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Text from my
initial WP
submission:
(a phrase, sentence,
paragraph, idea,
move, punctuation,
piece of evidence,
etc.)
An observation or
question I received
from De Piero or a
classmate:
The change(s) I
made to what I
initially wrote: (ie,
the change[s] I made
to column 1)
As a reader, if you
have something to
say about the game
the NHL sub sites are
not for you. On the
other hand, the CBS
Sports and SB Nation
blog both allow space
for commentary
both for conflicting
ideas between
opposing teams fans,
and for conversation
amongst like teams
fans.
Kunianski, open-ended
question for you, just to
get you thinking: Im
wondering if your
paper would benefit
from re-structuring the
organization.
I ended up
restructuring my
paper to be divided
into conventions,
rather than divided
into sources.
Savant syndrome
must not always be
viewed from a logos
lens, appealing to an
audiences
intellectual sidea
pop culture sources
can examine the same
seeing/analyzing within
these sources.
Considering three
sources from
different genres and
disciplines, it
becomes evident that
the overall
effectiveness of a
piece is the
composition of its
presence of
established
conventions, its
usage of moves
made by the author
which lend
themselves to the
pieces purpose, and
its target audience.
topic through a
pathos lens,
appealing to an
audiences emotional
side (Carroll 52-53).
I tried to use the
course readings
throughout the
entirety of my paper,
as opposed to having
a large concentration
of them at the end.
The overall
effectiveness of an
article is determined
by its ability to meet
its audiences
expectations
specifically, this
entails including
conventions of the
genre, such as
statistical data in
experimental research
publications and
making specific
moves to accomplish
the pieces intended
purpose, such as
including content
from previous studies
to clarify that the
research presented is
building on or filling
the gaps of others
findings.
Within the relatively
broad genre of
scholarly publications
exist more specific
genres, such as
descriptive research
papers and
experimental research
You were
completely right
with this. Even
writing my paper
initially I knew that
there had to be a
better way to phrase
what I was trying to
say, but it just was
Impairments will be
referred to as the
second paper.
The repetitive
structure used in this
section of the paper
is the move. The
second paper
chooses to name the
person of study
Patient AC596 in
order to conceal the
identity of the
individual. This
provides the paper
with clarity by
verbalizing to the
audience that the
entire study is done
with the same
individual, patient
AC596.
of another way to
shorten them?
papers.
This comment is in
reference to the whole
paragraph:
When I see thiseven
before I start reading
I think, Ahhhhhhh!
Attack of the page-long
paragraph!
It makes my paper
much more
digestible for
readers. The pagelong paragraphs are
simply
overwhelming, and
for that reason alone
they needed to go.
Is it worth breaking up
this big "moves
paragraph" into
multiple paragraphs
which each analyze
different kinds of
moves?
I chose to divide
moves into two
major categories
those related to
content and those
related to
structure/formatting.
I felt like this
change made my
essay less
overwhelming to
readers (which was
another comment
that was made), as
well as added
clarity.
I worked to
incorporate more of
the sources findings
into my essay both
to strengthen my
argument and to add
a certain level of
interest to my paper.
My topic was
extremely
interesting and thus
I think my paper is
much more
interesting by
discussing what my
sources found in
further depth.
As previously
mentioned, one of
the conventions of
scholarly articles is
the usage of others
research. This factor
draws on the idea of
ethos which, as
Carroll defines in her
publication Steps
toward Rhetorical
Analysis, refers to
the credibility of the
rhetor (Carroll 54).
Previously, I had
not linked this
statement to any
contextual evidence
from within my
sources, which
significantly
weakened my claim.
However, relating
this point to my
sources fixed that
issue.
In order to maintain
readers loyalty,
recaps must be
written in a way that
caters to the
appropriate
audiencehow this
In order to maintain
readers loyalty,
recaps must be
written in a way that
caters to the
appropriate
audienceteam
I had an issue of
making my thesis
too general, which
then led to my
readers being
potentially confused
about what specific
is achieved is
analyzed in a
comparison of game
recaps from three
different sources.
What specific
preference and
conventions will you be inclination toward or
analyzing?
away from bias being
the major factors
how this is achieved
is analyzed in a
comparison of game
recaps from a teams
official website, a
national sporting
website, and a teamspecific blog.
This is solid
Laura Bolin Carroll,
information, but I'm
in her paper Steps
wondering (just a bit):
toward Rhetorical
why am I reading this? Analysis, points out,
How/why does this
As audiences we
directly relate back to
want to know the
your main argument?
facts of the matter,
and logos help
present these
(Carroll 52). Both the
NHL sub sites and
CBS Sports recaps
included extensive
statistics sections
more specifically, a
scoring summary, a
penalty summary,
goalie statistics, and
the three stars of the
game.
Transition issue: whats
the specific link
between sentence 1 and
sentence 2? Whatever
that is, considering
putting it into the start
of sentence 2. (At the
end of sentence 1 is
another option.)
Each of these
specialized genres
has conventions of
their own, as well as
some that overlap
across the entire
genre of scholarly
publications.
Conventions can help
signify to the reader
what genre he or she
is considering, such
as the inclusion of
argument I was
trying to make. I
worked at my thesis
to make my
argument as clear
and specific as
possible.
This is an example
of where the course
readings were
especially usefully
in backing up my
arguments. Why
was this information
necessary to
include? The course
reading by Carroll
answered that
question exactly.
I actually chose to
separate these two
sentences into two
different
paragraphs, which
allowed me to
individually expand
on each point. The
first sentence I
placed in a
paragraph that gave
somewhat of a brief
overview of my two
statistical findings in
an experimental
paper.
scholarly article
sources, and
following this
introduction I
brought in the idea
of conventions.
Parts of my paper,
such as this one
especially, needed
clarityI tried to
make this one of the
main focuses of my
revisions.