Writing Samples B2

Introduction
The aim of this booklet is to familiarise teachers who prepare candidates for the City and Guilds ESOL
examinations with tasks, performance samples, assessment criteria and benchmark performance samples.
The tasks and performance samples in the current material represent level B2 according to the Common
European Framework of Reference. The CEFR levels and descriptors are embedded in every stage of the
production and delivery of the International ESOL and Spoken ESOL tests and are also incorporated in the
marking procedures.
The material includes sample tasks from former live tests and authentic performance samples produced by
ESOL candidates. An attempt has been made to select samples which represent a wide variety of performance
levels within the given CEFR level. All samples have been double marked to ensure that the evaluation criteria
are rigorously followed and marking is consistent, accurate and reliable.
Marking the writing tasks

The current guide includes only the open writing tasks which are evaluated with the help of task-specific mark
schemes.
Each level has a task-specific mark scheme with descriptors for Task fulfilment, Accuracy and range of
grammar, Accuracy and range of vocabulary and Structure. The Task fulfilment mark reflects how far the
candidate has achieved the task, the Grammar mark measures the range, appropriacy and accuracy of
grammar, the Vocabulary mark assesses the range, accuracy and appropriacy of vocabulary as well as spelling
accuracy. The Structure mark reflects how coherently ideas are linked in the text and how accurate the
punctuation is.
There are four levels of performance with a corresponding mark in each of the above criteria: First Class Pass,
Pass, Narrow Fail and Fail. The total marks awarded for the task are the sum of the marks awarded to each
criterion.
The writing tasks are marked by trained markers who use the task-specific mark scheme for the evaluation of
the tasks. The mark-schemes are regularly updated and markers are trained regularly to ensure that they are
marking to standard.
Grading the Writing section
If a task has not been attempted, a zero mark should be awarded for that task.
Once each Writing task has been marked, an overall mark is awarded for the Writing section. This overall mark
is translated into one of the following grades: Fail, Narrow Fail, Pass or First Class Pass
Maximum marks for each writing task

Part 1
Produce a neutral or formal response to a written, graphic

or visual input for a public audience
Maximum mark: 12
Part 2
Free writing to produce a text using informal language
Maximum mark: 12
Grade table for Writing section for B2

Grade
Total marks: 24
FCP
20-24
PASS
12-19
NF
11
0-10
Spelling
American spelling is accepted if used consistently.
Over and under length answers
The Task Fulfilment criterion with seriously under length answers will probably attract a score of 1 or 0 as there
will most likely be no or little expansion of the topic.
Answers which are seriously over length are awarded one mark less for the Task Fulfilment criterion than would
otherwise have been awarded.
Writing - Tasks
Communicator Level (B2)
Writing 1: produce a neutral or formal response
(eg article, email or letter) to a written, graphic or
visual input for a public audience
100-150 words
Writing 2: free writing (eg personal letter,

narrative or descriptive composition) to produce
a text using informal language
150-200 words
Writing Marking
CEFR Overall Written
Production descriptor
B2
Can write clear, detailed official and semi-official texts on a variety of

subjects related to his field of interest synthesising and evaluating
information and arguments from a number of sources.
CEFR descriptors related to assessment criteria
B2
Task Fulfilment
Grammar
Vocabulary
Structure
Can write clear,

detailed descriptions
of real or imaginary
events and
experiences marking
the relationship
between ideas in
clear connected text,
and following
established
conventions of the
genre concerned.
Can write clear,
detailed descriptions
on a variety of
subjects related to
his/her field of
interest. Can write a
review of a film, book
or play.
Shows a relatively
high degree of
grammatical control.
Does not make errors
which cause
misunderstandings.
Has a sufficient
range of language
to be able to give
clear descriptions,
express viewpoints
on most general
topics, using some
complex sentence
forms to do so.
Language lacks,
however,
expressiveness
and idiomatic
expressions and
use of more
complex forms is
still stereotypic.
Can use a
limited number
of cohesive
devices to link
his/her
sentences into
clear, coherent
text, though
there may be
some
'jumpiness' in a
longer text.
Marking Writing Part 1 - writing a neutral or formal response to a written, graphic or visual input for a public audience: 100-150 words.
Marking Writing Part 2 - free writing to produce a text using informal language: 150-200 words
.
Task Fulfilment*
Accuracy and range of grammar
Accuracy and range of

vocabulary
Good range of grammar appropriate

to B2 used with clarity, assurance and
precision. Errors occur when
language above level
used/attempted.
A good command of B2 vocabulary.

Good command of idiomatic
expressions if and where
appropriate. No serious errors of
spelling or usage.
W1
W2
Fully and appropriately

addresses all 3 content
points, satisfying the
demands of the task and with
good expansion and support.
Genre and tone totally
appropriate.

addresses both content
points, with good expansion
and support. Genre and tone
totally appropriate.
2
P
Mainly satisfies the demands

of the task, covering at least 2
content points with some
expansion. AND
Genre and tone mostly
appropriate.

of the task, addressing both
expansion.
AND
appropriate.
Adequate range of B2 grammar used

with no impeding errors.
Adequate range of B2 vocabulary.

AND/OR
Few errors of spelling or appropriacy.
Errors do not impede communication.
1
NF
Responds to at least 1
content point. Partially satisfies
the demands of the task, with
limited expansion.
AND/OR
Genre and/or tone mostly
inappropriate.
Partially satisfies the

demands of the task, covering
only one point.
AND/OR
Genre and/or tone mostly
inappropriate.
Range of grammar too limited (below

that expected at B2)
AND/OR
Many errors not expected at B2.
AND/OR
Some impeding errors.
Limited range of vocabulary (below

that expected at B2). AND/OR
Many errors of spelling and/or
appropriacy, some of which may
impede communication.
OR
Task partially off topic.
0
F
Does not satisfy the demands

of the task, responding to none
of the content points
appropriately.
OR
Off topic.
OR
Genre and/or tone
inappropriate.
Does not satisfy the demands

of the task.
OR
Off topic.
OR
Genre and/or tone
inappropriate.
Range of grammar severely limited.

AND/OR
Many impeding errors that make the
text difficult to follow.
Very basic repertoire (well below B2)

AND/OR
Many errors of spelling and/or
appropriacy which impede
communication.
OR
Whole task completely off topic.
3
FCP
Structure
Coherent text using cohesive devices
and paragraphs where appropriate.
AND
Few if any punctuation errors.
AND
Structure fully appropriate to text
type.
Mostly coherent text with some
cohesive devices and paragraphs
where appropriate.
AND
Punctuation errors do not impede
communication.
AND
Structure mostly appropriate to text
type.
Not totally coherent.
AND/OR
Little use of cohesive devices
AND/OR
Inappropriate paragraphing AND/OR
Many punctuation errors.
AND/OR
Inappropriate structure for text type.
Mostly incoherent.
AND/OR
Little or inappropriate use of cohesive
devices.
AND/OR
Inappropriate paragraphing AND/OR
AND/OR
Totally inappropriate structure for
text type.
* Subtract 1 mark from the mark that would have otherwise been given for Task Fulfilment if the answer is over or under length by 50% or more
Sample answers and scores with an examiners comments

B2 Communicator Writing Part 1
Example 1
Write a letter to the magazine that included the following graph. Mention the following:
whether you agree that the title of the graph is accurate
the advantages and disadvantages of using the Internet
your views on the results of the survey.
Write between 100 and 150 words.

