Proposal and recommendation report revisions improved the structure and fluidity of my papers. The proposal revision process took some time to figure out. With the recommendation report revision, I decided to drastically revise the methodology section.
Proposal and recommendation report revisions improved the structure and fluidity of my papers. The proposal revision process took some time to figure out. With the recommendation report revision, I decided to drastically revise the methodology section.
Proposal and recommendation report revisions improved the structure and fluidity of my papers. The proposal revision process took some time to figure out. With the recommendation report revision, I decided to drastically revise the methodology section.
The revision choices I made for the proposal and the recommendation report overall improved the structure and fluidity of my papers. The revision process went along gradually as I reviewed the genre conventions and assignment instructions for both the proposal and recommendation report. The proposal revision process took some time to figure out. I read through the proposal quite a bit and I first looked on how the sections of the paper fit together. I reviewed the genre convention of a proposal in the Technical and Communication Today book to start jumpstart where I should edit. I began to edit the introduction by expanding on the problem of radioactive waste, removing other sentences that were in the way, and stressed on the importance of the waste issue more. Then I moved along to the current situation section and added more evidence about the incidental events that unfolded at the WIPP site. I also added information into the project plan section and corrected sentence structure throughout the rest of the entire document. I mostly revised the content to clarify ideas that were unclear or needed more evidence to further illustrate a point I was trying to get across. The revisions I made help the document to be more concise in convincing the audience (which is directed towards the WIPP engineer board) about the need to accept the proposal of a new facility for radioactive waste. Overall, the revision process for the proposal went well and I was able to find ways to revise the document the way I envisioned it to be. With the recommendation report revision, I carefully reviewed comments about areas of my paper that needed to be addressed. I examined the structure of my paper and scanned through these sections, reading them to gain a better understanding of what I needed to do. I decided to drastically revise the methodology section and I added more information about what I did. I edited the survey section in phase two by making a table of the questions I asked the classmates of mine about Louies Rock-N-Reels. I also moved the information in which I observed the store in detail to the results section because it made more sense there. I clarified my discussion of results section because it was confusing and I changed my final recommendation to reflect the new conclusions that I came to. I focused more on the accessibility of the store and how to improve the entrance to it. These changes I made improved the solutions for the store and made it more clear what I wanted to accomplish in describing my final recommendation. The audience can understand the recommendation report with more clarity. Thank you for an awesome semester in English. I have learned so much and I appreciate it.