Professional Documents
Culture Documents
Peter Erikson
Copy Editor
February 2008
Contents
Resume
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Stories I've Written
Editing Examples
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alerts "This isn't a fable — it's a true story," he Military, probate,
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Wireless news census records, ship
Newspaper in manifests, old
Education Smith mesmerized students during visits to newspapers, diaries,
Blood Bank of Saint Mark Lutheran School in Kane'ohe biographies and obituaries
Hawaii also can prove valuable.
and Kapalama Elementary in November.
At Saint Mark, "I had the whole darn school, three sessions,"
said Waikiki resident Smith.
Fast-growing pastime
"It's a fatal disease — you keep going until you die," said
Kathy DeFoster, treasurer and membership chairwoman for
the Honolulu County Genealogical Society and librarian for
the DAR.
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All the more reason to consult experts like Samuel Lowe and
his wife, Daphne. The couple volunteer on Tuesdays at the
LDS family history center on Beretania Street.
Everyone "is welcome, and it's free," said Lowe, 80, area
adviser for LDS centers in Hawai'i. "And there's no
proselytizing — it's strictly genealogy and family history
research. "Otherwise, people would be afraid to come."
Uncovering witches
"Their crime was being poor. They didn't have a lot of money,
so they didn't have the position to protect themselves," said
DeFoster. "He also sold a gun to an Indian. The fact that he
had no money and no power and that he had committed a
crime put him on the outside of society, so it was very easy for
him to be railroaded.
DeFoster helps others learn the fate of their own ancestors. The
DAR library, she said, is a good resource for those researching
the colonial period to the mid-19th century. "Our collection
contains many serials that can only be found in libraries in
major cities," said DeFoster.
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"We learn the hardships they went through," he said. "We have
a connection to them. That's why the church says all families
are eternal. We believe we'll all return to the spiritual world
with our families on the other side."
"If we can get others to be proud of who they are and what
their forerunners accomplished, so much the better," said the
elder Smith, who was stationed in Hawai'i and on Okinawa
during World War II. "It makes us better Americans."
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Getting started
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— Peter Erikson
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Here are a few top genealogy resources for Hawai'i. See the
Honolulu County Genealogical Society of Hawaii Web site
(rootsweb.com/~hihcgs/resources.html) for a complete list.
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Wireless news states and nearly 170,000 players.
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Education
Blood Bank of At the nationals, "people told us they had to win lots
Hawaii more matches than we did to get there," said Gary
Nekoba, whose 5.0 men's team barely lost to champion
Texas at the USTA championships in 2000 in Palm
Springs, Calif.
"At the 4.5 level we get players at the top level, not the
middle level," she said.
Spreading aloha
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"On the east side, basically Hilo, as far as 5.0 players go,
there's seven who can play at that level and that's it. I
usually have to get all of them together at the same time
to make a team and that's difficult because of
commitments."
Lozano said it's not surprising that there aren't more 5.0
players.
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Where to stay
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— Peter Erikson
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Peter Erikson
Honolulu Advertiser
Catching Errors on Deadline 2005; June-August
(Editor’s Note: The diacriticals in Hawaiian names are correct)
Editing Example 1
“Risk of identity theft on rise”
Problem 1: In breakout box titled “Take Precautions,” a bulleted item suggested checking one’s credit
reports by contacting Equifax, Esperian and TransUnion separately. Aside from all the work, one would
have to pay a fee to download or order each report. Missing was this information: Residents of western
states, including Hawaii, can download or order free reports from all three companies at one site,
annualcreditreport.com. This service began December 2004; other states are being phased in over the year.
Solution: I added the relevant information to the box, after checking with the reporter, who was unaware
of the centralized site.
Problem 2: The story focuses on an identity theft victim in Hawaii whose credit card was used to make
more than $8,000 in purchases in Spain. He is quoted as saying, “I hate to be responsible for $8,000.” In
fact, he is only liable for the first $50 under U.S. law. The story has no mention of this.
Solution: I added a graph to the story to reflect this.
By Rick Daysog
Advertiser Staff Writer
Charles Harrington said he should have suspected something was wrong last month when he couldn’t
use his Visa card to pay for lunch at a local restaurant or to purchase supplies at Office Depot.
The Kamehameha Heights resident, who was well below the $32,000 limit on his card, said his credit-
card statements later showed that someone had used his Visa account that same day to rack up more than
$8,000 in charges in Spain.
Harrington, the publisher of Hawaii Parent magazine, said his wife recently alerted American Savings
Bank, which had issued him the card, and a bank employee told them that up to 40 people had reported
similar problems recently.
