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Amelie
Josh
Alice
Massimo
Nikolas
Jake
Katrina
Jade
Ashling
Use
of
descriptive
Things
to
work
on
(Even
language
better
if)
Good
use
of
descriptive
Fluency
of
writing.
language.
Good
use
of
Plot
development.
adjectives
and
adverbs
to
Orientation:
who,
make
interesting
what,
when,
where,
sentences.
why?
Some
use
of
descriptive
New
speaker,
new
language,
could
make
line.
better
language
choices,
be
more
specific.
Demonstrates
an
Spelling
understanding
of
Creating
an
descriptive
language,
orientation-
setting
could
use
more
in
terms
the
scene,
went
of
all
character
straight
into
the
description
and
setting
complication.
description.
Excellent
use
of
Time
management
descriptive
language
to
Character
describe
small
things
in
introduction
the
story.
Good
for
Setting
description
visualising.
Great
use
of
descriptive
Time
management-
language
to
set
the
scene
could
have
written
and
paint
a
picture
for
more
in
the
time
the
audience.
given.
Good
use
of
descriptive
Plot
development.
language
to
set
the
scene
Should
think
about
for
his
narrative.
what
he
wants
to
write
before
he
starts.
Sentence
fluency.
Consistently
used
Plot
development.
descriptive
language
Providing
throughout
her
work.
information
about
how
a
situation
may
have
occurred.
Good
use
of
descriptive
Work
on
tenses
language
within
her
Punctuation-
use
of
short
story.
quotation
marks.
Demonstrates
an
understanding
of
its
purpose.
Uses
some
descriptive
Using
descriptive
language,
but
more
language
needed
to
show
that
she
throughout
entire
understands
how
it
is
text.
used
to
enrich
a
text.
Character
Anthony. N.
Little
descriptive
language,
needs
to
have
more
detailed.
Stephanie
Jacqueline
Niat
Anthony G.
Ashley Payne
Little
descriptive
language
throughout
the
text.
description
and
setting
description.
Good
plot
but
more
information
to
the
hows
and
whys
would
have
also
been
good.
Check
your
tenses,
changed
from
past
tense
to
present
text-
authors
voice
Needs
more
order
and
explanations
of
ideas:
who?
What?
When?
Where?
Why?
Plot
development,
while
the
description
of
the
introduction
was
great,
no
plot
development,
no
characters
or
who,
what,
when,
where
,why?
Writing-
using
abbreviations
instead
of
and.
Remember
the
features
of
a
narrative-
orientation,
complication
and
resolution.
Need
to
organise
ideas
better-
plan
first.
No
abbreviations-
(omg).
Spelling-
many
errors.
Tenses-
go
over
them
with
him-
they
change
from
past
tense
to
present.
Needs
more
of
an
orientation:
who
were
they?
Where
Lachlan
Caylem
No
real
evidence
of
descriptive
language,
but
writing
has
only
just
begun
Good
start
to
descriptive
language
Caitlin
Alisha
Demonstrates
clear
understanding
of
descriptive
language
Needs
more
descriptive
language
Dominic
Ash
Pis
Danielle
Nereeja
No
evidence
of
descriptive
language
No
real
use
of
descriptive
language
No
evidence
of
descriptive
language