English: Yr 8 Analytical Text Response Assessment Semester 1

Text: RUNNER
Name:
Criteria

VELS level: 7.5

Above the Standard

Proficient

Capable

Developing

Requires significant
improvement

The chosen approach

addresses all aspects of the
essay topic extremely well.
The introduction shows a
sophisticated understanding of
the implications of the question.
It very clearly outlines the
writers argument.
The conclusion is the logical
end point of the argument rather
than a re-statement of her
views. The body of the essay is
organised into paragraphs to
create a highly coherent and
logical discussion of the topic.
Highly significant detail is
included from the text to support
the writers opinion, including
well-chosen examples for each
main point. Appropriate
quotations are also provided
and fluently incorporated.

The chosen approach

addresses all aspects of the
essay topic very well.
The introduction makes clear
what the essay question was
and the writers response to the
question. It also clearly outlines
the writers argument.
The conclusion sums up the
main arguments. The body is
divided into at least three
paragraphs ordered logically.
Each paragraph focuses on a
different idea, is appropriately
indented and has a topic
sentence that clearly relates to
the essay question.
Significant detail is included
from the text to support the
writers opinion, including
examples for each main point.
Appropriate quotations are
fluently incorporated.

The chosen approach

addresses all aspects of the
essay topic.
The introduction discusses the
essay question and the writers
response. It outlines the writers
argument.

The chosen approach

addresses most aspects of the
essay topic.
The introduction clearly relates
to both the question and the rest
of the essay.

The chosen approach

addresses only some aspects of
the essay topic.
The introduction relates in some
way to the rest of the essay.

Language is sophisticated and

highly appropriate to the task.
Sentence construction is varied
and complex
Proofreading is extremely
thorough. Spelling, punctuation
and grammar are all excellent.
Expression is admirably clear
and fluent.

Complex sentences are used

with variety of construction.
Many interesting words and
phrases are used.
Proofreading is very thorough.
Spelling, punctuation and
grammar are all excellent.
Expression is very clear and
fluent.

A combination of simple and

complex sentences is used
effectively. Interesting words
and phrases are used.
Proofreading is thorough.
Spelling, punctuation and
grammar are very good.
Expression is clear and fluent.

Communication
Listening, viewing
and responding;
presenting

Ideas are extremely well

sequenced. Class discussion,
peer and teacher feedback has
been used very effectively to
improve the quality of the
response.

Ideas are very well sequenced.

Class discussion, peer and
teacher feedback has been
used very effectively to improve
the quality of the response.

Managing Personal
Learning
Planning

Has clearly planned task, using

highly appropriate thinking
strategies to arrive at
outstanding content.

Has clearly planned task, using

a variety of thinking strategies
to arrive at the appropriate
content.

English: Relevance
English:Organisation
(Introduction, body,
conclusion)

English: Explanation
and evidence

English: Language
complexity,
vocabulary
English: Spelling,
punctuation,
grammar

What did I do well?

The conclusion sums up the

main arguments and restates
the writers opinion.
The body is divided into a
number of paragraphs. Each
paragraph focuses on a
different idea, is appropriately
indented, and has a clear topic
sentence.
Detail from the text is provided
to support the writers opinion,
including specific examples
from the novel for each main
point. Appropriate quotations
are provided.

The conclusion relates to both

the question and the rest of the
essay.
The body is in paragraph form,
with use of indentation and topic
sentences.
Some detail is provided from the
text to support the writers
opinion, including at least one
specific example from the text
for each main point. Some
quotations are provided.

The conclusion relates in some

way to the rest of the essay.
The body consists of one or
more paragraphs and goes into
more detail about the topic or
text than does the introduction.
General comments that show
an understanding of the basic
storyline are provided. Very few
quotations are provided.

Mostly simple sentences are

used.
Vocabulary is limited.

Ideas are appropriately

sequenced. Class discussion,
peer and teacher feedback has
been used to improve the
quality of the response.

A combination of simple and

complex sentences is used with
reasonable control. Some
interesting language is used.
Some errors not eliminated in
the proofreading process.
Spelling, punctuation and
grammar are reasonably
accurate. Some expression is
awkward or unclear.
Ideas are logically sequenced.
Class discussion, peer and
teacher feedback has been
used in some ways to improve
the quality of the response.

Has planned task using a

variety of thinking Strategies to
arrive at the appropriate content

Has shown adequate planning

using some thinking strategies
in preparation of the content.

Basic planning shown using

some thinking strategies in
preparation of the content.

Many errors not eliminated in

proofreading. A number of
errors make it difficult to
understand meaning.

Sequencing of ideas requires

attention. Insufficient use has
been made of class discussion,
peer and teacher feedback to
develop the response

What can I improve on?

Not
Completed