“I hate to be responsible for $8,000 without having anything to do with it,” said Harrington, who has
never visited Spain. “I could have had fun with that $8,000.”
American Savings said it will investigate Harrington’s case.
Under federal law, Harrington will only be liable for the first $50 once he can demonstrate he is a victim
of fraud.
Harrington is one of hundreds of local victims of one of the fastest-growing forms of fraud in the nation:
identity theft.
* Download and print copies of your credit reports from each of the three reporting companies at
www.annualcreditreport.com. Or call (877) 322-8228 to request a form, or write to Annual Credit Report
Request Service, P.O. Box 105281, Atlanta, GA 30348-5281. (Forms are available on the Web site).
Editing Example 2
“Battered Guard cutter
navigating rough seas”
Problem: This July 15, 2005 story was originally scheduled to run the week before, but I suggested
holding it because there were three errors in the first paragraph alone. Here’s the first graph: “When Capt.
Michael Jett enlisted in the Coast Guard in 1967, he dreamed of commanding a high-endurance cutter such
as the Honolulu-based USS Jarvis. But Jett never imagined that he would be the commander of one of the
ships that came online 38 years ago.” The errors:
1. The USS Jarvis was a Navy destroyer sunk by the Japanese in 1942. The Jarvis is a Coast Guard cutter.
2. The Jarvis wasn’t commissioned until 1972, so Capt. Jett couldn’t have dreamed of commanding a ship
like the Jarvis in 1967.
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3. Also, the Jarvis came online 33 years ago, not 38 as the lead says.
Solution: The story was held, checked by several editors who concurred with the changes, and run the
next week.
Edited Story:
By Curtis Lum
Advertiser Staff Writer
When Capt. Michael Jett enlisted in the Coast Guard in 1967, he dreamed of commanding a high-
endurance cutter. But Jett never imagined that he would be the commander of a ship that came online 33
years ago.
The Jarvis is one of two 378-foot cutters home-ported in Honolulu and is among an aging fleet of Coast
Guard ships and aircraft that require constant repair and maintenance. Military and elected officials have
said that plans to replace the Coast Guard’s assets over the next 20 years need to be accelerated to allow it
to carry out its post 9/11 mission.
The so-called “deep water” replacement program calls for $20 billion to be spent over a 20-year period,
but that could be increased to 25 years under a White House plan. Some of the Coast Guard’s boats are 50
years old, while the Jarvis was built in 1970 and commissioned in 1972.
The Jarvis primarily patrols Alaskan waters and the Western Pacific, enforcing U.S. laws and treaties.
The crew also hunts down drug smugglers and takes part in exercises with other nations to fight terrorist
activities.
Over the years, the Jarvis has taken a beating as it travels through rough environments. Jett said his crew
frequently has to perform repair and maintenance work, rather than its usual duties because of the
problems with the aging ship.
The Jarvis is on a 90-day patrol mission but recently was forced to dock at Adak, Alaska, for two days
for repairs. He said one diesel engine is down and can’t be replaced until the Jarvis returns to Honolulu at
the end of this month, while a turbine is running at reduced capacity.
At any given time, Jett said, something is broken on the Jarvis. Despite its problems, the Jarvis is among
the better-conditioned ships in the Coast Guard, he said.
Editing Example 3
“Got the hots for kim chee”
Problem: On July 20, we ran a series of feature stories about kim chee. I did not work on the stories.
However, after the stories were edited and slotted and the pages proofed, I noticed variations on three
names (Mimi Mitsunaga and Mimi Mitsuzawa; Julia Chung and Julia Chang; and Chae and Choe on
second reference for Chef Chae Won Choe.
Solution: I quickly contacted the writer and section editor, and the problems were fixed.
Edited Story:
By Wanda A. Adams
Advertiser Food Editor
Here in Hawai’i, we think we know kim chee. Those familiar jars of Halms or Kohala kim chee are at
home on our tables.
But in truth, our understanding of Korea’s national food rates about a 4 on a scale of 160.
Meaning even the most savvy among us tend to be aware of only four types of the Korean fermented
pickle (won bok, cucumber, daikon and turnip) among the more than 160 types documented in Korea.
Unless you’re in the habit of visiting the kim chee bars at one of the Korean markets here — Palama
Super Market and Queen’s Super Market are best known — or have a Korean halmani (grandma) in the
kitchen, you are probably innocent about the wide range of kim chee ingredients and flavors.
The term, rooted in Middle Chinese, means to soak or steep vegetables or greens. Originally, kim chee
was just a salted vegetable, explained chef Chae Won Choe, who was born in Korea and raised in Hawaii.
