Name: Zac Amundson

Teacher: Martin
Period: 3rd

Unit 3.1 Practice Essay Writing- 600 CE- 1450

CE
Chapter 9 and 1 DBQ
AP World History 2015-16
1/2 Summative grade
Due November 2nd at Midnight

Comparison Essay outline- Ch. 9

Analyze similarities and differences of the effects of Chinese culture on two
of the following areas between 600 and 1450.
a. Japan
b. Korea
c. Vietnam
d. Nomads
Prewriting:
Japan:

Similarities:

They absorbed Confucianism

The took Buddhism as the main religion
They took the Chinese capital and made two capital cities Nara and Heian
Poetry was popular in Japan, just as in China
Both adopted the role of the Mandate of Heaven

Japan didn't have a huge military threat

They didn't have a central government
Different writing forms
Poetry was in a different form
Warrior class in Japan
Women lost a lot of freedoms due to the rise of the warrior class
They took the Chinese calendar
They took the Chinese style tax system
They had a voluntary adoption
They stopped the tribute system with China, and they mainly cut off the rest of the world
No exam system
Shinto

They took parts of the Chinese writing form, and originated from the same place
They used the state exam system
They adopted Buddhism
and they adopted Confucianism
They viewed themselves as an extension of China
Both adopted the role of the Mandate of Heaven in someway

They had female deities

They kept a lot of their own practices
Women had a role in the economy
Irrigation systems

Differences:

Vietnam:
Similarities:

Differences:

Similarities

Tribute system

Unique writing system developed

Elite culture borrowed Chinese ideals

Capitols modeled after Chinese capitols

Administration and government were Chinese influenced (Mandate, rituals, seeking expansion)
Reason for Similarities

Close proximity to China

Unique writing system developed in order to fight growing Chinese influence
Both eventually acquired political independence
Tribute system
Trade

Differences

Japan borrowed voluntarily from China

Japanese women acquired much more power

Establishment of exam system for commoner social mobility

In Japan, Buddhist schools affected every aspect of Japanese life (art, medicine,etc.)

In Japan, the tribute system stopped in the 10th century, creating a distinctive Japanese
civilization where a bureaucracy never formed

In Vietnam, Chinese clothing and hairstyles were mandatory

Reason for Differences

Japan borrowed voluntarily because its islands were physically separate from China
Japan lacked lacked Confucian values, giving Japanese women more rights
In Japan, powerful aristocratic families decentralized the government
Vietnam established a bureaucracy because elites were educated into it
Heartland of Vietnam was fully incorporated into the Chinese state for over a thousand years

1. Thesis:
RED- 1 point
One or more sentences
Contains a valid similarity and a valid difference

In the heartland of East Asia lay the middle kingdom () , the

developing super star of the region. Chinese practices were put to good
use in the kingdom, but the need for expansion was great, as the good
deeds done there could not be contained. The tribute system linked
countries far and wide to the great power stemming from the middle
kingdom, countries adopted bulk amounts of culture, while some could
be very selective. China, as a nation, was very expansive and brought a
lot of land under their control, and this time under control helped to
spread Chinese culture due to their proximity. But others were further
away, isolated by water, and only were able to exchange cultures by
trade and diplomacy.
2. Body 1- Similarity or Difference GREEN- 1 point
Topic Sentence: Stating the Similarity or Difference in detail.

The development of the Chinese culture along the banks of Chinese river
valleys stemmed the tide for an upsurging wave of culture, as we see by
the Chinese ways of life replicated in the nations that it touched
culturally. Vietnam, under control for 1000 years by the Chinese, was well
rooted into the Chinese system, involved in the tribute system, modeled
their capitol after Changan, developed a new style of writing to separate
themselves from their Chinese neighbors. But so did another case, an
isolated island to the East, Japan, as it followed these similarities to the
dot in comparison to Vietnam.
Evidence (Facts) and Substantiation (Explanation) for the Similarity or
difference. BLUE- 1 point

Vietnam, just South of the great Chinese border, was an expansion

project of the Chinese government many years ago. This project to move
South was forced upon them by the pillaging nomads who extorted the
government. Vietnam, however, was a great bread basket for the
country, importing rice and animals, while giving these strains to China.
This trading with their vassal lords brought tons of Chinese culture into
their borders, including the modeling of their capitol after Changan, the
development of a unique language for writing, the absorption of
Confucianism and the fostering of Buddhism. All of these features were
brought by the trading system put in place by the imperial tribute
system, a system that connected countries with the government of China
through the donation of goods at the throne of the Chinese emperor. In
turn, countries were able to trade with China and develop a taste for their
culture, only to bring it back to their country and sow the seeds. Although

