourth student learning objective the resume satisfies is Language and Design. The
resumes diction relies more on objective words rather than using informal language. It also
includes white space that was commented as very attractive. The fonts I used for the headings
could have been better. Initially, they were the same size as the subheadings and after revisions, I
have submitted an updated resume with headings having a larger font than subheadings. I believe

that my usage of objective diction, white space, and overall design will convince you that I have
an exceptional grasp on Language and Design.
The next document is the electronic waste presentation slide. This document
demonstrates the Collaboration, Rhetorical Focus, and Ethical Citation student learning
objectives. The slide I included is an example of Rhetorical Focus that addressed both peers and
you, making it address a variety of audiences. The e-waste slide satisfies the Collaboration SLO
in that I worked with a team of peers in order to produce a power point presentation on child
labor and electronics production. Our team discussed the topic and decided which areas we
would focus on in order to emphasize the significance of child labor in electronics production.
One of the student learning objectives is Ethical Citation. This skill is required in all majors and
is important to avoid plagiarism. In the slide included, I cited a website in order to give them
credit for the information I used in my slides. I believe that this document will persuade you that
I am more than able at meeting these three student learning objectives.
The final document I have included is an entry from the Writers Notebook. This entry
fulfills a part of the rhetorical focus student learning objective, informal writing. The entry from
the Writers Notebook is written in a first person point of view, a form of informal writing.
Therefore I believe that this will convince you that I am capable of writing in an informal
manner. After reading this letter, I hope you recognize my improvements on my weaknesses and
strengths. Thank you for reviewing my letter, and I hope this letter helps you understand the way
I structured my portfolio.

Sincerely,
Tony Thai