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Overview: Including Outside Sources
Once you have evaluated your source materials and selected the ones you are going
to use, you must decide on how best to include them in your work: quoting directly,
paraphrasing passages or, simply summarizing the main points.
One, two or all three can be used in a document. The following sections provide
instructions, examples and discussion on a range of issues related to this topic.
Quoting Directly
Quoting Previously Quoted Material
Using a Quotation within a Quotation
Using Block Quotations
To Quote or Not to Quote
Editing Quotations
Blending Quoted Material
Grammar and Spelling Issues
Punctuating Quotations
Quoting Directly
Quoting Directly means taking a specific statement or passage made directly by an
author and including it, word for word, in your work. The words you quote are
original to the author you are quoting and are not taken from any other source.
--from Brenda Edmands, "The Gaze That Condemns: White Readers, Othering And
Division in Toni Morrison's The Bluest Eye" (Unpublished Essay)
Napieralski's statement, previously quoted by Edmonds, quoted in the
following passage:
In Morrison's novel, The Bluest Eye, the overriding question is about responsibility
according to Professor Edmund A. Napieralski: "Who or what is, after all,
responsible for the soil that is bad for certain kinds of flowers, for seeds it
will not nurture, for fruit it will not bear?" (qtd. in Edmands)
Note how the citation here tells the reader that this quotation was previously quoted
in the source by Edmands and how it appears outside of the sentence in which the
quote appears.
seeds it will not nurture, for fruit it will not bear?' (Napieralski 61)" ("The
Gaze That Condemns").
Note how the material quoted from Napieralski is enclosed by single quotation marks
while the entire passage taken from the Edmands essay, including the Napieralski
quote, is enclosed in double quotation marks. As with a direct quotation, the relevant
documentation is cited within the sentence in which it appears.
Notice how the opening frame in the paragraph below introduces the quotation. First,
a general point is made regarding increased mountain lion encounters. Next,
Biologist Samuel Cronin, a credible expert, is introduced. The fact that Cronin
"agrees" tips the reader that the quotation is there to support the writer's view
presented in the opening frame.
Each year has seen an increase in encounters between humans, and their pets, and
mountain lions. This is the fault of humans encroaching on the animal's rightful
territory. Biologist Samuel Cronin agrees: "These kinds of attacks must be laid
squarely at the pedicured feet of yuppie mountain dwellers who build million-dollar
homes in the foothills, right smack in the middle of the mountain lion's usual hunting
ground, and then wonder why their poodle Fifi becomes lion chow, or why when they
go to put their garbage out, they find themselves staring into a lion's unblinking
golden gaze." It is our behavior that has created the danger. The lion did not come
down out of the mountains into our suburban backyards; we've moved the suburbs
into his.
The closing frame focuses the reader's attention on the fact that human behavior and
the issue of where million-dollar homes are built is the main point and that other
issues, such as keeping pets in a wild area and class-status of home owners, is not.
Notice how restating the idea in the Cronin quotation allows the writer's own voice to
emerge. A strong personal statement on the subject clarifies why the quotation was
included in the first place.
cycling advocate Harold Burns, "[T]here are economic benefits to cycling. I save
money on gas, car insurance, parking fees, and maintenance costs on my car. While
there are occasional costs for maintenance on my bicycle, much of the work I can do
myself, and when I do have to take it to a bike shop, the hourly rate for labor is
considerably lower than what most auto mechanics receive" (154). Cycling, we can
see, is good for the well being of your body and your wallet.
Overview: Paraphrasing
Accurate Paraphrasing
How to Paraphrase without Plagiarizing
Overview: Paraphrasing
Simply quoting someone on a subject achieves little toward building your own
scholarly reputation. In many cases, the choice to paraphrase rather than quote
demonstrates your grasp of the subject matter. It also enhances your credibility as
both a critical reader and thinker.
Being able to paraphrase accurately demonstrates that you respect the contributions
made by others while showcasing your own skill as a writer. This is especially useful
when you want to point out specific details or information bearing directly on your
argument or, when you wish to reference an opposing idea.
As with summarizing and quoting, whenever you restate someone else's words,
thoughts or points of view you must document the source.
Accurate Paraphrasing
Accurate paraphrasing requires careful attention to the nuance and meaning of
words. The ones you choose must reflect the meaning found in the original source
without plagiarizing its author.