Vietnam was important to China, the country broke away after 1000
years of being a Chinese vassal state, but was still incorporated into the
tribute system. Also in that tribute system was the smaller island nation
of Japan. Japan was isolated from mainland China, and thus there was no
Chinese take over of the nation. The island nation was able to send
diplomats to perform in the tribute system and sent over scholars to
learn from China. In this way, Japan was able to select morsels of Chinese
culture to devour and make their own, such as the taking of Changan
and modeling two capitol cities after it, Heian and Nara, the development
of a separate language from Chinese characters, and the fostering of
Buddhism by the scholars. The Japanese took the culture from China and
did not involve themselves too much with the huge nation after that,
since it could be selective in its adoption of Chinese culture.
Reason: Why/How is the similarity or difference shared? PINK- 1 point

Both Vietnam and the island nation of Japan were similar during this age
due to the fact that they adopted similar aspects of the Chinese life and
culture, such as Buddhism, the development and architecture from
Changan, and the development of a separate language from Chinese
characters. All of this was done through the trade with China, their
involvement in the Chinese tribute system, and their relative closeness to
China.

3. Body 2- Similarity or Difference GREEN- 1 point

Topic Sentence: Stating the Similarity or Difference in detail.

The development of a separate culture from the Chinese basis worked

differently for Vietnam and Japan, who were in different realms, since
Vietnam was south of China and touched the border, and Japan who was
to the East and separated by a large body water. The tribute system
contact remained for different intervals between the two cultures, and
the absence of Confucianism lead to no formation of a bureaucracy in
Japan.
Evidence (Facts) and Substantiation (Explanation) for the Similarity or
difference. BLUE- 1 point

The separation from the Chinese mainland developed the voluntary

adoption of Chinese principles, rather than the forced adoption from
Vietnam. The Vietnamese people regularly followed the trends in the
Chinese styles and adopted the Chinese style of bureaucracy due to its
role of adopting Confucianism. The Japanese however were allowed more
of a freedom since there was no direct threat to their security by the
nation. The country did not accept the Chinese bureaucracy like the
Vietnamese. In Japan, no civil service exams emerged, but in Vietnam
they did, allowing for more social mobility. This social mobility was
counter acted in Japan by failure to adopt Confucianism, which severely
limited the freedoms of women, and allowed for women to prosper more
under a less restrictive regime. Vietnam, since they adopted so many of
the Chinese customs and were once the bread basket of their nation,
the Vietnamese adopted the Chinese style of irrigation. The Japanese
were further North than the southern Chinese planting domain, and were
not a part of the Chinese trade system for a long time, which explains
why the irrigation systems that the Chinese used never appeared in the
Japanese gardens. This irrigation system could have been a unifying
factor if it was adopted by the Japanese, but the Japanese governments
did not and thus remained as independent family houses of power. The
Vietnamese, however, adopted this irrigation system and was once ruled
by the central power of the Chinese government, which set a precedent
for a central government in their lands. These regional families that ruled
the grounds of Japan helped stress the traditional family values that their
society has had in place for generations, involving ancestor veneration
and the adoption of Buddhism into the status quo of Shintoism. Vietnam
took this a bit further and included women in their religion by allowing
them to be portrayed as goddesses.
Reason: Why/How is the similarity or difference shared? PINK- 1 point

These differences came to being by the geographical boundaries and

open borders with China, as Vietnam was connected to China and traded
openly, while Japan was separated by an ocean and trade was limited by
the journey and the growing xenophobic nature of the Japanese. This
caused a rift in the two nations when compared to the Chinese as one
allowed for frequent adoption of Chinese influences and customs; the
other was involved in the Chinese governmental system, got what they
needed, and grew away to their own nation.

DBQ Essay outline- Title

Thesis:
RED- 1 point
One or more sentences
Answers the question fully- the goal being three categories based on your
three groups.

The Olympics, a peace bringing event for the world, was restarted in the
late 1800s, just in time to help hold the world together. Although, over
time we have seen a bell curve, with peace at both ends, and the failure
to prevent warfare in the middle. Spawning from its humble origins lay a
spawn of the global world economy, political assertions, and basic human
rights. The Olympics was also a source of growing inequality through
time, as corporations started to take over this big business. Times of
triumph and memories of grandeur lead countries to bolster their efforts
to restore and keep their great status.
Body 1- Grouping 1 BLUE- 1 point
Topic Sentence: Answers the question through introducing your 1st
grouping- Common Characteristics

From the beginning of the revival, just like in ancient times, women were
a small minority in the athletic games, probably due to stigma and
culture surrounding womens strength. Over time that number has grown
from every country participating in the Olympics, probably due to the
social movements in the mid 1900s for womens equality. A common
element of this was national pride, which was taken in by some women
and was adopted as the driving factor. But a growing problem was the
idea of freedom for all.
4. Evidence (Facts) and Substantiation (Explanation) using each
document (source) in the grouping. Answer the question. Refer to the
source (name it) and the document. GREEN- 1 point
- Analyze POV at least once
- Ask for an additional document (source)- Why? How would this help
you answer the question.

