Afife Vera Kirmizi, Caroline Sikes, Tien Le, Yixuan Liu, Yue Shu

ENGW 1111
Christen Enos
10/17/2016
Presentation Letter
It was clear that presenters were very well versed on the topic, as well as very confident
and comfortable. It was also very nice that the presenters introduced the group members at the
beginning of their presentation. A point to be improved upon is that some of the same points
seemed to be made several times, when numerous sources were described as serious. In
addition, variation of vocab could contrast the sources a little better, so that it is clearer how
different memoirs could be. However, it was refreshing that the speakers took turns while
presenting, rather than one person speaking for many slides in a row, and then switching to the
next presenter. Also, one group member didnt speak as much as the other members of the group.
It would be better if that member also spoke a bit more.
The memoir groups presentation did a great job categorizing memoirs into specific sub
genres, topics and covering all the requirements for the Unit 2 presentation assignment. The
visuals that the group uses are eye catching and appropriate for the presentation. Also, the
examples the group uses are detailed and specific and did support the points they made and the
analysis following the memoir examples is clear and easy to understand.
However, there are still some areas the group can improve on. Specifically in the text
format, there are color inconsistency in some slides as some slides have black color text, while
others have a grey color text. Another detail to work on is that some slides include too much

words on them and the font size is a little bit too small, making it hard to read and distracting
since when audience trying to read the materials on the slides. This can caused the audience to
not pay enough attention. To make the points clearer and easier to grasp, a suggestion would be
to put keywords and short sentences on the slide, not long sentences with explanations and
examples. Explanations can be offered through the speech. Another suggestion would be that the
group chooses a different color background, since after the presentation from Professor Enos
about the guidelines of presentation, a white background is not insisted to be used.
Other areas to pay attention to should be in text citation. For example in the food memoir
and Elie Wiesels Nights" slides, the group members should fix the in text citations rather than
just including the name of the author after including an excerpt from the example memoirs.
Moreover, some sentences seems to be redundant. For example, in the first line of the slide
about the characteristics of memoirs, it states A memory; a description of an event from the
past, often episodic-meaningful moments We think that theres actually no need to put an
event from the past on the slide since everybody knows what a memory is, and further
explanations could be delivered through the speech or in a more organized way.
First, it appears to me that a big chunk of time of your presentation will be spent on
showing videos and reading quotes. Dont get me wrong because your videos and quotes have
great content and really spice up the whole presentation. But I feel that each piece of those
segments were a bit too long. People, in this case, me, can get bored during those segments. You
may trim down the time spent on them or divide them up a bit more so each segment become
shorter.

Second, the style of the slides is a little too rigid. I loved the simple yet strong
combination of color while, red and black. It helps people concentrate and make words stand out
very well. However, what I was addressing is the fact that all your bullet points that was shown
are in the same size and in some slides, there can be too much text shown. This results in the text
being a bit small and the overall view of a slide can become overwhelming. In this case, try
concise your bullet points to small words instead of long phrases and sentences. Also, switch up
the format sometimes while keeping your overall style.