Topic: Violence among students

Narrowed down: Violence among junior and high school

students in Indonesia
Controlling Idea : ban tv programs that give bad example
to students, giving morale education to students and setting
stricter rules
Purpose : to persuade (mode : argumetative)
Introductory paragraph
Thesis statement: banning tv programs that give bad
example to students, giving morale education to students,
and ask the school to set stricter rules are three things that
government can do to prevent violence among junior and
high students in Indonesia
Body paragraph
Paragraph A
Topic sentece : Government has to ban tv programs that give
bad examples to student to prevent violence among junior
and high school students.

Supporting details : 1. Banning tv programs which contains

violence
2.Give a warning to tv stations which
broadcast inappropriate shows
Paragraph B
Topic Sentence: government has to give morale education to
students to prevent violence among students
Supporting details: 1. Give socialization to school
2. Socializing morale education by public
service annoucement or social medias
Paragraph C
Topic Sentence : Government should ask the schools to set
stricter rules to prevent violence among students
Supporting details : 1. Ask the school to set stricter rules at
school
2. Socializing to parents that they should
setting stricter rules at home

What can government do about violence

among students?
We often hear about violence among students. Like what
happened in Jakarta recently,a high school student in jakarta passed
away when he involved in a students brawl and there are three high
school students who get injured when they involved in students brawl
in Sukabumi. Violence among students usually happen between junior
and high school students. Violence among students has become
serious problem in recent decades. According to Komisi Perlindungan
Anak Indonesia (KPAI), violence among students which was reported to
the police increased 20% in 2013. And between 1 January to 15
November 2014 there are 769 student brawls. School, parents, and
also government have tried to overcome and prevent this problem.
One of the example is Ahok. As a Jakarta Governor, Basuki Tjahja
Purnama (Ahok) disperse fifteen high school gangsters to prevent
violence among students. This is one of the proofs that government
has trying to prevent this problem. But, its not effective because
violance still happen in many school. However government has
important role to prevent this matter. Because, if government can
succesfully minimize violence among students cases, this can led to
brighter future. Banning tv programs that contained violence, giving
morale education to students regularly, and asking the school to set
stricter rules are three things that government can do to prevent
violence among junior and high school students in Indonesia.

Government has to ban tv programs that give bad examples to

student to prevent violence among junior and high school students.
Technologies have become important in our daily life. One of the
technologies that has been improving is television. Students usually
watch tv and dont realise that the shows they watch arent suitable
for their ages. For example like action movies which contain fighting
scenes. Once, there was a boy in Jambi who copied smack down scene
from cartoon called Naruto until he passed away. Another example are
soap operas. In recent years soap operas in Indonesia have changed
from educating to misleading the children. Soap operas or short soap
operas these days use inappropriate and provocating title to make the
viewer interested. For example Sumpah Pocong Di Sekolah, Aku
Dibuang Suamiku Seperti Tisu Bekas, Pacar Lebih Penting Dari Istri, Ibu
Jangan Rebut Suamiku, Istri Dari Neraka aka Aku Benci Istriku "etc. And
the soap operas contain bullying, physical violence, verbal abuse,
suicide attempt and so on. For example in a sopa opera called Putih
abu-abu there are some scenes where the lead actor, Nina being
teased by her friends and even physical abuse. And another example
in soap opera called Ganteng ganteng serigala there are some
fighting scenes. So without parents directions, students can copy some
violance contained in the shows which can led to death. Basically,
government has to ban tv programs which contain violence .
Government has to give morale education to students to prevent
violence among junior and high school students. Its very essential
step. By socializing what violence is, the negative effect that students
can get , it can make students more aware about violence among
students and choose to avoid it. And they can also share it to their
friends who involved in violence among studens. First, government
has to go to schools to give socialization. Second, Government can

also use public service announcements (PSA) and social medias as the
tools to give socialization. This can be effective because most of
students watch tv and use social medias these days. To make the
students take this seriously, government has to make the public
service annoncement and advertisements more interesting. For
example, they can use public figure or celebrity as the model to warn
the students about violence among students. Because idols usually
have big influences to teenage life.
Government should ask the schools to set stricter rules to
prevent violence among junior and high school students. Government
must demand the schools that they have to make the schools
regulation more threatening. Because the more stricter rules that the
school have the more likely students obey the rules. For example,
school should give punishment like suspension or spell from school.
Even though every school already set these kinds of rules but its not
quite effective especially suspension. Usually schools just give
suspension for few days in order to maintain the schools reputation.
Suspension is not make the students stop doing the violence. Spell is
the right choice to make the students stop. And also parent has a big
role to guide their children. Government also need to socializing this
problem to parents by ask the parents to guide their children by giving
them information and give them attention. Parents should
In conclusion, the government has important roles to overcome
this problem. Because Indonesias future has become Indonesian
children responsibility. So, government has to work together with
parents and school to prevent and overcome violence among student
for a better future.