A Day at the Beach

by Carmin Eulitt

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GRADEMARK REPORT
FINAL GRADE

GENERAL COMMENTS

90

Instructor

/100

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RUBRIC: DESCRIPTIVE ESSAY RUBRIC

3.6 0 / 4

IMAGERY (30%)

4/4

SCALE 1
(4)

Student exceeds expectations in describing elements of the mandala with vivid

imagery and numerous details, creating a clear picture of the mandala.

SCALE 2
(3)

Student meets expectations in describing elements of the mandala with vivid imagery
and details, creating a mostly clear picture of the mandala.

SCALE 3
(2)

Student does not quite meet expectations in describing elements of the mandala with
either vague imagery or details that are unclear/f ew in number.

SCALE 4
(1)

Student does not demonstrate ef f ective description. Largely missing or very unclear
description/imagery.

T RANSIT IONS (20%)

4/4

SCALE 1
(4)

T he student exceeds expectations of f luently using spatial transitions to clearly

reveal placement of each element.

SCALE 2
(3)

T he student adequately demonstrates how to use spatial transitions to identif y

placement of each element.

SCALE 3
(2)

T he student does not quite f ully demonstrate how to use spatial transitions to clearly
reveal placement of each element; some transitions missing or inef f ective.

SCALE 4
(1)

T he student does not use spatial transitions to reveal placement of each element;
most transitions missing or inef f ective.

FIG. LANGUAGE (10%)

4/4

SCALE 1
(4)

Student exceeds expectations f or f igurative language. Comparisons are f luent and

ef f ective, with at least a simile, metaphor, personif ication, & hyperbole.

SCALE 2
(3)

Student meetsexpectations f or f igurative language. Comparisons are adequate, with

at least a simile, metaphor, personif ication, & hyperbole

SCALE 3
(2)

Student does not quite meet expectations f or f igurative language. Comparisons are
inef f ective or unclear, may only have two pieces of f igurative language.

SCALE 4
(1)

Student does not demonstrate mastery of f igurative language. Comparisons are

inef f ective or only one comparison used.

INT RO & CONCL (10%)

SCALE 1
(4)

3/4

Student exceeds expectations f or intro, which includes an original def inition and clear
overall description of mandala, & an exceptional conclusion which achieves closure.

SCALE 2
(3)

Student meets expectations f or intro, which includes an original def inition and clear
overall description of mandala, & an ef f ective conclusion which achieves closure.

SCALE 3
(2)

Student does not quite meet expectations f or intro, which may include a copied
def inition and unclear description of the mandala, & an inadequate conclusion,
closure incomplete.

SCALE 4
(1)

Student does not meet expectations f or intro, which may be missing either a
def inition or overall description of the mandala, &/or the conclusion may be missing
closure entirely.

VERB USAGE (10%)

3/4

SCALE 1
(4)

Student exceeds expectations in using 5 or less linking verbs; vivid, active verbs
dominate the writing and enhance the sophistication of voice.

SCALE 2
(3)

Student meets expectations in using 6-8 linking verbs; vivid verbs mostly dominate
the writing and enhance the clarity of voice.

SCALE 3
(2)

Student does not quite meet expectations in using 5 or less linking verbs; vivid verbs
do not dominate the piece and linking verbs abound.

SCALE 4
(1)

Student does not quite meet expectations in using vivid verbs; little attempt is made
to incorporate vivid verbs. Linking verbs abound.

SENT FLUENCY (10%)

3/4

SCALE 1
(4)

Student exceeds expectations in exceptional sentence variety, zero f ragments or

run-ons.

SCALE 2
(3)

Student meets expectations in ef f ective sentence variety, one f ragment or run-on.

SCALE 3
(2)

Student does not quite meet expectations in ef f ective sentence variety, 2-5
f ragments or run-ons.

SCALE 4
(1)

Student does not meet expectations in ef f ective sentence variety, f ragments or runons abound..

MECHANICS/MLA (10%)

3/4

SCALE 1
(4)

Essay exceeds expectations in punctuation and f ormatting. MLA f ormat and grammar
are both f lawless.

SCALE 2
(3)

Essay meets expectations f or mostly correct punctuation and MLA f ormatting, with a
only a f ew errors that are not noticeable.

SCALE 3
(2)

Essay does not quite meet expectations in punctuation and MLA f ormatting,
committing several errors.

SCALE 4
(1)

Essay does not meet expectations in punctuation and MLA f ormatting, committing
several noticeable errors that distract f rom the writing.