.
Do you agree that the title above the graph is accurate?
Sample answer 1
Dear Sirs,
I would like to respond to the article called Results of survey demonstrating that neither men nor women
waste their time using the internet at home which appeared in Tuesdays edition of your newspaper.
In the age of the World Wide Web, the survey you had conducted could be eye opening to read, however, I
believe that the activities youve listed do not give a full picture of Internet usage in general, therefore the
title itself is rather misleading.
Unfortunately the focus was put on the advantages the Internet offers, such as having access to online
newspapers and shopping. But lets not forget about the traps either. Many people spend hours playing
online games, visiting social websites to look up photos of old forgotten friends or chatting endlessly.
Unfortunately such disadvantages were totally neglected by your analysis.
Furthermore, the findings suggest that men use the Net more extensively regardless of the nature of its
purpose, which idea can be very much argued against as well. I therefore feel the survey was rather restricted
and does not serve a very useful purpose.
Yours faithfully
Abigail Waugh
Score
Task Fulfilment
Accuracy and range

of grammar
Accuracy and range

of vocabulary
Structure
Total
12

demands of the task and
with good expansion and
support.
Good range of
grammar appropriate to
B2 used with clarity,
assurance and
precision. Errors occur
when language above
level used/attempted.

appropriate.
A good command of B2 Coherent text using

vocabulary.
cohesive devices and
paragraphs where
No serious errors of
appropriate.
spelling or usage.
Few if any punctuation
errors.
Structure fully
appropriate to text type.
This letter does an excellent job of presenting the writers arguments in a well-structured, logical manner.
Information and ideas are skillfully organised through a range of cohesive devices, which are used to good
effect. A wide range of complex structures and vocabulary is used effectively. The letter uses sophisticated and
appropriate language and is ambitious in both concept and approach.
Sample answer 2
Dear Sir or madam

I would like to give you my opinion about the survey published yesterday in your magazine. I do not think
these numbers and title words are absolutely right. For example I do not know any woman who checks out
sport scores on the Internet. Also I suppose the online shopping is more popular among the women, not men.
That is because men have better imagination about the dangers of Internet and they do not believe the
Internet shops as much as women. What I find a real advantage of Internet is the possibility of getting
news. Of course these information may not be always true, but you cannot be sure about truth of
information in any item of messmedias generally. Another one from the yes of Internet is undonblealy
communication which is missing in your survey. Many people, including myself, use the Internet, especially
Facebook, to be in contact with their friends and relatives. I would find a survey about development of
Internet interpersonal communication really amazing. However, I suppose that in future PC will become the
major mean of communication.
Thank you for your interesting articles and surveys.
Yours faithfully
I. Rosanova
Score
Task Fulfilment

grammar

vocabulary
Structure
Total
Mainly satisfies the

demands of the task,
covering at least 2
expansion.
Adequate range of B2
grammar used with no
impeding errors.
AND/OR

Inappropriate
paragraphing
Few errors of spelling

or appropriacy. Errors
do not impede
communication.

appropriate.
Make sure you address
each content point fully
and with some
expansion.
vocabulary.
Proofread carefully and

correct any
grammatical errors
check for agreement eg
these information
Use your monolingual

dictionary to check any
spellings or collocations
you are not sure about
(eg messmedias,
undonblealy).
Plan before you start to

write.
Devote one paragraph to
each point.
Make sure the
paragraphs follow each
other logically, using
appropriate cohesive
devices.
Read through to make
sure what you have
written makes sense and
your ideas are presented
logically.
Sample answer 3
Dear Sir
Internet at home
I am writing this letter with regard to you graph which you appeared in a magazine. Moreover, I agree with
you about that men and women do not waste time using the Internet at home. In fact, they spend their time
in shopping or sitting in fornt of television. Although they can get the Internet at home easly, they do not
care about it.
In addition, there are advantages and disadvantages to using the Internet.
First of all, the disadvantages to use this service are as follows:
This service need more time to spend with it. Moreover, sometime it could be efacted in your eyes. Also, if you
let this service for your children, they can get enfaction in their behavior.
On the other hand, there are advantages to use this service such as you can get many information quickly and
also you can improve you self with this service.
I hope that I kick the nile to give you my opinion about this service.
Thank you very much for your kind attantion.
Yours Faithfkully.
Ahmed al Shukali
Score
Task Fulfilment

grammar

vocabulary
Structure
Total
Responds to at least 1
content point. Partially
satisfies the demands of
the task, with limited
expansion.
Range of grammar too

limited (below that
expected at B2)
Many errors not
expected at B2.
Many errors of spelling

and/or appropriacy,
some of which may
impede communication
(eg enfaction in their
behavior, kick the nile.

dictionary to check any
spellings, idioms or
collocations you are not
sure about.
Plan what you want to

say and organise your
thoughts logically before
you begin to write.
Some impeding errors.

Make sure you are clear
about what you are
required to write, then
check that you address
each content point fully
and appropriately.
Proofread very carefully

and correct
grammatical errors.
dictionary to check
participles,
prepositions,
possessive adjectives,
etc.
Read through afterwards

to make sure that what
you have written makes
sense and you have not
contradicted yourself.

Example 2
Write an email to apply for the following job:
-
say what skills you have
enquire about accommodation
ask about pay.

SUNNY BAY HOLIDAY CAMP
Are you energetic with a good sense of humour?
Do you enjoy arts and crafts?
Come and spend the summer with us
Help to organise activities for children such as:
sports tournaments, art competitions and musical performances
Apply to Mr Green (Manager): jgreen@sunnybay.com
Sample answer 1
Dear Mr Green
I am writing with regard to your advertisement published in the Mlad Fronta on 10.12.09. For long time I
have been looking for suitable work and I am very interested in your holiday camp.
I am 20 years old and a student. Since my youth I have been interested in art and music. I play a guitar, a
violin and also a bass guitar. My other hobbies include painting, skiing and tennis. People say I have a good
sense of humour. I have already organised some musical performances and I think I could help in this area.
However, I would be grateful if you can answer some questions. Do you provide accommodation? If not, is
there a list of available accomodations? Secondly, may I ask you for information about payment? I am sure
we can make an agreement.
I hope you will consider my application. I am looking forward to receiving your reply.
Yours sincerely
Ondrej Dosunov
Score
Task Fulfilment

grammar

vocabulary
Structure
Total
11

demands of the task
and with good
expansion and support.
appropriate.
Good range of grammar

appropriate to B2 used
with clarity, assurance
and precision. Errors
occur when language
above level
used/attempted.
vocabulary.
do not impede
communication.
Coherent text using

paragraphs where
appropriate.
errors.
Structure fully

dictionary to check
spellings, usage
(accomodations) and
collocations (for long
time)
Sample answer 2
Dear Mr Green,
I am applying for the job at the Sunny Bay Holiday Camp: as an Organiser of activities for children.
As a former scout I attended many camps as a child and later on I had my own group.
I am a very social person; enjoying taking part in group activities.
I am very creative as well: and rather good with children.
Let me inquire if you offer accommodation? I am happy to share with other people, it is not a problem at all.
I hope my application will meet your expectations? Thank you for your consideration.
Best Regards
David
Score
Task Fulfilment

grammar

vocabulary
Structure
Total

covering at least 2
expansion.
impeding errors.
A good command of B2 Inappropriate

vocabulary. No serious paragraphing.
errors of spelling or
Many punctuation
usage
errors.

appropriate.
Check to make sure you
have covered all of the
content points required.
Make sure you

demonstrate a broad
range of grammatical
structures. Avoid
repeating simples
structures too often eg I
am.
Paragraphs should
have more than one
sentence. Plan before
you start to write. Use
one paragraph for each
point. Link your
paragraphs with
devices.
Make sure you use all
punctuation correctly.
Proofread to check
when you have finished
writing.
Sample answer 3
Mr. Green,
I would like to apply for a job as an activity leeder which you needs for july and august. I am 17 years old
student who studies art and sport. My hobbies are music, sport, art and children. Every monday I stay in
centre where are children with no family. And I must add that I am really good tennis player. I win local
Competition every year. Now I have to ask you about Pay. I have to know it. I am really looking forward to
get letter from you. And I hope it will be positive because I would like to get this job.
Your faithfully
Kristina Georgikova
Score
Task Fulfilment

grammar

vocabulary
Structure
Total

covering at least 2
expansion.
Range of grammar too

limited (below that
expected at B2)
Check top make sure

you have addressed
each content point. In
addition, make sure that
you also expand
appropriately on each
point.
Try to use a range of

grammatical structures
avoid using too many
simple present tenses.
correct any
grammatical errors. Be
especially careful there
are no basic errors, eg
missing definite and
indefinite articles (eg I
am really good tennis
player. I win local
competition.)
Limited range of
vocabulary (below that
expected at B2).
Inappropriate
paragraphing.
Try to demonstrate a
good command of B2
vocabulary.
Plan carefully before you

start to write. Think about
a few suitable sentences
for each paragraph.
Many errors not

expected at B2.

dictionary to find
appropriate synonyms.
Link sentences/
paragraphs with
devices.
correct punctuation
errors.