The key to this begins with your own comprehension. How well you understand the
contents of a passage will determine how accurately you restate it in your own
words. Using sentence structures and rhythm patterns that are uniquely your own
will distinguish your voice from the ones you paraphrase.
When you are through there should be no mistake regarding the speaker's identity.
The following example illustrates accurate, inaccurate as well as inappropriate
paraphrasing.
the seafloor there for a core because of sea ice drifting around like massive jigsaw
puzzle pieces.
In this example, the wording and sentence structured corresponds too closely to the
original for it to be fairly called a paraphrase.
Source: Pray, L. A. (2005). Soiled Genes: Can toxic exposures be inherited? Orion
Magazine. Retrieved December 15, 2005, from
http://www.oriononline.org/pages/om/05-6om/Pray.html.
The original passage contains three relevant pieces of information that need
restating in order to create an accurate paraphrase. The highlights in paragraph A
below identify these pieces of information.
(A) Derived partially from "the Greek prefix epi-, which means "on" or in addition,"
the epigenome is to the cell what an organism's sensory organs are the individual.
Like an octopus's tentacles that, among other functions, gather information from the
environment so that the brain can tell the neurons, "Move your eighth arm here, "
the epigenome gathers information from the cell's environment and tells the genes,
"turn on" or "turn off." In science lingo, it governs "gene expression." Based on
emerging evidence, the epigenome appears to play a vital role in most, if not all,
cellular activity, from metabolism to fertilization.
Paragraph B below restates the highlighted information and cites the source. Notice
that it is roughly the same length as the original. This is as it should be; a summary
would need to be shorter. Consider Paragraph B a first draft. It's still a little wordy.
(B) Pray (2005) compares the epigenomes of a cell to the sensory organs of an
individual. She likens them to octopus tentacles gathering information from the
environment so that the brain has something to work with when deciding what
instructions to send the neurons governing specific tasks, like moving an arm for
instance. The epigenomes turn genes governing cellular activity on or off. The latest
research suggests that epigenomes (the Greek prefix epi-, meaning "on"), are an
integral and decisive part of practically every cellular activity, from metabolism to
fertilization, known to science.
Paragraph C is a final revision based on the draft above. Notice how the sentence
structure and word choices have evolved and yet the essential meaning of the
paragraph has not changed.
(C) Reporting on recent research, Pray (2005) observes that epigenomes (the prefix
epi-, meaning "on" in Greek) are much like the tentacles of an octopus. Attached to
individual cells, the epigenomes collect and provide external data to specific genes as
do the tentacles to the brain of an octopus. As the octopus's brain transmits a signal
via a neuron back to one of its tentacles telling it to move, the latest scientific
evidence indicates that epigenomes are the transmitters responsible for conveying
the information that flips the on/off switch on the genes governing practically every
kind of cellular-activity, from metabolism to fertilization, known to science.
Overview: Summarizing
Be
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Accurate
Objective
Focused
Concise
Being Accurate
Being accurate requires that you fully understand the ideas and information
presented in your source material. Misunderstanding an author's tone of voice or
misinterpreting the information he or she has extrapolated from numerical data, for
instance, may cause you to inadvertently misrepresent their point of view, ideas,
opinions or position.
Original Source:
At slaughterhouses, on too-fast production lines, manure and the contents of
stomachs and intestines often splatter the meat. In winter, about 1 percent of cattle
from feedlots harbor E. coli; in summer, up to 50 percent can do so. "Even if you
assume that only one percent is infected, that means three or four cattle bearing the
microbe are eviscerated at a large slaughterhouse every hour, and a single animal
infected with E. coli can contaminate 32,000 pounds of ground beef," Schlosser
writes.
--Excerpted from Mindy Pennybacker, "Why Fast Food Costs Too Much"
Inaccurate Summary:
In her Green Guide article, "Why Fast Food Costs Too Much" Mindy Pennybacker
states that one percent of the cattle slaughtered in a fast-paced, meat-processing
plant on any given day carry the E. coli microbe and, as a result, 32,000 pounds of
ground beef are contaminated in the eviscerating process every hour.
On the surface this summary appears to be accurate, however, it is not. As in most
cases, inaccuracies are caused by omission or misinterpretation of facts.
In the first place, Pennybacker refers specifically to feedlot cattle in her article. This
fact is important and must be included so that your readers understand the author's
argument: pasture-fed and feedlot cattle carry widely differing risks in the slaughter
and meat-packing process.