After chilies were introduced to Korea in the 17th century, Koreans created a variation on the theme,
seasoning the salted vegetables with sweet, hot peppers.
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Now the dish is officially designated a National Treasure in South Korea. “Kim chee, we had breakfast,
lunch and dinner — so many different kinds,” said Mimi Mitsunaga, who grew up in Korea and for the
past 13 years has masterminded an immense kim chee-making project for Iolani School’s Family Fair.
Says Choe, “You can kim chee any kind of vegetable.” Common in Korea are kim chees made with
eggplant, mustard leaves, lettuces, carrots, gourds, watercress, leeks, chives, green onions, pumpkin,
various roots and shoots, according to “The Kim Chee Cookbook,” by Kim, Lee and Lee (Periplus, 1997),
an excellent English-language guide to kim chee lore, history and recipes. And seafood, too: oysters,
squid, shrimp, pollack, cutlass fish.
A more recent stereotype of kim chee is that it isn’t good for you. And, indeed, the high sodium content
is of concern; this can be somewhat mitigated by making your own kim chee, rinsing kim chee before
eating, and savoring small portions.
But recent research indicates that fermented foods — cabbage kim chee and sauerkraut — have
significant health advantages. Cruciferous vegetables, including cabbages, are high in cancer-fighting
antioxidants (glucosinolates and flavonoids), fiber, vitamins C and K, calcium and minerals (iron,
potassium).
In a 2002 study written up in the Journal of Agricultural and Food Chemistry, Finnish researchers found
that fermenting cabbages produces isothiocyanates, which retard cancers in laboratory experiments. The
same lactic acids that help preserve the fermented cabbage also promote intestinal health. Garlic,
abundantly used in making kim chee, has antioxidant and other health effects as well, as does hot pepper
powder. And cabbage kim chee is fat- and cholesterol-free.
Editing Example 4
“Portuguese event yields tasty recipe”
Problem: In this story, the writer, who is Portuguese, called a Portuguese dessert “preges” in her column.
I did some fact-checking and found it was actually pregos.
Solution: The writer indicated pregos was correct and that she had assumed it was preges.
Edited Story:
By Wanda Adams
Advertiser Food Editor
Spent a delightful Saturday afternoon at the Kona Historical Society’s Portuguese Heritage Festival last
weekend, held in a pasture on a hillside below the old Greenwell store in Captain Cook on the Big Island.
For the event, the society built a forno — a masonry oven, faced not with the usual brick or stucco but
with local rock, artfully fitted together like the dry stone walls that form the pasture boundaries. One
reason for the event was to tell the community about plans for the Kona Heritage Ranch, an outdoor living
history museum that will celebrate work, family, ethnicity and community — including the Portuguese.
(Find more at www.konahistorical.org.)
I got teary-eyed seeing older ladies who reminded me of my grandmother and recalling how much of
Portuguese culture has faded. Today, most people think Portuguese food is bean soup, linguica and
sweetbread — and maybe vinha d’ahlos (pickled pork) and bacalhau (salt cod) stew. But the early
immigrant cooks had a repertoire of dozens of recipes.
I participated in a talk-story time with a group of women, recalling old-time Portuguese foods and
cooking, customs and feasts. I encountered a new recipe at the event: slow-simmered and marinated beef
made into delicious, garlicky sandwiches called pregos.
I bought literally the last copy of the Kona Historical Society’s Portuguese Heritage Cookbook ($4.95 —
they’re reprinting). Below is the recipe as the cookbook presents it. I added a tablespoon of balsamic
vinegar and a teaspoon of beef soup base to deepen the flavor of the gravy that forms from the pan juices.
P.S. You could cut the fat by using just a couple tablespoons of butter and using a cup of strong beef
broth in which to sauté the garlic and beef.
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Editing Example 5
“State’s first female leader of safety agency recognized”
Problem: This Aug. 5 story had already been edited, slotted and proofed by the time I checked it after first
deadline. I noticed three things:
1. The second graph makes it sound as if Patty Dukes, Honolulu’s EMS department head, had just been
promoted. She had actually been named to the job seven months before.
2. Much of the third graph is repetitive and should have been cut.
3. We say Dukes “began her career as an paramedic.”
Solution: All of the errors were fixed for the second, or home final, edition.
Edited Story:
By Suzanne Roig
Advertiser Staff Writer
When Patty Dukes began her career as a paramedic, she was one of six women in her field.
That was 22 years ago. Now there are about 60 women in the Honolulu Emergency Medical Services
Department and Dukes is the agency’s chief.
