IELTS WRITING TASK 2

thi 06/12/14:
Some people think that it is best to live in a horizontal city while others think of a
vertical city. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Dch s lc (cc dch u ch l dch i bn hiu bi)
Mt vi ngi tin rng tt nht l nn sng trong 1 thnh ph nhiu nh thp
trong khi ngi khc tin rng sng trong chung c cao tng
y l mt bi kh kh ngh . Nhiu bn c th ngh n nhng ideas phc tp :
mt pht trin xy dng, vn pht trin dn s, hiu qu s dng tCc rt
hay nhng mnh ngh a phn cc bn i thi s khng th ngh ra khi trong phng thi.
Mnh lun hng n vic s dng cc n gin mi ngi d hc (quan trng l
cc tr li c cu hi bi v c h tr y )

Sau y l bi phn tch t mt bi vit ca hc sinh c mnh correct li v tt

t band 8.0 (bi ny c gi chm v chng thc s im)
Trc khi c bi phn tch ny, cc bn c th tham kho video hng dn vit dng
ny (Discuss both views and give your opinion) ca mnh ti link:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6Xa5LNt0NxI

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HNG DN TNG BC VIT
I. INTRODUCTION
Intro ca IELTS task 2 thng c 2 cu
+ Paraphrase the keywords of the topic
+ Answer the question part of the task
Cu 1: mnh s paraphrase li cu ca bi:
bi: Some people think that it is best to live in a horizontal city while others think of a
vertical city

Vit li: Some people believe that living in a horizontal city is the best, while the opponents of
this idea are of the opinion to settle in a vertical city
(Gii thch: mi ngi thy l cu vit li vn gi nguyn ca bi, ch vit li cho khc i
mt cht. Cc phn t mu l cc phn c vit li)

Cu 2: mnh tr li cu hi ca bi
bi: Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Tr li:
While there are benefits for residents to dwell (c ng) in a city which consists of low-rise
construction, I would argue that cities with skyscrapers (ta nh chc tri) and high-rise
buildings offer more advantages.
(gii thch: bi nu cu hi tho lun 2 quan im: sng thnh ph nhiu nh chc tri hay
l thnh ph nhiu nh thp v hi quan im mnh theo no.

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Cu tr li ca mnh dng cu trc While, I would argue that gm 2 v
V 1: mnh nu trong khi c nhng thun li cho vic c ng 1 thnh ph nhiu nh thp
tng. V 2 mnh nu quan im bn thn: ti tranh ci rng cc thnh ph c nhiu nh cao
tng mang li nhiu li ch hn.
Mt cu tr li nh vy l ph hp, gii thch st v cht vi bi nu ra.

II. BODY PARAGRAPH

Thn bi mnh s b cc thnh 2 kh h tr cho nu ra m bi
+ 1 kh h tr cho v 1 (ni v horizontal city- thnh ph vi nh thp tng)

+ 1 kh h tr cho v 2 (ni v vertical city thnh ph vi nh cao tng)

1. BODY 1:

On the one hand, it is beneficial for residents to live in a horizontal city because of its
advantages. Firstly, people have to pay less for building services. If residents settle in a
private house, they may save a great deal of money since they do not have to spend a sum
on any charges for building services. Secondly, it is safer for inhabitants when
emergencies occur. For example, if there is a fire starting in a house, they can quickly
escape from dangerous areas because the building is not too high and it would not take
much time to leave.

Comment [A1]: S dng on the one hand rt

tt bt u kh 1 cho nhng dng kiu Discuss
+ discuss vs opinion

(Gii thch: xem phn comment bn phi. Mi ngi thy l idea mnh nu ra khng c
g l ao to ba ln hay qu kh hiu m rt n gin. Quan trng l mi a ra c
mnh gii thch y , chnh xc)

Comment [A4]: Gii thch cho h tr th

nht: Nu dn c sng nh ring, h c th tit
kim tin do khng phi chi tr cho ph dch v ca
ta nh

Comment [A2]: Cu TOPIC SENTENCE ny m

bo 2 :
+ Bm vo v 1 trong cu th 2 ca intro : nu
sng nh thp tng c thun li
+ Nu c trung tm ca on vn
Comment [A3]: h tr th nht cho cu topic
sentence: ngi ta s phi tr t hn cho dch v ca
ta nh

Comment [A5]: h tr th hai cho cu topic

sentence: an ton hn cho c dn nu c trng
hp khn cp xy ra
Comment [A6]: a ra v d gii thch cho h
tr th hai: nu chy th h c th chy trn nhanh
chng do ta nh khng qu cao v khng mt
nhiu thi gian chy thot.

