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Kaitlyn Dowdy

ENGL 102
March 1st, 2016
Why to Vaccinate your Children.
Inquiry: Why is it important to vaccinate your children and the reasons people your so
hesitant to do so?
Proposed thesis: The parents should understand the importance of vaccinating their
children when they are growing up.
Five Important Reasons to Vaccinate Your Child." Five Important Reasons to
Vaccinate Your Child. Vaccines, n.d. Web. 27 Feb. 2016.
This article has a great agreement on five major reasons why to vaccinate your
children. First, immunizations can save your childs life. Once before advance
medical science thousands of children were being injured or killed by diseases.
Now more than 50% of injuries or death cases due to diseases are eliminated due
to successful vaccination on children. Second, vaccination is very safe and
effective. The article states. The disease-prevention benefits of getting vaccines
are much greater than the possible side effects for almost all children. Third,
immunization protects others you care about. The reason being some people cant
receive vaccinations due to age, allergies, and etc. This article states, not only
protects your family, but also helps prevent the spread of these diseases to your
friends and loved ones. Fourth, immunizations can save your family time and
money. This article states, some vaccine-preventable diseases can result in
prolonged disabilities and can take a financial toll because of lost time at work,

medical bills or long-term disability care. Fifth, immunization protects future


generations. This article states, If we continue vaccinating now, and vaccinating
completely, parents in the future may be able to trust that some diseases of today
will no longer be around to harm their children in the future.
"Why Immunize." Centers for Disease Control and Prevention. Centers for
Disease Control and Prevention, 23 Sept. 2014. Web. 05 Feb. 2016.
This article is a very great and reliable coming straight from the center for disease
control and prevention website. This article supports the previous article stating
on why to vaccinate your children. One of the major reasons why you want to
vaccinate your children the article states, We don't vaccinate just to protect our
children. We also vaccinate to protect our grandchildren and their grandchildren.
Each time a child is vaccinated it helps prevents more cases of children being
injured or even worse killed by a diseases in the future. This article states that,
Vaccinations are one of the best ways to put an end to the serious effects of
certain diseases.
Brunson, Emily K. "Identifying Parents Who Are Amenable to Pro-Vaccination
Conversations." Global Pediatric Health 2 (2015): 2333794X15616332.
This article gives you an understanding on how undecided parents can be
influenced to be pro vaccinations. There were several mothers picked and a few
couples pick for this study. The children had to be at least 18 months or younger
for the parents to do the interview. The interview was done in the parents home or
in a public quiet area that ranges from 30 minutes up to 2 hours. The families
were giving 20 dollar for their time after the interview. Then, the interview data
was organized in a coding so that the information could be reevaluate for each

interview. Finally, the results of the interview presented 3 major points that
persuaded the mothers and couples decision. The result stated, when parents
were initially making vaccination decisions for their first child, when parents had
not made set or final decisions and were actively in the process of assessing their
options, and during particular events in childrens lives when circumstances were
influencing parents to reconsider previously made vaccination choices.
Wang, Eileen, Yelena Baras, and Alison M. Buttenheim. "Everybody just wants to do
what's best for their child: Understanding how pro-vaccine parents can support a
culture of vaccine hesitancy." Vaccine 33.48 (2015): 6703-6709.
The agreement in this article is decisions if people that state they are provaccination before truly knowing all the information his state pro-vaccination
afterwards. These parents were the upper-middle class living in Philadelphia with
young children. The parents in this study didnt all investigate information on
vaccinations when others did very detail investigating on the topic. An interview
process was conducted with the parents to see if there decisions on pro
vaccination had change if they studied the topic. The result states, Parents who
sought out vaccine information were often overwhelmed by the quantity and
ambiguity when interpreting that information, and, consequently, had to rely on
their own instinct or judgment to make vaccine decisions. In particular, while
parents in this sample did not refuse vaccines, and described themselves as provaccine, they did frequently delay or space vaccines. To conclude this study
demonstrates why there is such hesitancy in a parents choice to vaccinate or to
not vaccinate their children.