She is the first woman to hold that position in a major U.S. city and the first woman in the state to lead a
public safety agency.
Dukes said she's more than up for the challenge following a ceremony with Gov. Linda Lingle, who
recognized Dukes yesterday for her work and her pioneering leadership in emergency services.
“You’re the first people citizens call,” Lingle said. “You have an extremely special role in the
community. I admire very much what you do.”
Dukes began her career as a paramedic and moved up through the ranks. Seven months ago she was
named chief.
Each year on Oahu, EMS responds to more than 66,000 calls for medical emergencies and traumatic
injuries.
Mobile intensive care technicians have attended more than 1,500 hours of college-accredited training in
advanced life support and invasive medical techniques. The city now has 18 ambulance units.
With lei piled high around her neck, Dukes said she was grateful to the state for providing additional
ambulances and paramedics, and for the recognition.
“It’s a honor to be here today,” Dukes said. “I believe that I am a representative of everyone in the
department, not just women.
“I don’t think that there’s a whole lot of significance for a woman to be named to the post. I’m just trying
to do a good job,” she said.
Reach Suzanne Roig at sroig@honoluluadvertiser.com or 395-8831.
Editing Example 6
“Behind the supermarket scene”
Last of two articles on the changing supermarket business
Last week: Putting the ‘super’ back in markets
Problem: This June 29 story, which also had been edited and slotted, contained a suspicious figure:
$10,000, supposedly the amount levied in fines by the state for an incorrectly scanned item at a
supermarket. Initially the writer reported it as fact; later she said to attribute the information to a store
manager quoted in the story. Earlier in the day I’d tried, and failed, to reach a supermarket executive in
town to confirm the figure. Right before deadline, the executive called back to say that the $10,000 figure
was definitely wrong; she said it was closer to $1,000.
Solution: Without further time to check, we took the number out entirely.
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Edited Story
By Wanda A. Adams
Advertiser Food Editor
Foodland Beretania is a “beta” test site: Here, Foodland managers are unveiling their ideas for the
grocery store of the 21st century, Island-style.
Kelly Watt is just what you’d want in a head cashier — someone with a soft voice, gentle smile and an
awesome ability to multitask. Fifteen-year Foodland veteran Araceli Acosta is bakery manager. Trends
here include more scratch baking, more single servings.
Ask why this store was chosen and someone will quip, “Because Jenai shops here,” meaning Foodland’s
chairwoman and chief executive Jenai Wall Sullivan.
Actually, it’s that the customer base for this smallish, urban store — a mix of well-heeled retirees, young
city dwellers and shoppers from nearby neighborhoods — seems receptive to new ideas.
The Advertiser recently made several visits for a backstage glimpse of how a supermarket operates.
1 p.m. Tuesday: Department heads’ meeting
Each week, Foodland Beretania’s department heads crowd into the tiny and distinctly unplush upstairs
office of store director Clarence Morinaga. It’s a chance for Morinaga, a soft-spoken man who has the air
of a likable school principal, to rally his troops.
“Front-end urgency” is the buzz term this week — meaning fast-as-possible checkout times and help
with carry-out. “We all have milk, we all have bread. The one thing that can set us apart is customer
service,” he reminds them. In self-conscious monotones, the department heads read from forms on which
they have recorded their week’s goals and earnings; overtime and other costs; “key initiatives” (important
goals) and anything others might need to know.
Over and over, the same goal emerges: “keeping in stock.” Empty shelves are the cardinal sin.
It’s just before Memorial Day, and the all-important front gondola — the entry display — has to be
redone with summery stuff. The grocery department is planning a full “re-set” to add new health-oriented
freezer goods. Produce is anticipating the arrival of summer stone fruit.
Discussion buzzes around issues customers probably never consider: the quality of the plastic shopping
bags, how to move stuff around the store without using scarce shopping carts, an upcoming “top scrub”
(floor cleaning) in the wee hours.
Supervisors periodically pull products to check them; the goal is no more than two errors in any test of
350 items. If state inspectors find an incorrectly scanned item, the store is fined, said Gonsalves.
Editing Example 7
“Trades applicants getting help with math exam”
Problem: This Sept. 6, 2004, story describes how miserably those trying to get into the construction
industry perform on math exams. While perusing the article initially in first rim, a number popped out at
me: Of 189 carpenter candidates who took the math test, 111 passed and 78 failed — for what the writer
called a 33 percent failure rate. I came up with 41 percent, the correct figure.
Solution: I sent the story back to the business desk and asked that they double check all of the percentages
listed.