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2. BODY 2:
On the other hand, it seems to me that living in a vertical city is the best choice. A city
with skyscrapers could have more spaces for public usage. In particular, there will be less
land used for residential areas due to the construction of high buildings. As a result, the
government could take advantage of land to build hospitals, schools or places for
entertainment. Furthermore, it is much more convenient for residents to live in an
apartment in a tall building.This is simply because a wide range of goods and services are
often included in high buildings thanks to shopping malls and service chains on lower
floors.

Comment [A7]: Cu TOPIC SENTENCE ny m

bo 2 :
+ Bm vo v 2 trong cu th 2 ca intro : nu quan
im bn thn l sng nh cao tng.
+ Nu c trung tm ca on vn
Comment [A8]: h tr th nht cho cu topic
sentence: thnh ph c nhiu nh cao tng s c
nhiu t phc cho cc mc ch cng cng hn
Comment [A9]: Gii thch cho h tr th
nht: s c t t phi s dng hn do xy dng
nh cao tng. Chnh ph c th s dng t ny xy
dng bnh vin, trng hc, ch gii tr (public
usage)
Comment [A10]: h tr th hai cho cu topic
sentence: thun tin hn cho dn c
Comment [A11]: a ra gii thch cho h tr
th hai: v dch v v hng ha thng c bao
gm trong nh cao tng hn (shopping maill, chui
dch v tng thp hn)

(gii thch: xem phn comment bn phi)

III. CONCLUSION

Cch vit Conclusion l paraphrase li overall idea (vit li gi nguyn idea) ca idea nu
m bi (c th y l cu th 2 phn intro)
INTRODUCTION:
Cu th 2 phn intro: While there are benefits for residents to dwell (c ng) in a city which
consists of low-rise construction, I would argue that cities with skyscrapers (ta nh chc tri)
and high-rise buildings offer more advantages.

CONCLUSION:
Cu vit li: In conclusion, while living in a horizontal city is advantageous, it seems to me that
life in a city which has skyscrapers is the best choice due to its benefits.
(Gii thch: phn bi mu l cc t vit li)
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Mi ngi c th xem thm nhn xt ca gim kho di. im cho cng ch l 1 gim kho
cho (cc gim kho khc nhau quan im chm cng khc nhau), nhng mnh tin rng bi ny
tt t band 8.0 v mi ngi c th s dng tham kho rt tt.

IELTS EXAMINER COMMENTS

Grade
Task Response

8.5

This was an interesting task question. To be honest, I have not seen this
topic before. You answered the question fully. I cannot improve on the
technique which you used. You stated your position clearly in the
introduction and consistently throughout the essay. The beginning of
paragraph 3 and your conclusion were the ideal places to re-state your
opinion. All the points which you mentioned were relevant and fully
developed and I have to give a score of 8.5 for this section.

Cohesion and
Coherence

9.0

Vocabulary

8.5

Your paragraph structure was, as I have already mentioned, clear and logical.
I then looked at your topic sentences. These indicated expertly the central
idea in each paragraph. I therefore scored 9 again.
The language meets the criteria (natural and appropriate) . The essay
contained some good topic vocabulary: low-rise construction/skyscrapers
and high-rise buildings/building services/thanks to shopping malls and
service chains on lower floors.
You certainly used a good range of grammar, including adverb clauses,
relative clauses, conditional forms, comparatives and other useful
constructions. So, this section again achieves a maximum score.

Grammar

Overall

8.5~9.0

8.5

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Nu mi ngi thy c ch th hy vng sau khi c -> comment ng vin mnh vi cu mnh
tip tc c ng lc lm tip cc bi phn tch cht lng hn na nh :D

Cm n mi ngi !
-Ngc Bch-

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