Living in cities have has both advantages and disadvantages.

, one of the major disadvantage of

living in a city is the excessive traffic in which we may lose time and power in order to get from
and to our work, or do run errands especially if you leave live close to the city center .
In some cities, the city center is an old part of the city which was built around different times
and it is unable to handle the increasing numbers of both populations and cars. I am from Cairo
which is one of the biggest cities in the Middle East . Cairo is suffering from a serious traffic
problems, like longer rush hours, excessive blockings and traffic accidents,. Ddespite the
governments efforts on to constructing alternative roads, bridges and tunnels the problem
remains unsolved.
In order to be able to address the problem correctly, one needs is to be fully aware of the
reasons for it. some of the reasons of that cause the traffic issue in Cairo are, different working
hours between the employee of the privet sector than the governmental sector, that the roads
cannot handle the parking for this increasing number which means taking space from the road
itself so the capacity of the street which can maybe handle two cars side by side is now one care
at a time, the fact that all the Cairo resedintat residents choose to leave in the center of the city
no matter how far their work is.
I think that to solve this problem we have to be very strict facing all kind of traffic trespassing,
wrong parking, in the old part of the city we should bane the usage of cars ,as well as construct a
stronger public transportation system that will allow people to get rid of their cars if they found
find a suitable alternative.

Overall, you have very good ideas. However, how you present them is the KEY thing here.
Remember what you say in the tutorial: you need to read the question carefully, get your ideas
together, put a main sentence for each paragraph (like a simple table of contents), write down
the paragraphs, revisit the question again, then read your answer all at once.
For example, in this practice, you needed to mention the following ideas:
1. First, restate the problem (we have a traffic problem, rush hour, etc etc)
2. Reasons for this traffic issue (old cities with their traffic infrastructure not supporting
the growth)
3. State that some people offer banning cars from city center as a solution and state
THEIR reasons (until now you are simply stating facts and observations, no person
opinion)
4. State your opinion whether you agree or disagree and why.
Some general tips:
Do not use generalizations EVER: no everyone believes, everyone agrees, no one
can deny, it is well-known etc.
Comment [NH1]: Energy?
Comment [NH2]: This should come in the end.
This is your conclusion
Comment [NH3]: ?
Comment [NH4]: This makes sense if it was
before the previous paragraph.
Comment [NH5]: Repeated. You mentioned
that in the previous paragraph.
Formatted: List Paragraph, Bulleted + Level:
1 + Aligned at: 0.32" + Indent at: 0.57"
Stay focused.. first sentence of each paragraph should generally be the paragraphs
topic sentence
Try not to make your sentences too too long, and focus on punctuation (commas,
periods, etc.)
Watch out for your usage of verbs, do not do literal translation from Arabic.. for
example, in Arabic we use past tense to refer to hypothetical situations (lao wagado)
whereas in English you should use simple present if they find.
Use the longer form. No dont, cant, Im but do not, cannot, I am.
However, yet, furthermore, nevertheless,