The amount of women during the very beginning of the revival of the
Olympic spirit would be shamed by todays standards of equality. In 1908,
a newspaper was reporting on the Olympic games held in Britain, and
reported that only two percent of the athletes were women, a stark
minority. The photograph pictures Sybil Newall, a British Archer who was
representing her country (Doc 2). The photographer and news paper's
thoughts would have been about the rarity of this women in the sports
competition dominated by men; reporting such a rarity, in their minds,
would help enlighten their readers and the world about the inequality
facing women in the international competition. They knew that this
photograph was the catalyst that would drive the movement for equality
in all aspect of life, and would result in an increase in womens
participation, for their nations pride. Fast forward to 1992, the Olympic
games held in Spain, and you will see a noticeable improvement in the
amount of women being involved. Hassiba Boulmerka was one of the
women competitors in the mix, and she was interviewed in 1995 about
her role in and life beyond the Olympics. The newspaper interview
reports on her inequality at home, where social tension and cultural norm
did not allow her to wear shorts, while men could (Doc 8). Her drive is to
promote the ability for more women to be able to join in on this program,
and has a huge national pride on her back. Her wins will bring more
confidence to women and her country involving a huge spike in the
population of women in the Olympic camps. The newspaper also reports
on the fact that 29 percent of the competitors in the games were women,
a huge growth of nearly 1450% from 1902. This was all due to the fact
that women were becoming more confident, and their countries were
beginning to believe in them. Although, we do not see the lists of women
participating from every country, so we can not be specific about the
data until we see the list of individual countries and their participants, so
that we can make a more correct assertion. Halfway around the world in
Pakistan, a split happened between India and Pakistan in 1947, and gave
a promising growth for women. Women were now no longer under the
sway of the Hindu caste system, and could rise above the fray of gender
inequality (Doc 10). This document, however, does not report on the
amount of female athletes that the country sent to compete, and thus
the claims would be better reinforced once we have that. The analysis of
this document leads to the understanding that they had a rivalry with
India, and that rivalry presents a challenge to compete for national pride.
Now that everyone was freed from the caste system, they had the need
to compete with India, and that presented better odds of them doing
because they were good at it, not because their jati forced them to do so.
Basic Paragraph structure:
Topic Sentence (what characteristic do these docs share, and how does that support the thesis?)
Evidence Doc #1 (what text/idea from doc #1 supports this paragraphs topic/thesis?)
POV/Analysis of doc #1

 Evidence Doc #2 (what text/idea from doc #2 supports this paragraphs topic/thesis?)
POV/Analysis of doc #2
Evidence Doc #3 (what text/idea from doc #3 supports this paragraphs topic/thesis?)
POV/Analysis of doc #3
How these docs relate/compare to each other. (The fullest understanding of any particular document emerges
only when that document is viewed within the wider context of all the documents.)
Additional Doc (be sure to relate how/why this doc would be useful in answering question)
Conclusion

Lets take a closer look at that POV..Write it below.

Purple- 1 point
Explains why this particular
person might have this particular opinion OR what particular feature informs the authors or intended audiences POV.

Must move beyond a mere description of that individual by

considering and explaining the tone, characteristics of the author, intended audience, and/ or how the intended outcome may have
influenced the authors opinion.
Mere attribution (copying or repeating info verbatim from the source line of the doc) is not sufficient.

The photographer and news paper's thoughts would have been about the
rarity of this women in the sports competition dominated by men;
reporting such a rarity, in their minds, would help enlighten their readers
and the world about the inequality facing women in the international
competition. They knew that this photograph was the catalyst that would
drive the movement for equality in all aspect of life, and would result in
an increase in womens participation, for their nations pride.

Lets take a closer look at the Additional Document (Source)

..Write it below. Orange- 1 point
Tell me an additional source and how it would help you answer the question.
Although, we do not see the lists of women participating from every
country, so we can not be specific about the data until we see the list of
individual countries and their participants, so that we can make a more
correct assertion.
or
This document, however, does not report on the amount of female
athletes that the country sent to compete, and thus the claims would be
better reinforced once we have that. The analysis of this document leads
to the understanding that they had a rivalry with India, and that rivalry
presents a challenge to compete for national pride. Now that everyone
was freed from the caste system, they had the need to compete with
India, and that presented better odds of them doing because they were

good at it, not because their jati forced them to do so.