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Introduction
Hellooo. My name is Goldilocks. I am a golf ball and am--you never would have guessed
this--the color gold. Chloe started hitting me in 2008, when she was four years old. She started
playing with her older brother, Cody, six years old, and grandmother, Jackie, no idea how many
years old--they would do everything together.
Jackie was constantly disappearing throughout the summer and one day, Cody bravely
walked up to her and asked, Where are you going?
To the golf course, she replied.
What do you do there?
I play golf.
Can I play golf?
Sure, next time.
Chloe, who had been sitting on the couch, watching her favorite TV show, Go Diego Go,
jumped up and ran over to them. I wanna play golf, too, she exclaimed.
And so, the next day, Jackie went to the sporting goods store and bought two golf bags,
a pink one and an orange one, and signed them up for junior golf at Pelican Lakes Golf Course
in Windsor, Colorado.
One day, after we were named, we were playing at Pelican Lakes, and on the first hole,
Chloe hit me a little sideways, and I ended up in the potentially snake-infested dead grass.
Chloe wanted to look for me, but Jackie told her not to, because of the possibility of the snakes.
Chloe said something along the lines of I have to find Goldilocks! She searched for about ten
minutes until she finally found me. Then I got put in time-out and have been in the golf bag ever
since.
was a lightning storm and told the golfers to get off of the course and get back to the clubhouse.
Jackie told Chloe to get into the golf cart, as she went to grab Silvie. Chloe was surprised and
scared, so Jackie drove, very fast, I might add. They didnt play the rest of the hole or course.
Then, another day on hole five, the golf cart was low on gas and they got stuck. Jackie
called the Pro Shop and someone brought a new cart. They kept playing and on hole six that
same day, Chloe found a Callaway, which is a better brand of ball than my sisters and I. My
sisters and I were excited to finally have a brother.
The third time the curse went into play, Chloe hit Silvie into the dead grass, as she did
with me at Pelican Lakes years ago. She looked and looked for at least fifteen minutes, but
never found her. Afterward, Chloe was so upset that they just went home.
The next time they played, she used the Callaway (she curiously never named him). On
the fifth hole that day, she missed the green and hit the Callaway a long way, over the dead
grass, that she had hit Silvie into, next to the white tee of the next hole. Chloe and Jackie went
to go look for him and a couple of golfers asked if they had lost a ball. Jackie said yes and one
of the golfers pointed to the ball.
The fifth time they played, nothing bad happened. Chloe hit the Callaway onto the green
and two-putted, getting a par. Thank goodness, the curse had ended!
Conclusion
Obviously, golf and us golf balls are a very important part of Chloes life. With each golf
bag, Chloe did either junior golf or had private lessons. With each bag, she got better, hitting the
ball farther and more consistently. And with each bag, she had more of a strive to keep playing
and get better. As her favorite, retired golf ball, I cant wait to see how far Chloe goes in her golf
career.
Memoir
LT: I can write a descriptive memoir!
CRITERI
A
ADVANCED 4
PROFICIENT 3
PARTIALLY
PROFICIENT
2
I can
write about
myself using
Th
oughts
and
feelings
Di
alogue
H
as some
element
s of my
personal
ity
INSUFFICIENT
EVIDENCE - 1
About
me
I can
write about
myself using
Co
nvincing
thoughts
and
feelings
Aut
hentic
dialogue
Sh
aring
many
aspects
of my
personali
ty
I can
write about
myself using
Th
oughts
and
feelings
Dia
logue
Sh
ows my
personali
ty
Use in
my
memoir
a
proble
m or
conflict
with a
climax/
high
point in
the
story
that
connect
s to the
so
what
A
working
plan/or
ganized
piece of
writing.
Your
story
I can
tell about a
problem that
occurred and
needs a
solution
provide a high
point in my
story
write a strong
conclusion that
wraps up the
plot and
connects to the
so what
I can
tell about a
problem or
event
provide a
high point in
my story
write a
conclusion that
wraps up the
plot
I can
tell about an
incident in my
life, but it
doesnt really
tell a story so
my reader
does not care
about it
write a
conclusion
I can
write just the
facts
I can
focus my
ideas so that
my main idea is
interesting and
clear
create a flow
in my story that
I can
write about
ideas that are
interesting
create a story
that has a clear
beginning,
middle and
I can
put my ideas
in writing but
they are not
connected. It
is difficult for
my reader to
understand
I can
Brainstorm
many ideas, but
I havent figure
out a central
topic or theme
yet
Have ideas in
I can
write about
myself, but I
dont share
much about
myself.
use
dialogue,
but
conversati
on is not
realistic
my
personalit
y doesnt
come
through
needs
to have
a so
what.
carries my
reader along
include a
larger purpose
to my writing.
My so what is
easily to
discern
end.
include a
larger purpose,
although my so
what may be
hard to figure
out
what is going
on in the story
write a story
but there is no
larger purpose
Conven
tions
I can
Edit my
writing so that
there are ZERO
errors in
grammar,
punctuation,
capitalization,
and spelling
Keep
consistence
verb tense
throughout
Punctuate my
dialogue
correctly
I can
Edit my
writing so that
there are
THREE OR LESS
errors in
grammar,
capitalization,
punctuation,
and spelling
I can
Edit my
writing, but I
am still
making some
consistent
errors in
capitalization,
spelling,
grammar,
punctuation
that have a
negative
impact on the
overall quality
of writing
In-Class
Work
Time
I can
Utilize my
time wisely in
order to
produce an
excellent paper
Refrain from
distracting my
friends and
peers
Ask questions
when I need
help
I can
Usually use
my time
positively in
order to
produce a well
written paper
Usually
refrain from
distracting my
friends and
peers
Usually ask
questions if I
need help
I can
Sometimes
use my time in
a positive way
in order to
produce a
finished paper
Sometimes
refrain from
distracting my
friends and
peers, but I/we
are often off
task
Sometimes
ask questions
if I need help
my head, but
Im having a
hard time
getting them on
the paper
Use some
details, but I
may be
repeating or
listing them.
I can
Edit my
writing, but my
piece is difficult
to understand
due to
consistent
errors in
capitalization,
grammar,
spelling, and
punctuation
I can
Occasionally
use my time in
a positive way
to work on my
paper, but I am
usually off task
and lack focus
Occasionally
refrain from
distracting my
friends and
peers, but more
often than not,
we are not using
our time wisely
Occasionally
ask questions if
I need help
Chloe,
This a fabulous paper! I am so impressed and would like to use it as an
exemplar for future classes. You used dialogue extremely well, I couldnt find
any errors that needed correcting, and you wrote in such a way that I wanted
to know more! I love hearing about your golf journey and am very sad you
couldnt find Silvie! Thank you for a fun read!