Academic Writing Style

How do the following passages differ (think style and content)?

Passage A
Does crime have something to do with being poor? Well, I think that it does
where theres poverty theres often crime - but not totally. If youre poor and
need money for something and you dont have it you might think about
stealing it, especially when you see a load of rich people about. But poor
people dont all go around stealing. My Nan was poor and she would never
steal. I can see her now with her hair in curlers, wearing bright red socks and
green slippers hand-washing all the clothes late into the night, after a full days
work. And I knew a bloke once who had loads of money but he used to jack
cars. A bad thing to do. He didnt ever get caught. So it isnt just lack of money
that causes crime. So we shouldnt blame poor people for the rise in crime as
they can be very honest and rich people might not be.

Passage B

It has been argued by Smith (1997) that a rise in poverty can be correlated
with a rise in the crime figures; this suggests, he argues that poverty leads to
more crime. Before examining a possible relationship between poverty and
crime, however, it is important to look at certain issues. Firstly, correlation is
not the same thing as causation. The fact that both poverty and crime
increased during the 1980s in the U.K. does not mean that one caused the
other; it might be that something else caused them both. Secondly, crime
statistics can be highly misleading. For example, they may not reveal the
extent to which members of a higher socio-economic group might commit
crime which can go undetected. Thirdly, no one would argue that all poor
people are criminals. It is possible that other important causes of crime are
ignored by a concentration on poverty. Therefore, it is necessary to look
beyond these statistics.
See Academic Style part 2 for possible answer
Academic style, part 2

Passage A

Passage B

Use of I

Use of he or Smith etc.

personal

impersonal

Anecdotal - information from

own experiences (my nan)

Evidence used to support statements

No display of research

Research displayed

Information comes from writers

experience

Information comes from a range of

sources

Emotional language subjective

Unemotional language cautious

Strongly worded

Qualifying words carefully worded

Vivid description

Analytic, cool

Informal language - colloquial

Formal vocabulary and technical

terms

Lack of argument

Shows steps in argument uses

linking words.

Rambling or narrative structure

Moves back and forth from

generalisations and supporting
examples

Personal feelings and views

Evidence and argument

Always uses active voice

Passive voice used

Easy to understand

Difficult to grasp the main points

Simply sentence structure

Complex sentence structure