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ENGL 102
March 1st, 2016
Why to Vaccinate your Children.
Inquiry: Why is it important to vaccinate your children and the reasons people your so
hesitant to do so?
Proposed thesis: The parents should understand the importance of vaccinating their
children when they are growing up.
Five Important Reasons to Vaccinate Your Child." Five Important Reasons to
Vaccinate Your Child. Vaccines, n.d. Web. 27 Feb. 2016.
This article has a great agreement on five major reasons why to vaccinate your
children. First, immunizations can save your childs life. Once before advance
medical science thousands of children were being injured or killed by diseases.
Now more than 50% of injuries or death cases due to diseases are eliminated due
to successful vaccination on children. Second, vaccination is very safe and
effective. The article states. The disease-prevention benefits of getting vaccines
are much greater than the possible side effects for almost all children. Third,
immunization protects others you care about. The reason being some people cant
receive vaccinations due to age, allergies, and etc. This article states, not only
protects your family, but also helps prevent the spread of these diseases to your
friends and loved ones. Fourth, immunizations can save your family time and
money. This article states, some vaccine-preventable diseases can result in
prolonged disabilities and can take a financial toll because of lost time at work,
interview. Finally, the results of the interview presented 3 major points that
persuaded the mothers and couples decision. The result stated, when parents
were initially making vaccination decisions for their first child, when parents had
not made set or final decisions and were actively in the process of assessing their
options, and during particular events in childrens lives when circumstances were
influencing parents to reconsider previously made vaccination choices.
Wang, Eileen, Yelena Baras, and Alison M. Buttenheim. "Everybody just wants to do
what's best for their child: Understanding how pro-vaccine parents can support a
culture of vaccine hesitancy." Vaccine 33.48 (2015): 6703-6709.
The agreement in this article is decisions if people that state they are provaccination before truly knowing all the information his state pro-vaccination
afterwards. These parents were the upper-middle class living in Philadelphia with
young children. The parents in this study didnt all investigate information on
vaccinations when others did very detail investigating on the topic. An interview
process was conducted with the parents to see if there decisions on pro
vaccination had change if they studied the topic. The result states, Parents who
sought out vaccine information were often overwhelmed by the quantity and
ambiguity when interpreting that information, and, consequently, had to rely on
their own instinct or judgment to make vaccine decisions. In particular, while
parents in this sample did not refuse vaccines, and described themselves as provaccine, they did frequently delay or space vaccines. To conclude this study
demonstrates why there is such hesitancy in a parents choice to vaccinate or to
not vaccinate their children.
concluded that the parents lack of drive was the general purpose on why the
children didnt attend the clinic for their vaccinations.
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You have an interesting topic and proposal. I can tell you put thought into the scope of what you
were writing, and Im glad you opted for making parents understand that vaccines are important
for growing children rather than focusing on vaccines as a whole for all of society. I believe that
your MLA format is correct, but just to be sure I would double check the Brunson citation format,
it seems like something is a bit funky there.
I believe that you have done a good job in summarizing your sources. I would focus more on why
the author wrote the piece, and less on summarizing the article. For example I believe that just by
saying this article gives five strong reasons to vaccinate your children gives the reader the jest of
what the article is about. If you believe that listing the reasons makes the bibliography stronger I
encourage you to keep it! It certainly didnt hurt anything, but maybe this specific source could
also include a more in depth analysis of the source. Like -why is this source credible. -who wrote
the article - is this author biased?
Specifically I feel like analyzing could be stronger in a few of your sources, but most are very well
done. I think your use of direct quotes, and synopsis of the claims of the argument are two of the
strongest aspects of your paper. While reading a source of yours I felt like I had read the article
myself.
Overall I believe that your sources have really strong summaries, and just need minor information
inserted to give the reader the full experience of the article. I think its important the reader get to
know your analysis more than just a summary. I can tell that your paper will go extremely well
and be one I look forward to reading.
Kaitlyn Dowdy 4/23/16 4:38 PM
Response:
1.
Your
topic
is
very
interesting
and
controversial.
Your
thesis
is
good,
Im
glad
you
are
discussing
the
importance
of
vaccinations.
Your
MLA
format
is
correct,
except
do
not
double-space
your
citations.
2.
You
did
a
good
job
with
summarizing
your
articles.
You
stated
some
very
interesting
facts
from
each
article.
But
be
sure
to
focus
on
the
author
a
little
more
and
discuss
why
he
or
she
is
credible.
It
is
interesting
to
hear
about
why
parents
choose
not
to
vaccinate
their
children
3.
I
think
your
use
of
quotes
is
good,
but
some
could
use
a
little
bit
more
analysis.
I
find
all
of
your
sources
very
enlightening,
I
never
really
thought
about
why
or
why
not
parents
chose
to
vaccinate
their
kids.
4.
Generally,
your
topic
is
very
good
and
interesting.
Your
sources
are
useful
and
you
did
a
good
job
at
summarizing.
But
maybe
add
a
little
more
about
authors.
Response:
You have a thesis that I told you to improve through my caption, but it was very good. I
imagine that your inquiry question is a bit too long for research but it seems you have
found good citations for your question! I would recommend shortening your inquiry
question. The paper has everything for correct MLA citation but the last name and page
number header!
You have very strong summaries for all of your citations that really give me insight on
your argument and ideas. You do not describe the ethos, but I dont think that was in the
rubric in the first place. My understanding of your citations is that you have a lot of
different options and strong evidence for your paragraphs.
You describe statistics that are presented in the article. I think this is enlightening because
you summarize the articles most important areas that will benefit you in your paper. You
accurately use direct quotes and citations.
Your research is working well to help you. I would suggest adjusting your thesis and
inquiry to more strong, condensed sentences.