Secondly, the summary omits the fact that up to 50 percent of the cattle may carry
the E. coli microbe during the summer months. It obscures the fact that the author
deliberately chose the lower, one-percent figure as a baseline from which to draw a
conclusion. The phrases "on any given day" and "every hour" are suggestive halftruths and completely inappropriate.
Lastly, the summary misstates the Eric Schlosser quote, which will lead the reader to
a wrong conclusion. There is a world of difference between the words are and can.
The summary states that 32,000 pounds of ground beef are contaminated every
hour. In fact, in the original, Schlosser said "can contaminate", which only implies
Accurate Summary:
In her Green Guide article, "Why Fast Food Costs Too Much" Mindy Pennybacker
states that one percent of feedlot cattle during the winter, and as much as 50
percent during the summer, carry the E. coli microbe from the feedlot to the
slaughter house. Using Eric Schlosser's one percent baseline argument calculating
three to four infected animals being slaughtered every hour, Pennybacker illustrates
that 32,000 pounds of ground beef risk being contaminated every time one infected
animal is eviscerated.
Being Objective
Being objective is as important as being accurate. It's a matter of fairness.
Interjecting personal opinions into the ideas or information in your summary
confuses the reader buy obscuring the information in the original source material.
Expressing your attitude toward it, whether negative or positive, is inappropriate and
self-serving.
You may express your own opinions, of course, but that should be done in the
surrounding comments framing your summary. Bear in mind, being respectful is
simply a matter of good form when arguing a difference of opinion.
Original Source:
Other environmental costs include depletion of natural resources. It takes 4.8 pounds
of grain to produce one pound of beef, Jim Motavalli reports in E Magazine. Animal
feed corn "consumes more chemical herbicide and fertilizer that any other crop,"
Pollan writes, noting that the petrochemical fertilizer used to grow corn, he says,
"takes vast quantities of oil-1.2 gallons for every bushel." The cow Pollan has bought
"will have consumed in his lifetime roughly 284 gallons of oil." The industrial food
system guzzles fossil fuels at a time when we should be conserving energy for the
sake of our national security-and that of pristine ecosystems such as the Arctic
National Wildlife Refuge.
--Excerpted from Mindy Pennybacker, "Why Fast Food Costs Too Much"
Non-Objective Summary:
In her leftist Green Guide article, "Why Fast Food Costs Too Much" Mindy
Pennybacker reports that it takes 1.2 gallons of petrochemical fertilizer to grow one
bushel of feed corn, making it the largest consumer of chemical herbicides among all
industrial-farmed crops. Quoting tree-hugging writer Michael Pollan, she then points
out, after first converting bushels to gallons, that a single cow consumes 284 gallons
of oil before fulfilling its inevitable obligation of a once-in-a-lifetime pilgrimage to
McDonalds. Concluding her environmental rant, she accuses the industrial foodproduction system of "guzzling" precious fossil fuel reserves at a time when we
should be conserving energy.
This is an unfair summary: the writer's bias is clearly obvious. In this example,
adjectives such as "leftist" and "tree-hugger" are derogatory labels deliberately
expressing the author's low regard for Pennybacker's opinion.
Characterizing her opinion as an "environmental rant" is also deliberately belittling
and the "pilgrimage to McDonalds" remark borders on editorializing, neither of which
is appropriate in a summary.
Unfair labels and editorializing fall outside the boundaries of a summary for the
simple reason that they add nothing new or helpful to the process of understanding
the actual information. As a matter of fact, they get in the way, succeeding only in
exposing personal biases.
Such distractions can lead the reader to question your motives and whether you are
fully informed; to question whether your opinion is reasoned and credible.
In the revision below, the opinion of the writer has been removed and the summary
succeeds in being far more objective. Notice that it is also much shorter.
Objective Summary:
In her Green Guide article, "Why Fast Food Costs Too Much" Mindy Pennybacker
reports that 1.2 gallons of petrochemical fertilizer is required to grow one bushel of
feed corn, making it the largest consumer of chemical herbicides among industrialfarmed crops. Using Michael Pollan's calculations to illustrate how conventional
farming practices consume fossil fuels, she points out that a single cow, on a diet of
petrochemically fertilized field-corn, will consume 284 gallons of oil in its lifetime.
