Edrl 427-Stansbury Focus Lesson Plan Deavon Hinebauch
Focus Lesson Planning Sheet
Third Grade writing sample: Trait Identification & Rationale This student will benefit from a lesson on sentence fluency, specifically how to construct sentences that enhance meaning. While the topic is interesting, the writing is a bit dry and seems almost mechanical. In addition, the writing requires varying connective words and cues to help the writing flow. Focus Lesson Topic
Constructing sentences to enhance meaning.
Materials
2 Teacher model sample writings Cushioned ball or stuffed animal IPad for paired students
Connection 1 minute
The way sentences are constructed can enhance or obscure meaning. If a writer is trying to make a specific point or take a stand, a short declarative sentence is rational. On the other hand, if the writer is trying to set the scene for a story, the My inquisitive cat and I were playing Hide-n-Seek. I was having fun with my cat, because she is the sneakiest hider in the world. Then we took the game to the park. I thought it would be a good idea because there are so many places to hide at the park. Then I realized, it was not a good idea. Tabby was first to hide. I closed my eyes. Then I couldnt find Tabby. Then I looked under each bush. I started asking people if they saw. It got dark, then I went home. I was devastated that I had lost Tabby. Then there was a knock on the door. It was a kid down the street who found Tabby hiding in a garbage can. I learned two things that day. Tabby is the best hider in the world. Playing Hide-n-Seek with your pet outside is a terrible idea. Edrl 427-Stansbury Focus Lesson Plan Deavon Hinebauch
sentences should be more complex and descriptive. This forces the writer to explore the senses to create a vivid picture, share feelings, and maximize understanding for the reader.
Explicit Instruction 5-10 minutes
Which Is Better Strategy- I am going to read two paragraphs to you, and I want you to tell me which piece of writing you like better.
We went to the beach. It was sunny. It was warm. We had fun. We flew kites and built a sand castle. Then we ate hot dogs. I like spending time with my family. I hope we go again.
My family and I had a wonderful time at the beach! The weather was fabulous, all warm and sunny. All I could smell was the ocean, it invaded my senses. I listened to the seagulls holler and the waves crash around us as we flew our kites and built sandcastles. All of the activities worked up our appetites, so we ate some yummy hot dogs and snacks. I relaxed in the cool sand as I ate, just taking in the beautiful scenery. The sun began to lower over the ocean in front of me, I grew sad knowing our trip was about to be over. All in all it was an amazing day; I especially liked spending time with my family. I hope we go again very soon.
Have students share which they like better and why. List the reasons on the board for students to see and discuss differences. Discuss adjectives, descriptive vocabulary, transitions, and sharing emotion, etc.
Watch me do it. Next, provide a simple sentence, such as The sunset was pretty. and model how to improve the sentences to further meaning and paint a picture.
I gasped when I saw the bright yellow, orange, and pink colors that intertwined around the sun as it set in what seemed like a painted sky.
Guided Practice 3-5 minutes
Pass it On. Start students off with a beginner sentence, such as The clouds rolled into the sky. Begin by holding the stuffed animal/soft ball come up with a sentence to continue the story- only one sentence-Their deep grey color and thick ruffles made me a little nervous. Then throw the stuffed animal/soft ball to a student and ask them to continue the story. They have free reign here, they can take the story wherever they choose, Edrl 427-Stansbury Focus Lesson Plan Deavon Hinebauch
but should consider transitioning and meaningful sentences that entice the listeners. Assist students as needed and help make suggestions for vocabulary to further meaning-include students in making suggestions.
Send Off for Independent Reading
Each student has a writing partner and an iPad. The teacher should provide a paragraph saved on the IPad for students to revise and rewrite that reflects knowledge in enhancing sentences for meaning.
Passage: I like going to the zoo. Going to the zoo is fun. I like the zoo because there are a lot of animals. My favorite animal is a monkey. I like monkeys because they climb trees. I also like them because they can carry their babies on their backs. I think every kid should go to the zoo.
Group Share 5 minutes
Have pairs share their paragraphs whole group when finished. Discuss similarities and differences between each groups paragraphs; emphasize examples that reflect learning from the lesson.
Edrl 427-Stansbury Focus Lesson Plan Deavon Hinebauch