Edited Story:
By Dan Nakaso
Advertiser Staff Writer
Wannabe carpenters will get extra help this week preparing for a union math test that could lead to $33-
an-hour jobs in a construction industry expected to help drive Hawaii’s expanding economy for years to
come.
The final round of trade union recruitment is finished for the year. But for more information on future
refresher courses, call the individual labor unions or the Workforce Development Council at 586-8671 or
the Oahu Workforce Investment Board at 591-5555.
Hawaii’s construction industry needs more workers, but about 40 percent of applicants to the Islands’
largest trade union, the carpenters’, historically flunk the eighth-grade math portion of the entrance exam.
“The problem is that there aren’t enough people and there aren’t enough qualified people,” said James
Hardway, spokesman for the state Department of Labor and Industrial Relations.
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So about 200 candidates will take four-hour refresher courses at Honolulu Community College and
Leeward Community College this week in basic math, which is expected to dramatically increase their
chances to pass the required union test.
In a test program last spring, the carpenters’ and plumbers’ unions joined with officials from the state
Department of Labor and Industrial Relations, the city’s Oahu Workforce Investment Board and the
University of Hawaii to come up with a new approach to get more apprentice candidates ready to join their
unions.
UH officials designed a four-hour refresher course that 221 carpenter candidates took. Out of the people
who went through the course, 141 went on to take the carpenter’s math exam and 125 passed — for an 89
percent success rate.
Another 189 carpenter candidates chose not to participate in the refresher course and took the math test
directly. In that group, 111 passed and 78 failed — for a 41 percent failure rate.
Applicants for plumber jobs appear to have fared better on the tests. The plumbers had 80 candidates take
the refresher course and 54 ended up passing the entrance test — for a 68 percent success rate. Another 53
people took the test directly and 79 percent of them passed.
The organizers of what’s called the “pre-apprenticeship program” are trying to figure out why the
outcome was so different for carpenters and plumbers. They’re also wondering why no one took
advantage of a more intense, 16-hour remedial program that UH officials designed for people who weren’t
ready for the four-hour refresher course.
They won’t have much more data to work from because the carpenters will be the last union to recruit
laborers for the year.
But the final round of testing of 400 carpenter candidates is expected to draw recent high school
graduates.
“We’ll be able to find out how prepared high school students are to take the eighth-grade math test,”
Hardway said.
Editing Example 7
Problem: In proofing the “time line” page for our Sept. 2 “Peace in the Pacific” special on the 60th
anniversary of the end of World War II, I noticed this cutline under a photo of POWs: “More than 5,000
American POWs die of Japanese brutality during the Bataan Death March.” This is wrong. Nobody knows
for sure, but it’s generally accepted that about 600-700 Americans and 5,000-10,000 Filipinos died. Our
cutline did not mention the Filipinos at all, a glaring oversight for a paper from Honolulu.
Solution: I consulted encyclopedias and other references and inserted the correct figures in both the
caption and another reference to the death march in the time line. The paper based its time-line
information solely on The History Place.com.
TOP A1 HEDS
Nov. 3 edition, 2007
1-45-5 head:
New
for flu:
‘Drive
up, get
shot’
1-22-3
Vaccinations
Begin today in
Yuba, Sutter
By Andrea Koskey
Appeal-Democrat
4-56-1
Missions merge in Balad
By Nancy Pasternack
Appeal-Democrat
They had crossed paths at Balad Air Base before – stepfather and
stepson, historian and soldier – each working on his own mission in Iraq:
At the time, Beale Air Force Base historian Chris Mayse was in the midst
of documenting 333rd Air Expeditionary Wing operations out of Balad, 31
miles north of Baghdad.
His stepson, U.S. Army medic Edward Hughes, 32, had been assigned to
the 73rd Cavalry Regiment, 82nd Airborne Division. He visited Mayse en
route to a forward operating base near the Iranian border.
Fate and tragedy brought them together in Balad again a few months
later.
Hughes is on nondeployable status, a result of head injuries he
sustained when a truck he was riding in detonated an anti-tank mine.
He does not remember the incident.
He does remember “that my stepfather was there for me.”
It was early in December 2006 when Mayse received a call about his
stepson.
He learned that Hughes was just a few miles away in the hospital, and
that he had been there, unconscious, for several days.
The injured medic finally was lucid, and he had asked that his
stepfather be located.
Hughes lay in an intensive care unit surrounded by service members
who had been injured severely by improvised explosive devices, Mayes
recalls.
Doctors still were unsure whether his stepson had suffered a spinal
injury.
He dreaded calling his wife with this uncertain report.