Being Focused
Being focused means not wandering off-topic. Stick to what's important. A good
summary highlights only those facts, ideas, opinions, etc., that are useful in helping
your reader understand the topic being presented. Avoid a detailed account of the
minutia contained in your source material.
Including minute details hinders the reader's ability to understand why the
summarized information is relevant to your document in the first place and can lead
them to conclude that you may not fully understand your topic.
Original Source:
Better Farming Methods: Organic farming of animals and field crops is cleaner.
"Conventional farmers have no regulations regarding management of manure.
Organic does," says Fred Kirschenmann, Ph.D., director of the Leopold Center for
Sustainable Agriculture at Iowa State University. "You have to leave at least 90 days120 days for root crops-between application of manure and the harvest. That's how
long it takes for bacteria such as E. coli to degrade and become neutralized in the
soil." Kirschenmann, who was a member of the National Organic Standards Board,
expresses regret that the final rules don't require that ruminant animals be "pasturebased" to ensure that they get out and graze. In practice, though, "all the organic
meat producers I know of are small, two to three hundred head, and they all graze,
get exercise, eat organic foods-just before slaughter they are switched to corn, which
is usually grown on the farm," says Scowcroft. If a cow gets sick and is treated with
antibiotics, it cannot be labeled "organic." Wihelm says she would welcome an
organic hog farm as a neighbor. Consumers can also seek ecological, humanely
raised meat from local farms, or look for other sustainable labels.
--Excerpted from Mindy Pennybacker, "Why Fast Food Costs Too Much"
Unfocused Summary:
In her Green Guide article, "Why Fast Food Costs Too Much" Mindy Pennybacker
argues that applying organic methods when raising field crops and animals makes for
cleaner farming practices. Citing Fred Kirschenmann, director of the Leopold Center
for Sustainable Agriculture at Iowa State University and a member of the National
Organic Standards Board, she points out that E. coli bacteria requires 90-120 days
between manure application and the actual harvest to be rendered harmless. Since
organic farmers must abide by regulations established by the National Organic
Standards Board to be certified as organic, manure application to their crop fields is
carefully monitored. Conventional farmers have no such oversight. Completely
unmonitored, manure gets applied to their crops in ways that are hazardous to the
environment. In turn, this creates ideal conditions in which E. coli, Salmonella and
other infectious bacteria thrive and enter the food chain.
While this summary is accurate, it includes points that do little to help the reader
understand the main focus. The fact that organic farming is cleaner than
conventional farming is not really the point, nor the fact that a 90-120 day cycle is
required for E. coli to be rendered completely harmless.
The main point is that, unlike organic farms, manure management on conventional
farms is completely unregulated which creates a dangerously unhealthy environment
in which to raise farm crops and animals.
Extra details clutter up this summary, creating additional distractions the reader
must wade through while trying to grasp its main focus. The fact that Fred
Kirschenmann directs the Leopold Center for Sustainable Agriculture at Iowa State
University and is a member of the National Organic Standards Board is a case in
point. It's extremely wordy and completely irrelevant.
Now, suppose the "90-120 day" detail in the summary was necessary. Should Fred
Kirschenmann be cited? Not necessarily. Information of this sort quite often falls into
the category of widely-accepted. Check a variety of resources. If you can find such
information readily, it is not privately-held intellectual property and authorship need
not be cited.
The following revision eliminates unnecessary details and is much more sharply
focused on the main idea. Again, notice how much shorter the summary is.
Focused Summary:
In her Green Guide article, "Why Fast Food Costs Too Much" Mindy Pennybacker
argues that, since organic farmers must abide by regulations established by the
National Organic Standards Board to be certified as organic, manure application to
their crop fields is carefully monitored. No other farmers have such oversight. As a
result, manure is applied to conventional crops in ways that are hazardous to the
environment, creating ideal conditions in which E. coli, Salmonella and other
infectious bacteria thrive and enter the food chain.
Being Concise
Being concise means being as brief as possible. Details, examples and descriptions
contained in the original source material should be removed, as well as information
repeated or rephrased in slightly varying ways.
The whole idea of a summary is to be direct and to get to the point. Being focused,
objective and accurate will go along way toward achieving this goal.
Original Source:
Stricter Regulation: "Delays in detection and recall of bad meat happen because
the industry is too weakly regulated," Schlosser says. "By the time the USDA
discovers tainted meat, it's already being distributed," he wrote in The Nation on
September 16. Since then, the agency has announced that it will begin random tests
at all meatpacking plants in the U.S., and will have the power to close facilities where
contamination is found.