Example 1
Youve recently celebrated a significant birthday. Write a letter to a friend expressing how you feel about being
this age. Whats good and bad about it? Write between 150 and 200 words.
Sample answer 1
Dear Judy,
How are you doing? Thanks for your last letter and forgive me for such a late response. Ive been incredibly
busy for the last month, as I was preparing and planning my 20th birthday party. Eventually all was ready
and the party took place in my and parents house last Saturday and over fifty people came to join us.
Honestly, it was one of the best parties ever, even my friends said so. Its a pity you couldnt be there.
Anyway, I find this age really exciting! Im just finishing high school and preparing for university, so that
could be a bit difficult, but now I feel more adult than two or three years ago, which I find good for my selfconfidence and self-esteem. I havent found any disadvantages with being this age so far, really! Maybe just
one little drawback I started working 6 months ago and Im getting paid quite a lot of money. Yes, I know
thats a dream come true, but it also makes me a bit worried sometimes, because now I can afford more
things that I could before, but I dont want to waste the money, so I do find the responsibility a bit hardgoing at times, even though I love being able to buy the things I want.
Maybe you can visit me next month and we can go shopping or just to a caf. I havent seen you for ages!
We can discuss our ages possibilities together. I cant wait for your 20th birthday party, it will be great. I
think then youll find being this age as amazing as I do.
Im really looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Love, Orsi
Score
Task Fulfilment

grammar

vocabulary
Structure
Total
12
Good range of
grammar appropriate to
B2 used with clarity,
assurance and
precision.
A good command of B2
vocabulary. Good
command of idiomatic
expressions where
appropriate. No serious
errors of spelling or
usage.

addresses both content
points, with good
appropriate.
Coherent text using

paragraphs where
appropriate.
errors.
Structure fully
The letter addresses the subject well and is written in the right informal style. There is a good range of grammar
used accurately. Vocabulary is in the higher range of the level. The text is coherent with a good range of linking
words.
Sample answer 2
Dear Ahmed
Hi! How are you and how is your family? It seems ages since I saw you. I hope your new job is going well.
Im writing now to tell you about my significant birthday.
Actually my birthday was on 1st March, last week. In my family we make a party for everyone who has an
event like that. In fact I invited many people such as my friends, my relatives and also our family friends.
Moreover, I made a big party with music and dance. Im really very happy because Im 20 now so I can rely
on my self and also there are many people who respect me now more than before.
In addition, any party like this should have good things because you see your friends and your relatives
around you and also you reach 20 year old. Therefore, all these things made me happy. However, there was
one thing which was bad in my party. This thing was when one of my friends got sick during my party. Im
really disappointed because that happened in my birthday party.
Anyhow, Im very happy because Im 20 now so I do many things which I couldnt do before. I hope to see
you as soon as you can. Give my best regards to your family.
Love
Ali
Score
Task Fulfilment

grammar

vocabulary
Structure
Total

covering only one point.
impeding errors.
vocabulary.
Make sure you

understand both content
points and address them
both appropriately and
fully.
wide range of B2 level
grammatical structures.
Check carefully to
make sure you have
not made any errors.
broad range of B2
vocabulary. Use your
monolingual dictionary
to find appropriate
synonyms (eg instead
of repeating happy so
often).

do not impede
communication.
Mostly coherent text with

some cohesive devices
and paragraphs where
appropriate.

write and organise your
work so that it follows a
logical sequence and
doesnt jump around.
Avoid repeating yourself.
Sample answer 3
Dear friend Katy,

Are you good? Im very good. I am qoter centuries last week. I luv partys, celebration was with family. We
have a big family. I have 4 siblings all older as me. My family gave me big surprize they buy a big puzzle
from 2000 peace. We strated putting it together but we didnt success. My father says we can do it next
week when it is my twin bothers celebration. I wanted to give them puzzle too, but I have to try something
diferent do you think.
Im happy cos I drive and do so good thinks I am not small. Next year I go to abroad cos I have money I
picked from my wage. I wanna go to NY. It is lots of money but I dreamed it when I was a small girl. I
wanna go to Empire States building. I send you my postcard, ok?
Buy,
Maria
Score
Task Fulfilment
Accuracy and range

of grammar

vocabulary
Structure
Total

covering only one point.
Make sure you

understand both content
points and address them
both appropriately and
fully.
Range of grammar
Limited range of
too limited (below that vocabulary (below that
expected at B2).
expected at B2).
AND/OR
AND/OR
Many errors not
and/or appropriacy, some
expected at B2.
of which may impede
communication.
good range of B2
level grammatical
structures.

write.
Check carefully to
make sure you have
not made any errors.
Do not use slang or
textspeak, eg luv and
wanna.
Use the monolingual
dictionary to check
prepositions, and
plurals eg parties not
partys.
broad range of B2
vocabulary. Use your
monolingual dictionary to
find appropriate
synonyms (eg instead of
repeating good so often).
dictionary to check
spelling.
Little use of cohesive

devices.
Use a paragraph for each

point.
Use cohesive devices to
link thoughts, sentences
and paragraphs.
check all punctuation.

Example 2
Your friend wants you to go on holiday together but its to a place youre not keen on. Write a letter explaining
why and persuading your friend to go somewhere youd like to visit instead.
Sample answer 1
Dear Eva,
Thank you for your letter last week in which you invited me to go skiing in Turkey in the summer.
I know we have been planning a holiday together ever since we left secondary school, however, all through
the winter Ive been dreaming of relaxing in a nice, warm summer resort rather than rushing around on skis
on the cold, icy mountains.
Do you have any particular reason for this choice? If not, let me suggest we go to a place where the
temperature is good, we can still do some sports but also go sightseeing and sometimes just sunbathe on the
beach. What about going to Egypt? I know you like history. Havent you always wanted to see the
pyramids? Some say the sea is beautiful there. You could take the opportunity to go diving in the Red sea.
Doesnt that sound tempting to you? Would you be willing to compromise a little in order to please me?
If you have any doubts about organising the holiday let me assure you that we will be fine as one of my
friends is working there as a tourist guide. I can ask her to arrange accommodation for us and give tips
about the sights worth seeing once we are there.
I hope I can get you to see things from my point of view and you will agree to spend a fortnight on the
lovely beaches of Egypt. I am sure well have lots of fun and a memorable holiday together.
Let me know if you are happy to go there, so I can get in touch with my friend and start arranging things.
Lots of love
Angela
Score
Task Fulfilment
Accuracy and
range of
grammar

vocabulary
Structure
Total
11

points, satisfying the demands
of the task and with good
expansion and support. Genre
and tone totally appropriate.
Good range of
grammar
appropriate to B2
used with clarity,
assurance and
precision.
Over length by 50%.
A good command of B2
vocabulary.
Good command of
idiomatic expressions.
No serious errors of
spelling or usage.
Coherent text using

paragraphs where
appropriate.
errors.
Structure fully
Check the word limit. You

dont have to waste time
counting every word, but take
an average of the length of
three lines then multiply that
by the number of lines.
The writer is confident and well-organised. She uses a wide range of

structures and vocabulary, practically error-free. The content is relevant
and the topic is fully and logically developed.
Sample answer 2
Dear Lucy,
I was very pleased when I got a letter from you. Im sorry, that I didnt write to you earlier but I was very
busy with my school matters.
Anyway, lets make some important decisions about our holiday. You said you would like to go to Czech
Republic, but Im not so excited about this idea. Theres no sea, no beaches and not warm enough. So I want
to beg you if you could change your mind. I was thinking about some more interesting places such as Greece,
Spain or Italy. I love Spain. There are really interesting monuments and the beaches are beautiful places
when you can spend interesting holidays. So, what are you saying? Do you like it? If you do, talk to your
parents.
Ok, I must go to do my homework for English lesson. And Im really looking forward to receive your letter.
Best wishes
Your best friend Sheila
Score
Task Fulfilment
Accuracy and
range of grammar

vocabulary
Structure
Total

of the task, addressing both
expansion.
Adequate range of
B2 grammar used
with no impeding
errors.
The letter is quite short and so Make sure you

does not expand sufficiently to demonstrate a
get full marks.
wide range of B2
grammatical
Make sure you address both
structures.
content points, with good
Proofread carefully
and correct any
errors.
vocabulary.
Few errors of spelling or
appropriacy.
dictionary to find
synonyms. Try to avoid
repeating the same word
too often, eg interesting.
Some cohesive devices

and paragraphs where
appropriate.
Use separate paragraphs

for each content point
and link them, and the
sentences within them,
with appropriate cohesive
devices.
Sample answer 3
Hi Era,
I am writting you because holiday are coming soon. But first write me how are you? What are you doing
now? Oh, yes and whats about your new job? I didnt see you long time. But now why I am writting. I
spoked with Mot and he told me about our holiday. I am really looking forward to spend time with you, but
I am not sure when I want to go to India, because you know. I dont like Indian food and flue is there. Id
rather go to Japan, there is more thing to do, better food and no ill people. And the traditions of Japan are
more interesting than one in India. Ok all thing in now only up to you. When you choose India I still will
want to go but please think about it. I am really looking forward to you and our holiday and I am sure that
it will be fun.
Please write me as soon as it will be possible.
Xoxo,
John.
Score
Task Fulfilment
Accuracy and range

of grammar

vocabulary
Structure
Total

Range of grammar
too limited (below
covering at least 2 content
that expected at B2)
points with some expansion.
Many errors not
expected at B2.
appropriate.
Some impeding
errors.
Limited range of
vocabulary (below that
expected at B2).
Make sure you address both Proofread carefully

content points, with good
and correct all
errors.

dictionary to check
spellings and
appropriacy.
Use your
monolingual
dictionary to check
prepositions.