Far from Iraq
The phone call awakened Terry Mayse from a deep sleep.
“It was one or two in the morning and I wasn’t totally coherent,” she
said this week from her office at Beale.
Mayse had begun to explain the circumstances, when their conversation
was cut short.
“We had incoming mortar fire,” he said, “and I had to hang up.”
The shelling lasted less than 20 minutes. For the soldier’s mother, it
seemed like an eternity.
Her son had already survived six run-ins with improvised explosive
devices during his two tours of duty in Iraq. Now, she learned, he was in a
hospital in Balad.
A Department of Defense employee, mother of two U.S. Army
servicemen and wife of an Air Force veteran stationed in Iraq, she was
accustomed to toughing out her emotions.
“But,” she said in a steely voice, “you can’t help but worry.”
Battles and blessings
His medical humvee had been moving in a convoy, in front of a heavy
vehicle recovery truck. Hughes gave his seat in the humvee to an injured
soldier, and took a seat in the truck behind it.
The humvee was light enough to avoid detonating the mine, but the
recovery truck was not.
According to reports given later to his stepdad, the explosion sent
Hughes’ truck over on its side. Hughes and his driver both suffered
severe concussions. Hughes’ was later found to involve brain injuries.
“They call it traumatic amnesia,” Hughes said Thursday from his duty
station in Fort Myer, Va.
Recently transferred from Fort Bragg, N.C., he is undergoing a long list
of treatments and rehabilitative therapies, and preparing to take on
administrative duties at a military health clinic.
Mayse went on to complete his tour in Iraq and was the first civilian U.S.
Air Force historian to do so.
He received an exemplary civilian service award, presented last month
by Beale 9th Reconnaissance Wing Commander Brig. Gen. H.D. Polumbo.
But the week he spent at Hughes’ bedside – sharing frank thoughts and
feelings as the wounded soldier fell in and out of consciousness – was
“more powerful, and certainly much more personal than a medal,” he
said.
“We went from a stepfather and stepson,” said Hughes, “to a father and
a son.”
The relationship is now a bond, he said, “that nobody else can fathom.”
Surrounded by family
The driver of his truck was discharged from the hospital in Balad at the
same time as Hughes. After that, the two men – close friends – spent one
night in relative luxury, thanks to Mayse’s connections.
If the Army had been caring for them, Hughes said, laughing, “we
would have spent that night in a tent on a cot.”
The pre-fab Air Force building, with heat and air conditioning “and a
real bed,” Hughes said, “felt like a hotel out there.”
Soon afterward, Hughes left Iraq and returned to the U.S. His driver was
eventually sent back to duty and has since died of injuries from another
IED hit.
At Fort Myer, Hughes hopes to ease into something resembling an
ordinary life.
He still suffers from memory loss and, until recently, from frequent and
debilitating migraine headaches. Those, reports his mom, have been
starting to subside.
“No one is saying he can’t make a full recovery,” says Terry Mayse.
On Halloween, Hughes took his two small daughters trick-or-treating,
something he “has come a long way” – emotionally and physically – to be
able to do.
He is surrounded by family: his wife, his children, and his brother,
Brandon, 27, who also is stationed at Fort Myer.
And telephone conversations with his stepfather carry more weight and
unspoken meaning, he said, than they once did.
He feels blessed, he said, to have had Mayse with him through his most
helpless moments.
“I think we both needed each other right then,” he said. “It’s funny what
life throws at you.”
4-36-1
Pedestrian deaths rise as time falls back
By Seth Borenstein
Associated Press
After clocks are turned back this weekend, pedestrians walking during
the evening rush hour are nearly three times more likely to be struck and
killed by cars than before the time change, two scientists calculate.
Ending daylight saving time translates into about 37 more U.S.
pedestrian deaths around 6 p.m. in November compared to October, the
researchers report.
Their study of risk to pedestrians is preliminary but confirms previous
findings of higher deaths after clocks are set back in fall.
It’s not the darkness itself, but the adjustment to earlier nighttime
that’s the killer, said professors Paul Fischbeck and David Gerard, both of
Carnegie Mellon University in Pittsburgh.
Fischbeck, who regularly walks with his 4-year-old twins around 6
p.m., is worried enough that he’ll be more cautious starting Monday.
“A three times increase in the risk is really dramatic, and because of that
we’re carrying a flashlight,” he said.
Fischbeck and Gerard conducted a preliminary study of seven years of
federal traffic fatalities and calculated risk per mile walked for
pedestrians. They found that per-mile risk jumps 186 percent from
October to November, but then drops 21 percent in December.