What hasn't changed? The USDA still lacks the power to order the recall of
contaminated meat. "Every other defective product can be ordered off the market.
Mandatory recall is important because under the current voluntary standard the
company decides how much meat needs to be recalled and doesn't have to reveal
where the meat has been shipped," Schlosser says. He advises that we write our
congressional representatives in support of the SAFER Meat, Poultry, and Food Act
and the Meat and Poultry Pathogen Reduction Act, which would give the agency
power to enforce limits on contaminants, order recalls and impose fines. The meat
industry says it cannot produce bacteria-free meat, so it's up to us to cook it until it's
safely well done (160 F) to kill E. coli. But the tainted food should not be getting to
us in the first place.
The industrial food system produces force-fed, disease-prone animals and people. An
estimated 120 million Americans are overweight or obese. McDonald's announced in
September, 2002 that it would switch to heart-healthier polyunsaturated vegetable
oil, but that won't make the fries any less fattening. It's just a gloss on the system in
which, through their massive purchasing and marketing power, giant companies
control how our food is produced, from seed to feed to processing. As Wilhelm says
of the big meat processors who buy from megafarms, "They say that we consumers
want this pork and they need it to come from one place to be efficient. "It's time we
consumers made it clear that industrial farms, fast foods and their costly
"efficiencies" are not what we want.
--Excerpted from Mindy Pennybacker, "Why Fast Food Costs Too Much"
Overly Detailed and Repetitive Summary:
In her Green Guide article, "Why Fast Food Costs Too Much" Mindy Pennybacker
exposes a weakness in the regulatory procedures with which the USDA monitors the
meatpacking industry: it lacks the power to order a recall of contaminated meat. By
the time it gets discovered, contaminated meat is already on the market. All the
USDA has done lately is announce random testing of all meatpacking plants in the
U.S. and threaten to close contaminated facilities when they are discovered.
Leaving safety up to the consumer, the meatpacking industry claims that producing
meat uncontaminated by E. coli and other bacteria is impossible. They say that meat
cooked to 160 kills the bacteria. Consumers who cook their meat safely to 160 are
in no danger. But the question remains: Why is tainted food allowed to get to the
market in the first place? The answer, supplied by the meat-packing industry, is that
consumers demand the product and suppliers can only meet the demand in an
efficient manner by buying from giant mega farms that control production without
the USDA looking over their shoulder.
Pennybacker's argues for mandating stricter regulations on meatpackers because
tainted meat is being distributed and, after it's too late, meat is voluntarily recalled.
The whole operation is managed, with no USDA oversight, by the meatpackers.
Meatpacking companies who recall contaminated meat decide how much to recall
and are not required to report where the meat was shipped and how much is actually
recalled. She urges that every concerned person write congress in support of the
SAFER Meat, Poultry and Food Act and the Poultry Pathogen Reduction Act. Enacting
these laws would empower the USDA to enforce limits, order recalls and impose
fines.
The giant industrial food complex that controls food production, from seeding the
fields to slaughtering the meat, and that wields massive purchasing and marketing
power should not be in charge of voluntarily ordering recalls of tainted meat that has
already made it to the marketplace.
In this summary, the writer includes unnecessary details and repeats information in
manner that adds no new information to the reader's knowledge. The fact that
tainted meat gets to the market, for instance is mentioned in each paragraph,
though each time it is worded in a slightly different way.
The second paragraph presents an argument that is not central to the main point:
USDA regulations need to be stricter and the agency needs to have greater
enforcement power. The components of an argument should not be included in a
summary unless summarizing the argument itself is the purpose.
Details such as what the USDA "has done lately" and how to "safely cook meat"
should not be included in this summary either, as they do not inform the reader
about the author's main point. Notice that the summary is nearly as long as the
original passage.
By eliminating details and repetitious language, as in the following example, the
summary will be far more concise while still providing an accurate picture of the
author's main point.
Concise Summary:
In her Green Guide article, "Why Fast Food Costs Too Much" Mindy Pennybacker
exposes a weakness in the regulatory procedures with which the USDA monitors the
meatpacking industry: it lacks the power to order a recall of contaminated meat. By
the time it gets discovered, contaminated meat is already on the market.