Little use of cohesive
devices

Inappropriate
and/or appropriacy, some
paragraphing.
of which may impede
communication.
Plan carefully before you
start to write.
Use a different paragraph
for each point. Link the
paragraphs with
devices.
Proofread carefully when
you finish writing to make
sure everything is logical
and makes sense.

FAIL example
Write a report to the Principal of your college about the results of the questionnaire on the student
restaurant:
Report on the main findings

Comment on the students views
Recommend improvements
Student opinions on the college restaurant

120 questionnaires 114 completed
V. good
Satisfactory
Unsatisfactory
Quality of food
20
80
14
Variety of menu
10
20
84
Prices
30
42
42
Selection of students comments

terrible coffee, short opening hours, limited choice, chips with
Part 1 Answer 1 (FAIL)
everything!!, what about us vegetarians?, nice staff, changes needed and
Mr. Smith music?
I have been learning in this University for 3 years and I made a report
about the students restaurant.
I asked one hundred and fourteen students. There was 3 part. Quality of
food, variety of menu and prices and there are 3 form of answer. Good,
satisfactory and unsatisfactory. Students could write a comment. The
food is not to good. It is tasteless and cold. So the food us
satisfactory. The variety of menu in unsatisfactory. The prices are
good for 30 students, satisfactory for 42 students and unsatisfactory
for 42 students. And the comments are: terrible coffe, short opening
hours, limited choice . So you must improve the restaurant. The chef
must make new meals. Longer opening hours and vegetarian food.
I would like to know what your opinions are. Please write to me when we
can meet? I look forward your letter or your e-mail.
Yours faithfully,
FAIL
Task fulfilment
Grammar
Vocabulary
Structure
The text does not

reflect the genre
required (letter
instead of a report)
The text only
partially satisfies the
demands of the
task, with limited
expansion.
The range of
grammar (mostly
present and past
simple) is too limited
(below that
expected at B2)
There are many
errors not expected
at B2. (eg there was
3 part )
The range of
vocabulary is
adequate for the
task
Make absolutely
sure that you have
covered all content
points clearly, with
good expansion and
support.
Dedicate at least 2-3
sentences or an
entire paragraph to
each content point
Check to make sure
you understand the
genre required
Use the checklist to

make sure you use
grammatical
structures that meet
the requirements of
the level
Use the monolingual
dictionary to check
your text for
grammatical errors,
prepositions, past
participles, etc
Try to demonstrate
that you have a
good command of
B2 vocabulary.
There is no attempt
to use linking words
The text is not
totally coherent, eg
some of the
sentences suggest
that the candidate
did not understand
the data included in
the task (the food is
tasteless cold)
There was some
incorrect
punctuation.
Make sure you use a
range of linking
devices to create a
logical link between
sentences and
paragraphs
Make sure that what
you write makes
sense
Proofread and
check your
punctuation
Improved version
Results of survey on students opinions on the college restaurant

This report is based on the questionnaire about the students restaurant, which was completed by
one hundred and fourteen students. The questionnaire had 3 parts, namely quality of food, variety
of menu and prices, and there were three possible answers, good, satisfactory and unsatisfactory.
From the data, we can say that most people think that the quality of food is satisfactory. However,
the majority of the students found the variety of the menu unsatisfactory. 30 students said the
prices are good, 42 students said they are satisfactory and 42 students said they are
unsatisfactory.
In addition, students could also write a comment. The comments supported the data provided by
the survey. For instance, some students said that the coffee was terrible, the opening hours were
short, and that there was limited choice.
Based on the above, I would like to recommend improving the restaurant. First of all, the menu
needs to be revised and the chef must be instructed to prepare new meals. I would also
recommend longer opening hours and offering vegetarian options.

26 Wildmill Road
Bristol BC2 7GW
11 May 2012
Mr John Campbell
Principal
St Marie School
4 Lenimnton Road
London SE3 9DB
Dear Mr Cambell
I am writing to a report to the student opinions on the college restaurant.
120 students were asked and 114 were given completed. Most of students are satisfied with the
quality of food. I think that is a good news.
They are unsatisfactory variety of the menu. Someone asked why have not vegatarians food? It
is true, in the restaurant is not cooked vegetables. We have to do a new menu with two or three
food per day.
The prices are been to high. I do not think so, but the childrens have not got benefits.
Of course we have had some very good comments, they like the staff for example.
This is a great improvements on our previous work. I hope we will meet soon and we can will
make a plane.
If you have any questions, call me up.
I look forward to hearing from you!
Your sincerely
FAIL
Task fulfilment
Grammar
Vocabulary
Structure
The text does not

reflect the genre
required (letter
Only 1 content point
is covered
adequately
Make sure you

cover all content
points fully and
appropriately
Do not write
addresses as it is
not a requirement
of the exam (in
any case, this task
was to write a
report and not a
letter)
The range of
grammar is below
that expected at B2
There are many
errors not expected
at B2.
Some of the errors
are impeding
Use the checklist

to make sure you
use grammatical
structures that
meet the
requirements of
the level
Use the
monolingual
dictionary to
check your text for
grammatical
errors,
prepositions, past
participles, etc.
There is a relatively
narrow range of
vocabulary with
errors, some of
which make the text
difficult to
understand (eg
make a plane)
Try to use more

descriptive,
specific
vocabulary (eg
instead of good
news, write
promising news)
Use the
monolingual
dictionary to help
you find more
descriptive
synonyms
There is no attempt
Some paragraphs
are too short and
illogically structured
Make sure you use

a range of linking
devices to create
a logical link
between
sentences and
paragraphs
Make sure that
what you have
written makes
sense.
Improved version

This report concerns the students opinion of the college restaurant. 120 students were asked
their views and 114 questionnaires were completed and returned.
Based on the findings, it appears that most students are satisfied with the quality of food, which I
think is promising news. However, it seems students are dissatisfied with the variety of the menu.
In addition, one student asked why we did not offer vegetarian dishes. This is in fact true; we do
not offer any vegetarian options. With regards to prices, it seems that nearly three-quarters of the
students find the prices acceptable. Another positive piece of news is that they are also pleased
with the staff.
Based on the above, I recommend some changes to the restaurant. First of all, we need to offer a
wider variety of food including vegetarian options. Secondly, although prices are acceptable to the
majority, I think we should offer some discounts to the poorer students. Finally, I would suggest a
meeting to consider any further improvements that could be made.
Student Restaurant of White College

I am student of White College, and I mostly eat in Colleges restaurant. I asked the White Colleges student
(about 114 people ) that they what think about this place. The answer is intresting.
Lot of student want more variety of menu and low prices. The restaurant is friendly and big with many table
and chairs. But some things arent good for example the short opening hours and chips with everything. These
said by stud students. One girl asked, that What about us vegetarians?. The question is great. I absolutelly
agreed this point.
All in all the changes are need. It is must, because we learn too much so we want to eat, which is delicious.
If possible I want to meet with Principal that we can changing the restaurant.
FAIL
Task fulfilment
Grammar
Vocabulary
Structure
Only 1 content point

is covered
adequately
Make sure you

cover all content
points fully and
appropriately
There are quite a lot

of errors not
expected at B2 (eg
that we can
changing)
Some errors make
understanding
difficult (eg It is
must, because we
learn too much so
we want to eat,
which is delicious)
The range of
grammar used is
narrow (mostly
present and past
simple)
make sure you use
grammatical
the requirements of
the level
Use the monolingual
dictionary to check
your text for
grammatical errors,
prepositions, past
participles, etc
narrow range of
vocabulary with
errors, some of
which may impede
communication.
Try to use more

descriptive, specific
vocabulary (eg
instead of
interesting, write
fascinating)
Use the monolingual
dictionary to help
you find more
descriptive
synonyms
Check any spellings
of which you are
unsure
There is some
attempt to use
linking words and
some appropriate
paragraphing
There are some
basic punctuation
errors (eg These
said by stud
students)
Make sure you use a

range of linking
devices to create a
sentences and
paragraphs
Check all
punctuation
Improved version
Report on White Colleges Student Restaurant

I asked the students of White College (about 114 people) what they thought about the
restaurant. The answers were fascinating.
Based on the data, it seems that the majority of the students want a menu with greater variety
and lower prices, although they are satisfied with the quality of food offered at present. Some
students commented that the opening hours were too short and that everything is served with
chips. One girl also asked why the restaurant does not cater for vegetarians, which is a reasonable
question and I agree that it should do so.
All in all, it is evident that changes are needed. I would recommend extending the opening
hours and offering a wider range of food. In addition, it would also be advisable to have a meeting
to discuss these and any other potential changes.
There are a lot of unsatisfaction studients in the school.

