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Achieving Clarity

1. We need Gerrys phone number and email by 9:45 PM today.


2. The new dishwasher will replace the current dishwasher experiencing
electrical problems in the employee break room.
3. Failure to purchase the dishwasher will result in dirty dishes left out in the
break room.
4. Widespread thunderstorms in the Charlotte area have resulted in damage to
the UNCC Engineering computing facilities.
5. The lack of orders shipped on Tuesday was a result of several employees out
sick with influenza.
Using the Active Voice Versus the Passive Voice
1. The Accounting Department will implement this procedure.
2. The benefits of the conference were twofold.
3. The training supervisor demonstrated and explained the information in great
detail.
4. Representatives from Allied, a supplier of analytical equipment for automatic
upgrades, held discussions.
5. Numerous individuals attended the symposium on polymerization.
Limiting Paragraph Length to Achieve Conciseness
Our company utilizes a database system to process freight shipments and associated
documentation. As a result, our major customers are installing terminals in their
export departments to schedule freight shipments directly to our system. I believe
your company could benefit from a similar system. Principally, the system allows
you to monitor all export traffic from your corporate locations in the United States
via a terminal. Additionally, the system has the ability to generate export invoices,
track shipments, and determine shipping fees/costs. This implementation would
benefit and integrate both your export and financial departments. Our company
experienced a 40% increase in efficiency and 7% reduction in cost.
Reducing Word Length to Achieve Conciseness
1. suggest
2. predict
3. state
4. join
5. decide
6. task
7. hassle
8. denote
9. at first
10. soon

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