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TASK 2 BAND 8.0
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BY NGOC BACH

TOPIC
In some countries, some high school leavers are choosing to
work or travel for a period of time before going to university.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of those
school leavers decision. Give your own opinion.
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task
Write at least 250 words.

QUESTION

DN BI CHUNG
+ M BI
+ THN BI 1

+ THN BI 2
+ KT LUN

DN BI
INTRODUCTION
+ Paraphrase the keywords of the topic
+ Answer the question part of the task
Body 1: the disadvantages of taking a year off before going to university
+ the later start to a career after graduation
+ the expense of taking time off to travel
Body 2: the advantages of taking a year off before going to university
+ good chances for them to gain some valuable experience
+ young graduates can clarify their study and career future
CONCLUSION
+ Paraphrase what you wrote in your introduction

BY NGOC BACH

INTRODUCTION
CU TOPIC CA BI:
In some countries, some high school leavers are
choosing to work or travel for a period of time
before going to university

CU VIT LI:
After graduating from high school, some students
tend to get a job or go on a trip for some time before
university life

INTRODUCTION
BI:
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
those school leavers decision. Give your own
opinion
CU TH 2 PHN INTRO :
While I accept that there are benefits and
drawbacks of this decision, I would argue that
it is better to take a gap year to work or travel.

INTRODUCTION
After graduating from high school, some students tend to get
a job or go on a trip for some time before university life.
While I accept that there are benefits and drawbacks of this
decision, I would argue that it is better to take a gap year to
work or travel.

Body 1: discussed two relevant points about the disadvantages

of taking a year off before going to university
+ the later start to a career after graduation
+ the expense of taking time off to travel

The option to get a job or travel straight after school is

disadvantageous to some extent. The main shortcoming is that a
number of graduating students may start their professional careers
later than their fellows who do not choose to get a job or go on a trip
after high school. As a result, they will get promoted later . In
addition, traveling costs them a great deal. If they travel right after
high school, they will earn no money and have to ask their parents
for the expense . It is not advisable that people should take this
option.

Body 2: the advantages of taking a year off before going to

university
+ good chances for them to gain some valuable experience
+ young graduates can clarify their study and career future
On the other hand, it seems to me that high school seniors should
choose to work or travel for a period of time because of some
undeniable advantages. Firstly, working and traveling are both good
chances for them to gain some valuable experience. My brother, for
instance, travelled to London during his gap year. By spending time
in London, he was able to hear, speak, read and write the English
language constantly which gave him countless opportunities to
improve his English skills. Secondly, taking a year out helps young
graduates clarify their study and career future. They can do various
jobs without long-term commitment in this time , and discover what
might be right for them

INTRODUCTION:
After graduating from high school, some students tend to get a job or go on a
trip for some time before university life. While I accept that there are benefits
and drawbacks of this decision, I would argue that it is better to take a gap year
to work or travel.

CONCLUSION:
In conclusion, I believe that there are many advantages for young people who
start working or traveling prior to entering a university, although this decision
has some notable disadvantages.

Topic: In some countries, some high school leavers are choosing to work or travel for a period
of time before going to university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of those school
leavers decision. Give your own opinion.
After graduating from high school, some students tend to get a job or go on a trip for some time
before university life. While I accept that there are benefits and drawbacks of this decision, I
would argue that it is better to take a gap year to work or travel.
The option to get a job or travel straight after school is disadvantageous to some extent. The
main shortcoming is that a number of graduating students may start their professional careers
later than their fellows who do not choose to get a job or go on a trip after high school. As a
result, they will get promoted later . In addition, traveling costs them a great deal. If they travel
right after high school, they will earn no money and have to ask their parents for the expense . It
is not advisable that people should take this option.
On the other hand, it seems to me that high school seniors should choose to work or travel for a
period of time because of some undeniable advantages. Firstly, working and traveling are both
good chances for them to gain some valuable experience. My brother, for instance, travelled to
London during his gap year. By spending time in London, he was able to hear, speak, read and
write the English language constantly which gave him countless opportunities to improve his
English skills. Secondly, taking a year out helps young graduates clarify their study and career
future. They can do various jobs without long-term commitment in this time , and discover what
might be right for them
In conclusion, I believe that there are many advantages for young people who start working or
traveling prior to beginning their university studies, although this decision has some notable
disadvantages.
294 words
Written by Ngoc Bach

ITS GOOD ENOUGH FOR A BAND 8.0 ?

+ Task response: (details)
- I answered the task question fully
- stating the advantages and disadvantages of a gap year and also giving my own
opinion clearly
+ Coherence and cohesion (details)
- I maintained my opinion consistently throughout the task (in the introduction, at
the beginning of paragraph 3, and in the conclusion)
+ Lexical resource: (details)
- take a gap year/start their professional career later than their fellows/right after high
school/gain some valuable experience/ countless opportunities/taking a year
out/without long-term commitment/discover what might be right.
- high school leavers -> students, graduating students , high school seniors , young
graduates , young people , they
+ Grammar: (details)
adverb clauses, relative clauses and a (first) conditional sentence. There are a variety
of sentence structures and correct comparative forms

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