First of all, the college restaurant is very aweful. There are a lot of harmful, and fatty food for
example chips. There arent vegetables, but there are a lot of vegetarians in the college.
Unfortunately, needed changes because there are a lot of problem. With the college restaurant.
Secondly, the prices are not good. Studients dont have eneough money. But the prices are very hi.
Opening hours are very short and choices, are limited. The menu always simble. Its bad. Need
range of wide dishs. The coffe is terrible. There are a lot of tipes of coffe. As far as Im concerned,
vegetable is better than the chips. Studients should eat a lot of vegetables, and fruits instead of fatty
foods.
Most important of all studients should write a letter, for the Principal.
FAIL
Task fulfilment
Grammar
Vocabulary
Structure
2 content points are

covered adequately
Make sure you

cover all content
points adequately
There are many

errors not expected
at B2 and some
impede
communication
The range of
grammatical
structures used is
narrow (mostly
present and past
simple)

make sure you use
grammatical
the requirements of
the level
Use the monolingual
dictionary to check
your text for
grammatical errors,
prepositions, past
participles, etc
There is an
adequate range of
vocabulary, but
there are many
spelling errors in
words below level
(eg studients, hi,
eneough, coffe)
Try to use more

vocabulary
Use the monolingual
dictionary to help
you find more
descriptive
synonyms
Proofread carefully
and correct spelling
errors
The text is not

totally coherent and
lacks a logical
structure
There is some
attempt to use
linking words
There are many
punctuation errors
Make sure you use a

range of linking
devices to create a
sentences and
paragraphs
Make sure that what
you write makes
sense
Proofread carefully
and correct
punctuation errors
Improved version

I have been asked to write a report on the results of the survey about the college restaurant. Here
are my findings.
First and foremost, it is evident that there is a high level of dissatisfaction among the students.
There are problems with the range of food served in the college restaurant. There is a lot of
harmful and fatty food, for example chips. There arent any vegetarian dishes even though there
are a lot of vegetarians studying in the college. Secondly, the prices are not reasonable. Although
students dont have much money, the prices are very high.
When filling in the questionnaire, students also left comments. Some mentioned that the opening
hours were very short and choices were limited. Others said that the menu was limited and that
they would prefer a wider range of dishes. Some students complained about the coffee, too.
I recommend that we introduce vegetable dishes and replace chips with vegetables since students
should be encouraged to eat vegetables and fruit instead of fatty foods. We should also buy a new
coffee machine. Finally, I think we should discuss other feasible improvements as soon as possible.
Dear Principal
Hereby I am writing to you our experiment about the student restaurant.
First of All asked students what they opinions about quality of food, variety of food and the prices.
At the end the questionnaires said the bigges problem was Variety of menu.
The restaurant has not enough menu because the vegetarians can not eat and only chips with everything.
Quality of food is very good and they satisfied with prices.
In a conclusion I think you should increase the menu for vegetarians and who hate chips.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Rbert
Fail
Task fulfilment
Grammar
Vocabulary
Structure
Content points are

not adequately
covered. There is
very limited
expansion.
The text does not
reflect the genre
Very narrow range

of grammar used
with a large number
of errors (first of all
asked, and only
chips with
everything, they
Narrow range of
vocabulary with only
the most basic
words used (think,
good, big, hate)
Basic spelling errors
eg bigges
No attempt to
organise the text
into paragraphs (all
contain one
sentence only)
There is some
attempt to use
required (letter
Make sure you

cover all content
points adequately
and in a logical way
Make sure you write
in the required
genre
satisfied with prices)

some of the errors
include A1 errors
such as forgetting to
include the subject
(first of all asked) or
the verb to be
(they satisfied)
make sure you use
grammatical
the requirements of
the level
Use the monolingual
dictionary to check
your text for
grammatical errors,
prepositions, past
participles, etc
Inappropriate usage
eg experiment
Try to use more

vocabulary
Use the monolingual
dictionary to help
you find more
descriptive
synonyms
Check spellings
linking words, but

some are used
incorrectly (in a
conclusion)
Organise your
sentences into
logical paragraphs
Make sure you use a
range of linking
devices to create a
sentences and
paragraphs
Improved version

This report concerns a survey that was conducted to discover students views on the restaurant.
First of all, I asked students about their opinions of the quality of the food, the variety and the
prices. Based on the results of the survey, we can say that the biggest problem is with the lack of
variety. The restaurant does not offer a wide enough choice. There is nothing available for
vegetarians and others find they are forced to eat chips with everything. There is some pleasing
news, however, because students felt the quality of the food was very good and they were
generally satisfied with the prices.
In conclusion I think the restaurant should offer a wider variety, including vegetarian dishes, and
some healthy alternatives to chips.

PASS example
Write a report to the Principal of your college about the results of the questionnaire on the student
restaurant:
Report on the main findings

Comment on the students views
Recommend improvements

120 questionnaires 114 completed
V. good
Satisfactory
Unsatisfactory
Quality of food
20
80
14
Variety of menu
10
20
84
Prices
30
42
42
Selection of students comments

terrible coffee, short opening hours, limited choice, chips with
everything!!, what about us vegetarians?, nice staff, changes needed and
Part 1 Answer 6 (Pass)
music?
Dear SIR/Madam,
I would like to share my view about of the survey of student opinions
on the college restaurant.
We can see majority of students completed the survey. Fortunately most
of them are satisfied the foods quality so it is absolutely right. The
main problem is the variety. We may chat the chef about it, because lot of
students complained to it. Some of their comments are reasonable, such as
vegetarian menu and short opening hours. In my opinion we cant avoid to
introduce the vegetarian menu. As for the prices, I do not think it is a
serious problem, minority of students are unsatisfied with it.
To sum up I would like to give some suggestions. In my opinion the most
important issues are to introduce the vegetarian menu, variety of menu and
opening hours.
Faithfully,
Adrienn Patonai
Pass
Task fulfilment

grammar

vocabulary
Structure
All three content

points are touched
upon, but with
limited expansion
The text does not
reflect the genre
required (letter
There are a
relatively large
number of errors,
which not expected
at B2 level.
Make sure you

cover all content
points in detail
Adequate range of
vocabulary for B2
level (majority,
variety, reasonable,
avoid, serious
problem, give
suggestions,
important issue)
Attempts to use
collocations (eg
important issues,
share my view)
Some effective use

of linking words to
make the text easy
to follow ( eg in my
opinion, to sum up)
No major
punctuation errors
Mostly coherent
text with
paragraphs where
appropriate
The vast majority of

errors could have
been detected and
corrected with the
help of a dictionary
(eg satisfied with
(preposition), chat
to (preposition),
complained about it
(preposition), avoid
introducing (gerund
verb patterns)
Improved version

I would like to share my views on the results of the survey. The majority of the students (114
out of 120) completed the questionnaire. Fortunately, most of them are satisfied with the quality
of the food, which is very pleasing.
The main complaints centred on the lack of variety. We should consult the chef about this,
because the majority of students complained. I do not think there is a serious problem regarding
prices, since only a minority of the students are dissatisfied with them.
Some students made reasonable comments about the lack of a vegetarian menu and the
short opening hours. In my opinion, its essential to introduce at least one vegetarian choice, and
this would also increase the options available. If its possible to extend the opening hours, this
would also be beneficial.
In conclusion, the majority of students are satisfied with the restaurant and so, with a few
minor improvements, we should be able to please everyone fairly easily.
Dear Sir,
I am writing to you , because 114 students completed a survey about the restaurant. The results are not the best. The
survey contained three questions about the quality of food, the variety of menu and the prices.
I would like to start with the worst, the variety of menu. We have to find a solution to this problem, because 84
students are unsatisfied. I think if we would talk to the chef to make two kinds of menu every day, one with meat
and one without meat, it would be the solution for the variety and for the vegetarians too. The students are satisfied
with the quality of food, so we do not have to do anything with it.
Yours faithfully:
*Insert name here*
Pass
Task fulfilment
Grammar
Vocabulary
Structure
2 content points
covered
adequately
The text does not
reflect the genre
required (letter
instead of a
report)
Check to make
sure you
understand the
genre required
Make sure that
you expand on all
the points
sufficiently
Adequate range of
B2 grammar with
some errors, none
of which impede
communication
Adequate range of
B2 vocabulary
with few errors,
none of which
impede
communication
Some attempt to
use linking words
Paragraphs but no
conclusion
Few if any
punctuation errors
Use the
monolingual
dictionary to
check your text for
grammatical
errors,
prepositions and
past participles
Try to make sure

you demonstrate
a wide range of
vocabulary
Organise your
sentences into
logical
paragraphs
(dedicate a
paragraph to each
content point if
possible)
Use both
introductory and
concluding
paragraphs
Improved version

120 questionnaires were distributed to students and 114 were completed. The survey contained
three questions about the quality of food, the variety of the menu and the prices. I also looked at a
selection of the students comments.
The variety of the menu received the most negative feedback: 84 students are dissatisfied. I think
we could suggest that the chef provide two kinds of menu every day; one with meat and one
without meat. This would solve the problem regarding variety and also satisfy the vegetarians who
justifiably commented that there was nothing available for them.
On the other hand, the majority said that they were satisfied with the quality of food and the
prices, so no action is necessary regarding these. There were also positive comments about the
staff.
I therefore recommend we speak to the chef regarding the menu and possibly also consider
longer opening hours and perhaps some background music, as these were sensible suggestions
made by the students.
Dear Mr. Principal!