They said the dropoff in deaths by December indicates the risk is
caused by the trouble both drivers and pedestrians have adjusting when
darkness suddenly comes an hour earlier.
The reverse happens in the morning when clocks are set back and
daylight comes earlier. Pedestrian risk plummets, but there are fewer
walkers then, too. The 13 lives saved at 6 a.m. don’t offset the 37 lost at
6 p.m., the researchers found. The risk for pedestrian deaths at 6 p.m. is
by far the highest in November than any other month, the scientists said.
The danger declines each month through May.
The Insurance Institute for Highway Safety of Arlington, Va., in earlier
studies found the switch from daylight saving time to standard time
increased pedestrian deaths. Going to a year-round daylight savings time
would save about 200 deaths a year, the institute calculated, said
spokesman Russ Rader.
“Benjamin Franklin conceived of daylight saving time as a way of saving
candles,” Rader said Friday. “Today we know it saves lives.”
The risk at 6 p.m. in November, after daylight saving time ends, is 11
times higher than the risk for the same hour in April, when daylight
savings begins, according to the Carnegie Mellon researchers.
Fischbeck and Gerard used federal traffic fatality data that they’ve
incorporated into a searchable database for different risk factors. Their
analysis was not peer-reviewed or being published in a scientific journal.
But it does jibe with other peer-reviewed studies that looked at raw
fatalities.
A 2001 study by John M. Sullivan at the University of Michigan looked at
national traffic statistics from 1987 to 1997 and found that there were 65
crashes killing pedestrians in the week before the clocks fell back and
227 in the week after.
Fischbeck and Gerard found the increase in fatality risk after the end of
daylight savings time is only for pedestrians. No such jump was seen for
drivers or passengers in cars.
Once everyone “springs forward” to daylight saving time in April, there
is a 78 percent drop in risk at 6 p.m., they said.
But overall for the evening rush hour, turning the clock back is a killer.
In seven years there have been 250 more deaths in the fall and 139 fewer
deaths in the spring.
My Top Headlines
All written for The Honolulu Advertiser
Maui makes
like MIT
to seize day
By Will Hoover
Advertiser Staff Writer
Time was running out in the double-elimination final of yesterday’s 12th Annual Hawai’i Science Bowl.
Maui High School team captain Jonathan Nguyen, 17, haltingly recited his answer to the last question of
the day — which called for the letter abbreviations to a sequence of DNA proteins so complicated, some
in the audience had no idea what was being asked.
“... U-A-A-C-C-U-U-G-A-A-C-U ... “ Nguyen said, seconds before the buzzer ended the game.
Moderator Jim Crisafulli paused to check the answer sheet.
“Correct!” he said as the crowd of 150 inside the Kapalama Multimedia Conference Center at Honolulu
Community College gasped, and then applauded.
With that Maui High School scored a stunning win over the defending state champs, Iolani School,
which had gone into the finals undefeated and appeared to be unstoppable.
Putting the ‘super’ back in markets
By Wanda A. Adams
Advertiser Food Editor
Haruko Onishiro of Kapahulu, 73, can remember when there were no supermarkets. Her daughter, Nancy
Lee, 51, of Kaimuki, recalls planning menus, making a list and shopping just once a week. Lee’s daughter,
Tami Lee Souza, 30, of Mililani, says she’s in the supermarket “every day,” even though she has “no time
to cook” except on weekends.
Onishiro and Lee say they cook from scratch less often, and take many more shortcuts — using mixes
and products instead of raw ingredients and buying more heat-and-eat dishes.
All three say food shopping takes a big bite from their budgets — the national average is $38 per person
per week — so price plays a role in their choice of store. But Onishiro, widowed and suffering health
problems, also values single-serve packaging and healthier foods. Lee, whose divorced son has
boomeranged back home with his three children, buys in bulk, shopping both the supermarket and Costco.
Souza and her husband are weekend gourmets, experimenting with wine and Food Network recipes.
ISLAND VOICES/EDITORIAL
Intellectual
titans unite
to do battle
By Robert M. Rees
Those who followed the dust-up at the University of Hawai’i over who may speak and under what
circumstances, as well as the gyrations of the various sides as they proffered why freedom of speech
protects them but not others, learned at least that the meanings of the First Amendment can be downright
challenging in today’s climate of ideological oppression.
For those seeking to better understand this and other great American divides — blue states vs. red states,
Metro vs. Retro, those who adored Mel Gibson’s “Passion of the Christ” vs. those who stood in line for
“Fahrenheit 9/11” — two of America’s intellectual icons will square off in Honolulu for a debate on the
meaning of the First Amendment in post-9/11 America.
