DearMrs.

Stegner,
FormyreflectionletterIhavechosen
StartingMyLifeANew,TheElectronicAge,and
RelationshipDisconnection
essaysasthebasisformypersonalevaluation.Iwillalsoreflecton
my
RacialProfilingCausesMistrustinPolice
,
AStepClosertoTastyandHealthySchool
Lunches,andmyIntotheWildProjectprocesswork.
Fromthiswork,Iwillreflectontheskills
thathaveIdevelopedfromannotatingarticlesforethos,logos,andpathos,creatingasurvey,and
usingphotoshop.FormyacademicessaysIwillreflectonwritingananecdote,extracting
effectivequotesfromreliableresources,andidentifyingdifferenttypesofwritingsalongwith
theiraudienceandpurpose.IwillalsoaddressmystrengthssuchaswritinginproperMLA
formatandwritingtopicsentencestosupportmyclaimandmyweaknessessuchas,integrating
quotesandwritinginactivevoice.
ForthisassignmentIchosetoreflectonmy
StartingMyLifeANew,TheElectronicAge,
andRelationshipDisconnection
essays.
StartingMyLifeANew
ismyPersonalStatementand
myfirstessayIwroteinthisclass.Iwasabletodiscussthemanychangesthathappenedinthe
pastfouryearsofmylife.IdescribedthescenebysayingthatIwillneverforgetwakingup
fromhearingtheintenseprotestsoneveryFridaymorningandseeingthecrowdsofpeoplefill
thestreetsaroundme.Theirsharpvoicesdemandingandpleadingforabetterformof
government.Flagsfilledthestreets,peoplewerewillingtorisktheirlivestomakeadifference.
Thisessayallowedmetousefirstperson,whichhelpedbeusefigurativelanguagesuchas,
imagery.ItriedtodrawthepicturethatIrememberfrommypast.
TheElectronicAge
ismy
BullyingResearchPaperandmyfirstpaperIwroteduringsecondsemester.Ichose
cyberbullyingasmytopicforitsincreaseamongsocialmediawebsites.ForthispaperIused

reliablesourcessuchas,scholarlyarticles,periodicals,andbooksfromgale,MissionViejo
Libraryssearchdatabase,toprovethatcyberbullyingisamajorglobalproblemthatexistsin
todayssocietyandshouldbeaddressedassoonaspossible.
RelationshipDisconnection
ismy
MultiGenrePortfolio/BringaTexttoClassessayandisthelastpaperIwroteinthisclass.This
essayfocusedondifferenttypesofwritingandtheiraudiences.Itallowedmetocreatemyown
piecesoftextstodeliverthemessagethattechnologydamagesourrelationshipsratherthan
connectsusandmakesusmorealone.Theseessaysweresomeofmybestworkinthisclass
andIlearntfrommypriormistakestowritebetteressayslikethese.
FormyprocessworkIchosetoreflectonmy
RacialProfilingCausesMistrustinPolice
,
AStepClosertoTastyandHealthySchoolLunches,andmyIntotheWildProjectprocesswork.
Throughtheseworksmyabilitytowritingessayshasdevelopeddrastically.
RacialProfiling
CausesMistrustinPolice
,myargumentativeessaysprocessworkallowedmetoannotate
articlesforethos,logos,andpathos.AnexamplefromTheWashingtonPostforlogoswouldbe,
Twentystateshavenolawsprohibitingracialprofilingbylawenforcement,accordingto
an
NAACPreport
releasedinSeptember.Amongstatesthatdo,thepoliciesvarywidelyin
implementationandeffectiveness.Only17ofthosestatesrequiredatacollectiononallpolice
stopsandsearches,andonly15requireanalysisandpublicationofotherracialprofilingdata.
A
StepClosertoTastyandHealthySchoolLunches
,myfoodproposalessay,allowedmetocreate
myownsurveyaboutTesorosschoollunches.Iwasabletosharemysurveywithmy
classmatestoreceivemyowndataformyessay.Afterviewingtheresponses96%of25
Tesorostudentswouldrathereattheirownlunchthantheschoolslunch.Otherwritingskills,
My
IntotheWildProject
allowedmetousephotoshopforthefirsttime.Ilearnedtochangethe

