Mentor Text

Early Rombergia

Behindthescenesofansweringandanalyzingtheprompt:
WhatmadeearlyRombergiaacivilization?

Goal1:WhatdoyoualreadyknowaboutearlyRombergia?
(useextrapaperifnecessary)

EarlyRombergia
Reasons
Geography

Religion

Accomplishments

Politicsand
Government

Economics

SocialStructure

InformationIalreadyknowIownthismaterial...

atHPA
twoclassrooms
facethesportcourt

art

AElapbooks
Earthslayerssculptures

HPA
homeroomteachers

specialnamesforeachhomeroom

Goal4:Mockindexcards

Information

Source

Page

GEarlyRombergia

HighPointAcademy

na

HPAfinishedtheamphitheaterin2007.

Paraphrase

Icansaythethismeanstheamphitheaterwas7yearsoldatthetime.

SEarlyRombergia

FeinbergandRomanych

na

Room21isFeinbergian,Room22isRoman.WholegradeisRombergian.

Paraphrase

AEarlyRombergia

Banks

256

Artincludesdrawings,paintings,sculptures,mosaics,andarchitecture.

Quote

Goal5:Writethesis
Sample:
1. Whatisyourtopic?
a. Superman
2. Whatisyourquestion?
a. WhyisSupermansocool?
3. Whatareyourthreereasons?
a. strong
b. helpspeopleindanger
c. canfly
4. PutQandAintoonesentencetomakethesis!
a. Supermaniscoolbecauseheisstrong,helpspeopleindanger,andcanfly.
Yourturn:
1. Whatisyourtopic?
a. EarlyRombergia
2. Whatisyourquestion?
a. Whatmade

earlyRombergiaacivilization?
3. Whatareyourthreereasons?
a. geography
b. accomplishments
c. socialstructure
4. PutQandAintoonesentencetomakethesis!
a. EarlyRombergiawasacivilizationbecauseofclassroomgeography,
accomplishments,andsocialstructure.

Goal7:EssayOutlineMap(
noticefragmentsandsomestructuredsentences)
I.

Introduction
A. Hook
Civilizationscannotexistwithoutpeople
B. Background
Rombergiaestablishedin20142015schoolyear
C. ThesisStatement
EarlyRombergiawasacivilizationbecauseofclassroom
geography,socialstructure,andaccomplishments.

II.

BodyParagraph1
A. TopicSentence(Reason)+TransitionWord
Tobegin,sixthgradegeography
includedthreedistinctspacesonHighPointAcademyscampus.
B. Detail First...classrooms21and22facingthesportcourt.
C. Detail Mostnotably,theclassroomswerejoinedbyaninnerdoorway,calledthe
Rift,whichwasafocalpointofnewinformationandmovementforstudents.
D. Detaill
Spendingtimetogetherwasmadeeveneasierbyclaiming
theseven
yearoldamphitheaterforRombergia(HighPointAcademy).
E. Conclusion/TransitionSentence
Theresultofhavingtwodistinct,yet
physicallyconnectedclassrooms,sparkedthehomeroomstructureoftwo
complementaryhomerooms.

III.

BodyParagraph2
A. TopicSentence(Reason)+TransitionWord
Anaturaleffectoftwophysical
classroomswasasocialstructurewithclearindividualandgroupidentities.
B. Detail
StudentsinRoom21wereFeinbergiansandthoseinRoom22were
Romans(FeinbergandRomanych).
C. Detail However,totakethisastepfurther,thewholegradewasnamed
Rombergians.
D. Detail
Inaddition,theclassroomsgeographywasclaimedasFeinbergiaand
Roma.
E. Conclusion/TransitionSentence
Thesedesignationshavecontinuedtopresent
daywherefellowHighPointAcademyalumniandstaffusetheterm
Rombergians,insteadofsixthgraders,whenreferringtothisgradelevel.

IV.

BodyParagraph3
A. TopicSentence(Reason)+TransitionWord
Justaswithotherancient
civilizations,earlyRombergianscreatedarttoexpresstheirgrowingknowledge.

B. Detail Historiansdescribeartaccomplishmentsas
...drawings,paintings,
sculptures,mosaics,andarchitecture(Banks256).
C. Detail EarlyRombergiansfrequentlycraftedposters,dioramas,andsculptures.
D. Detail
Forexample,Earthslayersandfeaturesweresculptedfromfoam,clay,
andfoodandAncientEgyptwaschronicledwithintricatelydrawnlapbooks.
E. Conclusion/TransitionSentence
Evenafewoftheseworkpiecesremainas
evidenceofproudRombergianeffort.
V.

Conclusion
A. Restatethesisinnewwords
Classroomgeography,socialstructure,and
accomplishmentsmadeearlyRombergiaacivilization.
B. Emphasizeimportantdetail
Twoteachers,withtwoadjoiningclassrooms,made
spaceforallsixthgradestudentstocreateauniquecommunity.
C. Memorablefinalsentence
Togetherness

H.W.Feinych

Feinych1

#1
2.28.2016
EarlyRombergia:AUniqueCivilization
Civilizationsdonotexistwithoutpeople.Duringthe20142015schoolyear,a
uniquecivilizationwasestablishedforsixthgradersatHighPointAcademy.Early
Rombergiawasacivilizationbecauseofclassroomgeography,socialstructure,and
accomplishments.
Tobegin,earlyRombergiasgeographyincludedthreedistinctspacesonHigh
PointAcademyscampus.Theprimarylandscapeincludedclassrooms21and22facing
thesportcourt.Mostnotably,theclassroomswerejoinedbyaninnerdoorway,called
theRift,whichwasafocalpointofnewinformationandmovementforstudents.
Spendingtimetogetherwaseveneasierbyclaiming
thesevenyearoldamphitheater
forRombergia(HighPointAcademy).Asaresult,twocomplementarysocial
structuresbegan.
TheearlyRombergiansocialstructurehadclearhomeroomandwholegrade
identities.StudentsinRoom21wereFeinbergians,andthoseinRoom22were
Romans(FeinbergandRomanych).However,totakethisastepfurther,thewhole
gradewasnamedRombergians.Inaddition,theclassroomsgeographywasclaimedas
FeinbergiaandRoma.Thesedesignationshavecontinuedtopresentdaywherefellow
HighPointAcademyalumniandstaffusethetermRombergians,insteadofsixth
graders,whenreferringtothisgradelevel.

Feinych2
Justaswithotherancientcivilizations,earlyRombergianscreatedarttoexpress
theirgrowingknowledge.
Historiansdescribedartaccomplishmentsas
...drawings,
paintings,sculptures,mosaics,andarchitecture(Banks256).
EarlyRombergians
frequentlycraftedposters,dioramas,andsculptures.Forexample,Earthsfeatures
weresculptedfromfoam,clayandfoodAncientEgyptwaschronicledthrough
intricatelydrawnlapbooks.Afewoftheseartifactsremainasevidenceofproud
Rombergianeffort.
Classroomgeography,socialstructure,andaccomplishmentsmadeearly
Rombergiaacivilization.Twoteachers,withtwoadjoiningclassrooms,madespacefor
allsixthgraderstocreateauniquecommunity.Afterall,usingphysicalspacetoamplify
agroupstalentshasbeenknowntocreatecivilizations.

Feinych3
WorksCited
Banks,JamesA.
AncientCivilizations
.NewYork:Macmillan/McGrawHill,2007.Print.
Feinberg,Emily,andKellyAnnRomanych."Rombergian1516Syllabuswith
Procedures."
GoogleDocs
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"HighPointAcademy."
HistoryAbout
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