The Davis-Levin First Amendment debate coming up Saturday, presented by the American Civil
Liberties Union of Hawai’i and this writer, will be treated to what Judge Robert Bork once called an
intellectual feast designed to push the opposition to the limits of its logic. The debate will feature former
Clinton family nemesis and Independent Counsel Kenneth Starr of the conservative and faith-based right,
versus national ACLU president Nadine Strossen of the liberal and secular left.
Age-discrimination
Worries drive some
To try younger look
By Dave Carpenter
Associated Press
CHICAGO — Gray hair seems like a silvery career asset to 56-year-old Dan Vnuk now that he has
given up dyeing his, hoping to improve his job prospects.
Not so for Aliza Sherman Risdahl, 40, who has felt unspoken pressure for years to color her prematurely
gray hair. “I don’t actually mind them, but ... no one takes women more seriously because we have gray
hairs on our head,” she lamented.
Opinions about the impact of gray hair in business remain conflicted as the workforce gets collectively
older, with the first baby boomers set to turn 60 next year and all 78 million members of America’s largest
generation now older than 40.
By Eloise Aguiar
ADVERTISER WINDWARD O’AHU WRITER
KAILUA —The Kailua Chamber of Commerce is considering breaking with decades of tradition and
discontinuing the annual Fourth of July fireworks display,
but first it wants to hear from local residents.
A decision has to be made by Monday to lock in the reservation for a launchingbarge, said David Earles,
chamber president. The question is, does the community want to continue the tradition?
“It’s not that we’re looking for financial support,” said David Earles, chamber president. “We’re looking
to find the pulse of the people in Kailua.”
The chamber has sponsored a July Fourth parade and fireworks event for more than 25 years, and
fireworks off Popoi’a (Flat) Island at Kailua Beach Park have been a tradition for 50 years. Every year,
thousands of people turn out to watch the fireworks.
But this year, the nearby Kane’ohe Marine base has decided to host its annual Bayfest event — featuring
entertainment, military displays, carnival rides and fireworks displays — on the Fourth of July weekend.
In the past the event has been held in August and September.
Whales threaten
humans’ supply
of fish, Japan says
WASHINGTON POST
TOKYO — This is Japan’s latest argument for resuming its whale hunt: Whales eat too much.
As part of its effort to resume commercial whaling and justify its annual catch of about 500 whales for
“research,” Japan now argues that whales consume more than their share of fish.
“Whales are increasing as fish stocks decline!” trumpets the headline of a halfpage advertisement taken
out in domestic and international newspapers by a government pro-whaling institute. “Whales are
threatening our fisheries.”
Japan’s been trying to lift the international ban on whaling imposed in 1986 and rescue what used to be a
thriving industry. This week, its delegates headed to the annual meeting of the International Whaling
Commission to press its case again,
and to block moves by anti-whaling countries to toughen the ban.
Like the western, the private-eye novel is thoroughly ingrained in American tradition. That doesn’t stop
Irish writer John Connolly, who lives in Dublin, from shaping a pitch-perfect, intensely dark thriller into a
thoroughly American private eye novel set in Maine.
While Maine provides the background of an untamed frontier in his three novels, Connolly adds
supernatural elements as a springboard for his plot. Far from some “I see dead people” gimmick that
would ruin a lesser writer’s tale, Connolly’s smooth, sophisticated handling of the paranormal aspects
makes the evil that pervades “The Killing Kind” seem even more real.
The mournful Charlie “Bird” Parker, an ex-New York cop turned reluctant private
eye, is haunted by visions of his late wife and child and others who have met violent ends. Those visions
keep cropping up when he is hired by a former U.S. senator to look into the apparent suicide of a young
female graduate student.
50 Cent won’t
cover this bill
NEW YORK — A surgeon who treated 50 Cent for bullet wounds three years ago has sued the rapper
for more than $32,000 in unpaid medical bills.
Dr. Nader Paksima says in papers filed in Manhattan’s State Supreme Court that he operated on 50 Cent,
whose real name is Curtis Jackson, at a hospital in May 2000 for several gunshot wounds. The papers
don’t say how many wounds 50 Cent had.
In interviews, 50 Cent has said he peddled crack while growing up in Queens, and that he’s been shot
nine times. No one was arrested for the May 2000 shooting.
Once the protege of slain rap icon Jam Master Jay, 50 Cent has a top-selling CD and was the musical act
last weekend on NBC’s “Saturday Night Live.” 50 Cent is set to perform at Blaisdell Arena on May 27.
Other heads:
Publishers promote old classics with new vigor