Im writing to show the result of my research that I made wheter the students are satisfied with the new
restaurant. Im sending to you a spreadsheet as an attachment.
Most students are satisfied with the quality of food. The main problem is the variety of menu. Most
students think the menu is boring. In addition, we have to pay attention to vegetarians, whose number
increases month by month.
The prices are also proplem, but I think we shouldnt decreas the prices. If we decreased the prices, the
quality of food would be worse.
We should by a new coffee machine. (We should consult with a dietary specialis). I think we have discuss
about these problems in the near future.
I look forward to hearing of you.
Best regards:
Gregory Szasz
Pass
Task fulfilment
Grammar
Vocabulary
Structure
Adequate range of
3 content points
covered
adequately
The text does not
reflect the genre
required (letter
instead of a
report)
Good range of
grammar used
(e.g. conditionals),
reasonably
accurately. The
errors do not
impede
communication
B2 vocabulary
with few spelling
errors
Mostly coherent
text with some
cohesive
devices and
paragraphs where
appropriate.
Structure mostly
appropriate to text
type.
Make sure you

write in the genre
required
Proofread your
work and check
there are no
grammatical
errors
Check spelling
Make sure you use

a range of linking
devices to create
a logical link
between
sentences and
paragraphs
Improved version

I used questionnaires to carry out some research on whether the students are satisfied with the new
restaurant. I am sending you a spreadsheet as an attachment.
First of all, most students are satisfied with the quality of food, which is promising. The main problem is the
variety of the menu. Most students think the menu is boring. In addition, we have to pay attention to
vegetarians, whose number increases month by month, but who commented that the menu does not take
them into consideration.
Moreover, some students thought that the prices are a problem, but if we decreased the prices, the quality
of food would be worse.
I am convinced by the students comments that we should buy a new coffee machine. In addition, we
should consult with a dietary specialist, too. I think we should discuss this in the near future.

Dear Principal,
I carried out a poll to find out the details of the college restaurant. I asked 120 student
and 114 answered to me.
To begin with, from them 20 person say that the quality of the food was very good, 80
person satisfied and 14 person unsatisfied. They said that the coffe was terrible.
Moreover, there is 84 person who unsatisfied about the variety of menu, 20 who satisfied
and only 10 who think it is very good. They neer more chips and some vegetarian food and they
said that choice was limited, so changes needed.
On the other hand there is a good point: the questionnaires said that the staff is nince.
They have good suggest: music in the restaurant.
My opinion is that these recommends are useful and I hope that we can use at least some.
Yours sincerely,
Kitty Rvsz.
Pass
Task fulfilment
Grammar
Vocabulary
Structure
All content points

covered, but with
limited
expansion/clarificati
on
The text does not
reflect the genre
required (letter
Make absolutely
sure that you have
covered all content
points fully and
clearly
Dedicate at least 2-3
sentences or an
entire paragraph to
each content point
Make sure you write
in the genre
required
There is some
attempt to use a
range of grammar
(eg reported
speech), but there
are some basic,
below level errors
(eg 20 person, 80
person satisfied,
they have good
suggest, there is 84)
Aim for a good

range of grammar
(try to have some
variety), but at the
same time pay
attention to errors,
especially if they are
in structures below
level
Use the dictionary
to eliminate some
errors (eg staff are)
Narrow range of
vocabulary used
with some basic
errors (eg coffe,
nince, these
recommends), some
of which impede
communication
Try to use more

vocabulary (eg
instead of good
news, write
promising news)
Use the monolingual
dictionary to help
you find more
descriptive
synonyms
Use the dictionary
to check the spelling
of words
Good paragraphs
and an adequate
attempt to use
linking words
Punctuation errors
do not impede
communication.
Make sure you use

some linking
adverbials to create
complex sentences
(e.g. in spite of,
despite, although,
even though,
provided)
Improved version

I carried out a poll to find students opinions on the college restaurant. I asked 120 student
and 114 replied.
To begin with, out of the 114 students, 20 said that the quality of the food was very good, 80
people were satisfied and 14 were dissatisfied. Some commented that the coffee was terrible.
Moreover, there are 84 people who are dissatisfied with the variety of the menu, 20 who are
satisfied and only 10 who think it is very good. Some commented there seem to be chips with
everything and others that theres insufficient vegetarian food. Clearly the choice is limited, and so
changes are needed.
On the other hand, there is a positive point too. Some people mentioned that the staff are
nice. They also made some good suggestions, such as having music in the restaurant.
Part 1 Answer 10 (First Class Pass)

28 Ifjusg Stree
Nagykll
4320
11/05/2012
21-26 Kornyi Street
Nagykll
4320
Dear Mr. Bobonka

I am writing to report about the student restaurant in our school. The students were helpful and 114 out of 120
returned the questionnaires.
First of all, I would like to inform you that the final results of the survey were satisfactory. The main findings are that
the quality of the food is good, the variety is not wide enough but the prices are reasonable.
Secondly, some students made useful comments, for example there were suggestions regarding the possibility of
extending the opening hours and introducing music. I also agreed with those who requested vegetarian food, and
greater choice.
I suggest therefore that we meet to discuss how we might be able to implement some of these suggestions as soon as
possible.
Yours sincerely,
Gerg Zsros
First Class Pass

Task fulfilment
Grammar
Vocabulary
Structure
All 3 content
points covered
fully and
appropriately
The text does not

reflect the genre
required (letter
instead of a
report)
Good range of
grammar
appropriate to
B2 used with
clarity,
assurance and
precision.
Broad range of
vocabulary used
accurately (eg
inform, main
findings, variety,
reasonable)
Good use of
collocations (eg
implement
suggestions)
Coherent text
using cohesive
devices and
paragraphs
where
appropriate.
Few if any
punctuation
errors.
Improved version

I am writing to report about the student restaurant in our school. The students were helpful and 114 out of 120
returned the questionnaires.
First of all, I would like to inform you that the final results of the survey were satisfactory. The main findings are that
the quality of the food is good and the prices are reasonable although unfortunately it appears that the variety is not
wide enough.
Secondly, some students made useful comments; there were suggestions regarding the possibility of extending the
opening hours and introducing music. I also agreed with those who requested vegetarian food, and a greater choice.
I suggest therefore that we meet to discuss how we might be able to implement some of these suggestions as soon as
possible.

FAIL example
Writing Part 2
Youve been discussing the sea in your English class. Write a composition about The sea what I think
about it and how it makes me feel.
Part 2 Answer 1 (Fail)
Dear Mrs. Smith,

it is not an easy question, because I am not an English teacher, but I am not a teacher. I have
only some suggestion for you and the class, our classmates. I have learnt English here for 3
years and I really enjoy it.
But sometimes I am boring. For example: (the) last time. It was not so had, although it was not
enjoyable.
I would like to share with you a few interesting plans. I talk about it with my class-mates and
they found it amazing. If we have a time, we shall make an excursion, near from the school. In
the fresh air we really like the lesson and we can listen to you better. I would like to often
watch a movie in the lesson with original English language and English subtitle. I have a dream. I
have never been in United Kingdom. I f we have enough money for it, maybe next year we should
travel there. If we spend there two weeks, we will better in English. I promise you, Im going to
more practise my English in this year.
This only a suggestion, but if your opinion is the same, I will very happy. Please, we do it!
Thak you and yours faithfully.
Judit
Fail
Task fulfilment

grammar

vocabulary
Structure
The range of
grammar is below
that expected at
B2
There are many
errors not
expected at B2
(e.g. we will better
in English, I will
very happy, please
we do it)
There are some
awkward
sentence
structures
Aim for a good
range of grammar,
but at the same
time check that
you dont make
any errors,
especially basic
ones
During
preparation, keep
track of your most
common errors,
so that you will
know at the time
of the exam what
to check for
The text is
completely off
topic
The text does not
reflect the genre
required (letter
instead of a
composition)
Make sure you

