Mentor Text | Agitate & Apply

NAME: Gaby Villate

ENG 101

Type or paste at least a paragraph or two in the left column. Then, rereading your
mentor text annotations, agitate your textshake it up a little, in other wordsby
infusing your own writing with some of the techniques youve learned from your
writing mentor. Imitate, but do not duplicate; be inspired and insightful and know
that not every authors style will gel with your own. The idea here is to try
something newand in so doing, refine and discover your own style.
Mentor:
Mentor text:
Mode(s) of
development

Malala Yousafzai
Nobel Lecture
Narration, analysis

Your Rough Draft

Being yourself is awfully difficult. Anyone
who claims to have truly accomplished
individuality is either lying or an
incredibly brave person.

Your Agitated Text

Being yourself is awfully difficult. Anyone
who claims to have truly accomplished
individuality is either lying or an
incredibly brave person.

Its rather complicated to define

individuality. Something that has surely
happened to each one of us is imitating
someone who you admire. We strive to
be like our heroes, so we take bits and
pieces of them and in turn make our own
self.

Its rather complicated to define

individuality. Something that has surely
happened to each one of us is imitating
someone who you admire. We strive, we
strive to be like our heroes, so we take
bits and pieces of them and in turn make
our own self.

Perhaps this does not create true

individuality, but with so much
interaction between people, there is no
way to confirm whether it is or not.

Perhaps this does not create true

individuality, but with so much
interaction between people, there is no
way to confirm whether it is or not. Is
being unique what it means to be
individual? Must no one be similar in any
way?

We are the people we love, everything

we love about them. Yet we continue to
be our own people, the mesh of traits
taking shape to create new, unique
characteristics. What matters is
accepting the person we are.

We are the people we love.

We are everything we love about them.
We are our own people, the mesh of
traits taking shape to create new, unique
characteristics.
What matters is accepting the person we
are.

Mentor Text | Agitate & Apply

NAME: Gaby Villate

ENG 101
*Highlight changes from the rough draft,
please.

What salient features of your mentor text did you apply in your revision? Why?
The features I used from my mentor text are her tendency to repeat phrases twice,
her use of rhetorical questions, and her use of anaphora. I used the repetition
because I felt it gave an importance to phrases and caught the audiences attention
well. I thought the rhetorical questions would work well with my topic since it is very
broad and hard to boil down to one definition, so getting the listener to think about
it would help. The anaphora makes it seem so much more dramatic and the sound
of it is especially strong, but I am unsure of whether or not it works well in this part
of my speech.