backgroundofanimageandfusetwoimagesormoreintoone.Thisprojectallowedmetoshow
ChrisjourneytoAlaskavisuallythroughthemanysymbolsdispersedthroughthebook.
ThefivetopskillsthatIhaveimproveduponthemostthroughouttheacademicschool
yeararewritingananecdote,creatingafinaldraft,findingevidencetosupportmyclaim,
creatingaworkscitedpage,andidentifyingdifferenttypesoftexts.FormyPersonalStatementI
wasrequiredtohaveanattentiongrabbertomakethereaderinterested.Inmyintroduction,I
wroteananecdoteabouttheprotestsinEgypt,IuseddetaileddescriptionsofwhatIheardand
whatIsawtomakethereadervisualizewhatIexperienced.Istartedmyessayoutbysaying,
LookingbackatitallIremembereverything,allofthefeelings,fearsandworriescamerushing
backtome.Irecalleverysingledetailfromthenewsforecaststothehorridmemoriesthatmy
owneyeswitnessed.Experiencingtheselifealteringsituationsrattledmymind.Atfirst,I
struggledwhilewritingthisanecdotebecauseIhadneverwroteoneuntilthen.Likethemany
essaysIwroteforthisclass,IwroteseveralroughdraftsformyRacialProfilingessay.After
writingeachparagraphseparately,Isentenceddraftedtheentireessaytoimproveeachsentence
andtocheckifIhadallelementstoeachparagraph.Beinginthisclass,themostimportantthing
Ilearntisthatmyevidencehastosupportmyclaim.MyFoodProposalSurveyallowedmeto
provethatstudentsthinkthatschoollunchesareunhealthybyrevealingthat76%of25students
thinkthatTesorolunchesarenothealthy.OneofmystrongestessayswasmyBullyingResearch
Paper.Iwasabletousereliablesourcesfromgaleandnotgetamistakeonmyworkscitedpage.
ThroughmakingthispaperInowknowthatIneedtoalphabetizemysources,makesurethat
theyareformattedcorrectly.Inaddition,thisclasstaughtmemorethantowriteessaysbuthow

toidentifydifferenttextsandaudience.MyMultiGenrePortfolioallowedmetofocusonwriting
differenttextsfordifferentaudiences.
IhavelearnedoverthecourseofERWChowtoeffectivelywritesupportive
commentary.Forexample,inmyBullyingResearchpaperafterthequoteTheanonymityof
cyberbullyingmaycausestudentswhonormallywouldnotbullyinthetraditionalphysicalways
toengageinthebehaviorinthedigitalrealm(Poland),Iincludedthat,cyberbullying
influencespeopletobully.Forexample,ifyouscrolldownthepageonYoutube,peopleusually
displaytheiropinionandifsomeonedoesntlikewhattheotherssaidorfindsitcontroversial.
AftermanytimesoftryingIhadfinallywrotesupportivecommentary.
ThroughoutthiscourseIdevelopedstrengthssuchaswritinginproperMLAformatand
writingtopicsentencestosupportmyclaim.FormyMultiGenrePortfolioIintroduceddiaries
bysayingthattheyarepersonal,openspaceswhereanyonecanventouthisorherfeelings
withoutworryingthatsomeonemightreadthem.Istillcontinuetostrugglewithwritingin
activevoiceandintegratingquotes.InmyPersonalStatementIwroteinpassivevoiceespecially
whentalkingaboutthepastoranactionthatIwasdoing.
AftercompletingthisclassIcannowuseKamietoannotatePDFsandusedScribleto
annotateonlinearticles.Thesetoolsallowedmetodevelopanewandusefulskillthatwillhelp
meinthefuture.IusedbothofthesetoolsformyBringaTexttoClass/MultiGenrePortfolio
essaytoevaluatetheauthor'sbiasandperspectiveonmyresearchtopic.Beforethisclass,I
couldntdownloadthescribletoolbarnorwasabletoeditonlinearticles.Thesetwotoolswill
definitelyhelpmewritefuturepapersincollege.

Mycriticalreadingskillshaveimprovedthroughoutthisacademicschoolyearhowever,
IstillneedimprovementbecauseIcannottellwhatitrelevantorirrelevantinformation.Ioften
timeswriteunnecessarylongsentencesinmanyofmyessaysthatdontneedtobeplaced.I
thinkthishappensbecauseIdontaskmyselfwhatistheauthortryingtosay,orbecauseIdont
knowwhatisthemainidea.
Inconclusion,theclosereadingandannotatingthatIlearnedinERWChaveassistedme
inotherclassessuchas,myEconomicsclassbecauseInowcanoutlinethechapterforthekey
pointsandkeyargumentsofeconomists.BasedonwhatIhaveheardfromotherswhohave
takenthiscourseandgoneontocollege,Ibelievethatthiscoursewillhelpmedramatically.I
believethatIampreparedtowritecollegeessays.Thisclasshelpedmewiththeformatting
demandsforwritingessaysandifIstruggleIknowplentyofresources,suchas,OwlPurdueifI
needassistance.
Sincerely,
JessicaFahmy