understand the
task before
starting to write
Use a dictionary to
check every
unknown word in
the instructions
(including the
genre)
Do not write a prememorised essay
even if the exam
task seems too
difficult at first
Even though the

range of
vocabulary is
adequate, it is not
relevant to the
topic
Make sure you

write about the
topic requested
and you use
vocabulary which
is relevant to the
topic
The text is not

totally coherent
There is little use
of cohesive
devices/ linking
words
The structure is
inappropriate for
the text type
Plan before
writing and
organise your
thoughts into
logical paragraphs
Build your
paragraphs up in a
logical manner
using topic
sentences and
support them with
supporting
sentences
Use linking words
to create a logical
link between your
sentences and
paragraphs
Part 2 Answer 2 (Fail)
The sea
First of all sea is the most beautiful thing I have ever seen.
The water is blue, sun is shining, and the sky is blue. There are two types of sea. There are a lot of salt
sea and sweet sea. I prefer sweet sea and there are a lot of wonderful animals in the sea. For example
scrabs. Luckily, I saw the sea once. This was unforgottable experience. I was very happy and excited
when I saw the sea. I belive that, Adria is the most beautiful sea. Secondly, hardly ever, the sea is very
dangerous because there a lot of dangerous animals in the sea for example shark. Most important of all,
you always be care. However, sea is good for your health because it contains a lot of minerals. Nowadays
there a lot of harmful thing for example our oil. I hope that I will travel to the sea. Sea is fantastic, but it
very changeable. In my point of view, sea is a fairy tale. My dream comes true when I saw the sea. I
makes me very good. This experience is unwritten.
In one word, the sea is unforgettable.
Fail
Task fulfilment

grammar

vocabulary
Structure
The topic is
adequately
expanded
The genre and tone
are mostly
appropriate
Make sure you look

for the key words in
the instructions and
that you address
both content points,
with good
expansion
The range of
grammar is below
that expected at B2
(The text consists
mostly of basic
tenses eg present
and past simple
which are A1 and A2
tenses)
There are many
errors not expected
at B2

make sure you use
grammatical
the requirements of
the level
o
o
narrow range of
vocabulary with
many errors of
spelling and/or
appropriacy, some
of which impede
communication. (eg
scrabs, sweet sea)
Try to use more

vocabulary
Use the monolingual
dictionary to check
for meaning and
appropriacy
There is no attempt
Some paragraphs
are too short or too
long and all are
illogically structured
Make sure you plan

your paragraphs
logically before you
start to write
Make sure you use a
range of linking
devices to create a
sentences and
paragraphs
Make sure you use
some linking
adverbials (eg in
spite of, despite,
although, even
though, provided)
Improved version
The sea
First of all, I think the sea is the most beautiful thing I have ever seen. I love it when the water and the sky
are blue and the sun is shining.
It is interesting that there are two types of sea. There are a lot of salt-water seas but there are also freshwater seas. I prefer the salt-water seas because they have lots of wonderful fish and animals such as crabs.
Sometimes, however, I think the sea can be very dangerous because there are a lot of dangerous animals
there, for example, sharks. You should always therefore be careful in the sea.
However, the sea is good for your health because its water contains a lot of minerals. Unfortunately,
nowadays there are a lot of harmful substances as well, for instance oil.
Personally, I was lucky enough to see the sea once. It was an unforgettable experience. I was very happy
and excited when I saw the sea. I believe that the Adriatic is the most beautiful sea.
I hope that I will travel to the sea again in the future. The sea is fantastic, but it is very changeable. From my
point of view, the sea is like a fairy tale. It was a dream come true when I saw the sea. It made me feel very
good. My experience was too wonderful to explain.
In conclusion, I find the sea unforgettable.

PASS example
Writing Part 2
Youve been discussing the sea in your English class. Write a composition about The sea what I think
about it and how it makes me feel.
The sea
One of greatest and the most beautiful thing is the world. I remember well the earths
80% is salt water. It includes not just seas but of course the three big oceans too.
First of all the sea has wonderful animals, seafruits and environmental. Lots of different
types of fish live there. They like swimming together in small groups. Similar spieces like hunting
together as well. Secondly, I would like to mention that under the blue water live some
dangerous animal too. For instance white sharks are really frightening. I scare of them. Moreover
not just that animals exist there. Here you can finde dolphines. They are swimming just like they
are dancing in the cold, blue water. Of course these are just some examples from the beautiful
sea live in a nutshell.
Furthermore I would like to inform you how I feel about that. For me the sea is amazing. I
have had a chance to visit some of them. For example when I was in Croatia and Italy we went
to a cruise with a huge boat. I have seen dolphines as well. It was great and fastinating, but for
me this is not the best part of the sea, because I have some experience of diving. It was more
enjoyable than just sitting in a boat. I could see what the underground life like in the water. It
made me feel free and calm. I could swim together those wonderful animals (as I told you) what
I have just seen on TV.
It is a beautiful feeling to go diving and see the sea. If you can afford it, do not miss it.
Pass
Task fulfilment

grammar

vocabulary
Structure
The topic is
adequately
expanded
The genre and
tone are mostly
appropriate
Adequate range of
B2 grammar used
with no impeding
errors
Good range of B2
vocabulary with
few errors of
spelling or
appropriacy. The
errors do not
impede
communication
Make sure you

fully and
appropriately
address both
content
points, with
good
expansion and
support
Make sure you

read over what
youve written
and correct any
grammatical
errors
If you have time,

check your
spellings in your
monolingual
dictionary
Effective use of
linking words (e.g.
First of all,
secondly,
furthermore)
There are
appropriate
paragraphs
There are few, if
any, punctuation
errors
The structure is
mostly
appropriate to the
text type
Make a plan
before you start to
write to make sure
your writing will
be coherent and
follow a logical
structure
Make sure you use
a range of linking
devices to create
a logical link
between
sentences and
paragraphs
Make sure you use
some linking
adverbials to
create complex
sentences (e.g. in
spite of, despite,
although, even
though, provided)
Improved version
The sea
The sea is one of the greatest and most beautiful things in the world. I have learnt that 80% of
the earth is covered by salt water. This figure includes not just the seas, but, of course, the three
big oceans, too.
First of all, the sea has wonderful animals and is a fascinating environment. A lot of different
types of fish live there. They like swimming together in small groups. Similar species like hunting
together as well.
Secondly, I would like to mention that some dangerous animals live under the surface of the
blue water, too. For instance, white sharks are really frightening. I am afraid of them. Moreover,
not just those animals exist there, but you can also find dolphins there. They swim as if they were
dancing in the cold, blue water. Of course these are just some examples of the beautiful sea life in
a nutshell.
Furthermore, I would like to inform you how I feel about the sea. For me, the seas are
amazing. I have had a chance to visit some of them, for example, we went on a cruise on a huge
boat and visited Croatia and Italy. I have seen dolphins as well. It was great and fascinating, but for
me this is not the best part of the sea, because I have some experience of diving. It was more
enjoyable than just sitting in a boat. I could see what the underground life in the water was like. It
made me feel free and calm. I could swim together with those wonderful animals that I had
previously only seen on TV.
It is a beautiful feeling to go diving and see the sea. If you can afford it, do not miss it.
The sea what I think about it and how it makes me feel.

I think the sea makes me silent. I often travel to the sea with my parents. When I
am at the beach and nobody is there, just me, I sometimes think about the things,
which happening around me. Its good to know, that theres a place where I can be
myself and dont do anything. Just thinking. I have been to the Atlantic Ocean, when I
was in America, and I have been to the North Sea too.
On the other hand I think the sea could be rude, but just sometimes. For example
if theres a storm. But it can quickly calm down after it.
All in all I think the sea makes me calm and if I can do it I go to the beach to
holiday.
Pass
Task fulfilment

grammar

vocabulary
Structure
The text is shorter

than the minimum
word count
The topic is not
expanded
adequately enough
The text mostly
focuses on the how
it makes me feel
aspect of the
instructions
You dont have to
count every word to
make sure you have
written enough. Just
count the first 3
lines and divide by 3
to get your average
word count per line,
and then multiply
that by the number
of lines
Adequate range of
B2 grammar used,
reasonably
accurately (e.g.
present perfect,
relative clause,
modal auxiliaries,
causative)
Adequate range of
B2 vocabulary used
with few errors of
spelling or
appropriacy.
Read through your

writing when you
have finished and
correct any
grammatical errors
Check any words

you are not sure of
to make sure you
are spelling them
correctly and using
them appropriately
Mostly coherent
text with
paragraphs where
appropriate.
Effective use of
linking words (e.g.
all in all, on the
other hand)
Few if any
punctuation errors
Make a plan before

you start to write to
make sure your
writing will be
coherent and follow
a logical structure
Improved version
The sea what I think about it and how it makes me feel.