Quadri-Sheriff, Maheen, et al. "The role of herd immunity in parents decision to


vaccinate children: a systematic review." Pediatrics 130.3 (2012): 522-530.
This article gives people a better understanding if herd immunity effectively
influences parent options on vaccinating their children. The study was designed to
get original information of parent or guardians of children younger then 18
discussing the benefits of vaccination your children. One of the major results
across the board was the main motivation to vaccination was the benefits to
others. The article states, One to six percent of parents ranked benefit to others as
their primary reason to vaccinate their children, and 37% of parents ranked
benefit to others as their second most important factor in decision-making. This
concluded that parents are more agreeable to vaccinate their children for the
benefits of others.
Littlewood, Robert. "Parental reasons for failure to vaccinate." The Journal of the Royal
College of General Practitioners 36.285 (1986): 182.
This source talks about different reasons why parents or guardians failed to
vaccinate their children. The clinic sent out a questionnaire to the parents of the
children that didnt attend their appointment for their vaccination. Forty of the
fifty-five questionnaires were entirely finished by the parents or guardians. The
source states, The main reason (85%) given for failure to attend for vaccination
was the concurrent occurrence of minor illness in the child. Of the parents
completing the questionnaire 75% considered immunization to be effective, 13%
thought that immunization was not generally a safe procedure and only 70%
thought the diseases we immunize against were still serious. This article

concluded that the parents lack of drive was the general purpose on why the
children didnt attend the clinic for their vaccinations.

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You have an interesting topic and proposal. I can tell you put thought into the scope of what you
were writing, and Im glad you opted for making parents understand that vaccines are important
for growing children rather than focusing on vaccines as a whole for all of society. I believe that
your MLA format is correct, but just to be sure I would double check the Brunson citation format,
it seems like something is a bit funky there.
I believe that you have done a good job in summarizing your sources. I would focus more on why
the author wrote the piece, and less on summarizing the article. For example I believe that just by
saying this article gives five strong reasons to vaccinate your children gives the reader the jest of
what the article is about. If you believe that listing the reasons makes the bibliography stronger I
encourage you to keep it! It certainly didnt hurt anything, but maybe this specific source could
also include a more in depth analysis of the source. Like -why is this source credible. -who wrote
the article - is this author biased?
Specifically I feel like analyzing could be stronger in a few of your sources, but most are very well
done. I think your use of direct quotes, and synopsis of the claims of the argument are two of the
strongest aspects of your paper. While reading a source of yours I felt like I had read the article
myself.
Overall I believe that your sources have really strong summaries, and just need minor information
inserted to give the reader the full experience of the article. I think its important the reader get to
know your analysis more than just a summary. I can tell that your paper will go extremely well
and be one I look forward to reading.
Kaitlyn Dowdy 4/23/16 4:38 PM

Response:
1. Your topic is very interesting and controversial. Your thesis is good, Im glad you
are discussing the importance of vaccinations. Your MLA format is correct, except do
not double-space your citations.
2. You did a good job with summarizing your articles. You stated some very
interesting facts from each article. But be sure to focus on the author a little more
and discuss why he or she is credible. It is interesting to hear about why parents
choose not to vaccinate their children
3. I think your use of quotes is good, but some could use a little bit more analysis. I
find all of your sources very enlightening, I never really thought about why or why
not parents chose to vaccinate their kids.
4. Generally, your topic is very good and interesting. Your sources are useful and
you did a good job at summarizing. But maybe add a little more about authors.

Comment [1]: Sydney Branning


Comments

Kaitlyn Dowdy 4/23/16 4:40 PM


Comment [2]: Rosalie Alterman

Response:
You have a thesis that I told you to improve through my caption, but it was very good. I
imagine that your inquiry question is a bit too long for research but it seems you have

found good citations for your question! I would recommend shortening your inquiry
question. The paper has everything for correct MLA citation but the last name and page
number header!
You have very strong summaries for all of your citations that really give me insight on
your argument and ideas. You do not describe the ethos, but I dont think that was in the
rubric in the first place. My understanding of your citations is that you have a lot of
different options and strong evidence for your paragraphs.
You describe statistics that are presented in the article. I think this is enlightening because
you summarize the articles most important areas that will benefit you in your paper. You
accurately use direct quotes and citations.
Your research is working well to help you. I would suggest adjusting your thesis and
inquiry to more strong, condensed sentences.

Kaitlyn Dowdy 4/23/16 4:42 PM


Comment [3]: Suzanne Green