I love the sea its just so huge when you look at it from the beach. I have seen the Atlantic
Ocean from the shores of America, and I have seen the North Sea from England, too. Whichever
ocean or sea I look at, it always seems to have a life of its own and to stretch on and on forever. On
a summers day its so peaceful and calming. On the other hand, I think the sea can sometimes be
frightening, for example, when theres a storm and the waves crash onto the beach. But then it
can quickly calm down afterwards and be peaceful again.
I often travel to the seaside alone when I need to think. I believe the sea can make me
tranquil and help me to relax. When I am at the beach and nobody is there, just me, I sometimes
think about all the things which have been happening around me in my daily life. Its good to know
that theres a place where I can be by myself and do nothing, just think.
All in all, I think the sea makes me calm and if I could, I would go to the beach every day.

The sea is the strongest power in the world. Its huge and it rules everything. The life started
from the sea and if we follow the Bible it can take it back. Ive watched a film in the TV about
oceans. There was an intersting statics about the living organisations in the Earth. We only
know the 30% of it because the most lives under the seas. That thing shows that how little is
our knowledge about the seas.
First time when I saw the sea I was 12. We traveled by car with my family to croatia. The
highway wasnt redy yet and we came from a turny little road what was in a forrest. It was
night so we couldnt see anything but in a corn I could see the sea and over it there was the
full moon and I could see the silver bride on the top of the water. It was love for the first look.
Sice this situation I allways want to go to seas or oceans. I dont care about montains, rivers
or any beautiful place just the sea shores and Ireland or ship tours. I think the sea is the
beautiest thing in the world.
Task fulfilment
Accuracy and range

of grammar
Accuracy and range

of vocabulary
Structure
Good range of
grammar used,
reasonably
accurately (e.g.
superlative
adjectives,
present perfect,
past simple,
modal auxiliaries)
Make sure you

read over what
youve written and
correct any
grammatical
errors
Adequate range of
vocabulary used,
but with many
spelling errors (eg

allways, forrest,
montains,
intersting, redy,
sice)
Errors of
appropriacy,
some of which
impede
communication
(eg an interesting
statics, turny little
road)
Use the
monolingual
dictionary to
check your text for
vocabulary errors,
spelling and
collocations
Topic is fully
expanded
Genre is
appropriate
Little use of
cohesive devices
Not totally
coherent no link
between first and
second
paragraphs
Make sure you use

a range of linking
devices to create
a logical link
between
sentences and
paragraphs
Improved version
The sea is the strongest power in the world. Its huge and it rules everything. Life started from the
sea and if we believe what it says in the Bible, it can take it back.
Recently I watched a film about oceans on TV. There were interesting statistics about living
organisms on the Earth. We only know about 30% of them because most live under the sea. This
shows how little our knowledge about the sea is.
I became fascinated by the sea the very first time I saw it, when I was 12. I had travelled with my
family by car to Croatia. The highway wasnt ready yet and wed been going along a winding little
road through a forest. It was night so we couldnt see anything, but suddenly we turned a corner
and I could see the sea in front of me and there was a full moon over it, like a silver bridge over the
water. It was love at first sight.
Since then I have always wanted to go to the sea or ocean whenever possible. I dont care about
mountains, rivers or any other beautiful places, just the sea shores and islands. I think the sea is
the most beautiful thing in the world and it never ceases to fascinate me.
The sea what I think about it and how it makes me feel

The first thing that comes in my mind when I hear the word sea is the Pacific ocean. Its name means peace and I
imagine that thats what the sea is like. But I can only imagine because Ive never seen the sea although Ive always
wanted to. Here in Hungary we dont have any sea, only lakes. However the lake Balaton is called the Hungarian sea
but it is not like the same as the white sandy beach of a tropical island. Hopefully if I can find a good job and earn
enough money, I can go on a tropical vacation for a few weeks. Im sure I would really feel relaxed swimming in the
sea, laying in the sun all day and eating exotic dishes and watching the sunset over the water when the day ends.
Of course this is just a dream. By look of the things I will have to work for years to save so much money and even if I
will have the money I can think of a million other things that are more important then a week on that beautiful
tropical beach.
Because of this I am always a little bit sad when I think of the sea, but at least the Hungarian sea is here for me.
First Class Pass

Task fulfilment

grammar

vocabulary
Structure
Fully and
appropriately
addresses both
content points,
with good
expansion and
support. Genre
and tone totally
appropriate.
Good range of
grammar
appropriate to B2
used with clarity,
assurance and
precision. Errors
occur when
language above
level
used/attempted.
A good command of
B2 vocabulary
Some errors in
idiomatic
expressions eg that
comes in my mind,
By look of the
things, but it is not
like the same as
Coherent text
using cohesive
devices and
paragraphs where
appropriate.
Few if any
punctuation
errors.
Structure fully
appropriate to
text type.
Use the monolingual

dictionary to check your
text for idioms and
collocations
Improved version
The sea what I think about it and how it makes me feel

The first thing that comes to mind when I hear the word sea is the Pacific Ocean. Its name means
peace and I imagine that thats what the sea is like. But I can only imagine because Ive never seen
the sea although Ive always wanted to. Although Lake Balaton is called the Hungarian Sea, it does
not have the same white sandy beaches as a tropical island. Hopefully if I can find a good job and
earn enough money, I can go on a tropical vacation for a few weeks. Im sure I would really feel
relaxed swimming in the sea, lying in the sun all day, eating exotic dishes and watching the sunset
over the water when the day ends.
Of course this is just a dream. By the look of things I will have to work for years to save enough
money and even if I had the money I can think of a million other things that would be more
important than a week on that beautiful tropical beach.
Because of this, I am always a little bit sad when I think of the sea, but at least the Hungarian Sea is
here for me.
The sea, which mainly covers our Earth, should be saved for the future. This huge amount of salty
water is be very important for everybody who lives on this planet. It gives us water, food and fun.
Millions of fish, which provide us with healthy food, live in it . I cannot imagine my summer
holiday without the beach where I usually go to relax with my family. I like its smell; I like to swim
in it and play with my son in the water or just relay and sunbathe.
I have never tried sailing, but I would also like to try that one day.
Unfortunately the fishing industry destroys the living animals in the sea. Can anybody imagine the
sea without any fish or plants? I think it is not possible. The sea, which is a good place to relax, can
be very dangerous too. I have heard many bad stories about ships which got into problems when a
storm or a hurricane came.
So, I think the sea can be nice, it is a good place for summer holiday but we have to take it
seriously and save it for the future and give the same memories to our children as we have about
the sea.
First Class Pass

Task fulfilment
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Introduction

Marking the writing tasks

Maximum marks for each writing task

Produce a neutral or formal response to a written, graphic

Free writing to produce a text using informal language

Grade table for Writing section for B2

Writing 2: free writing (eg personal letter,

Can write clear, detailed official and semi-official texts on a variety of

CEFR descriptors related to assessment criteria

Can write clear,

Accuracy and range of grammar

Accuracy and range of

Good range of grammar appropriate

A good command of B2 vocabulary.

Fully and appropriately

Fully and appropriately

Mainly satisfies the demands

Mainly satisfies the demands

Adequate range of B2 grammar used

Adequate range of B2 vocabulary.

Partially satisfies the

Range of grammar too limited (below

Limited range of vocabulary (below

Does not satisfy the demands

Does not satisfy the demands

Range of grammar severely limited.

Very basic repertoire (well below B2)

Sample answers and scores with an examiners comments

whether you agree that the title of the graph is accurate

the advantages and disadvantages of using the Internet

your views on the results of the survey.

Write between 100 and 150 words.

Do you agree that the title above the graph is accurate?

Accuracy and range

Accuracy and range

Fully and appropriately

Genre and tone totally

A good command of B2 Coherent text using

Dear Sir or madam

Accuracy and range of

Accuracy and range of

Mainly satisfies the

Not totally coherent.

Few errors of spelling

Genre and tone mostly

Proofread carefully and

Use your monolingual

Plan before you start to

Accuracy and range of

Accuracy and range of

Range of grammar too

Many errors of spelling

Not totally coherent.

Use your monolingual

Plan what you want to

Some impeding errors.

Proofread very carefully

Read through afterwards

Sample answers and scores with an examiners comments

say what skills you have

enquire about accommodation

ask about pay.

Write between 100 and 150 words.

Accuracy and range of