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dorothy 31 5 L9-L10 5/19
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thea 16 3 L3-L4
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alina 30 28 N14- N7 8/13
shon 30 7.5 N10-N 15/3/2 4/16
barbie 10 3 N2-N-2 4/16
lily 21+22 18+10 L30-L36 2/6
zoe 18 9.5 L13- L15/18 8/13
30 7.5 N10-N 15/3/2 4/16
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The way in which the candidate has responded to the task is a strong point of this script. It is a well-developed answer that addresses the issues
relevantly and at length. The writer introduces the topic, examines both sides of the argument and expresses a clear position. Points are
wellargued and supported with examples.
The answer is well-organised and the message is easy to follow with clear paragraphing and linking of ideas. There are too many errors in
cohesion, however, and some linkers are not always fully appropriate, so this limits the rating for this criterion.
A good range of vocabulary is used accurately and precisely, in spite of one or two awkward expressions and some rare errors. It could be improved
more if synonyms were used for redundant expressions
Similarly, a good range of structures is used but there are too many minor errors and omissions (such as in the use of prepositions and basic
subject/verb agreement). Nevertheless these mistakes do not reduce the clarity of the answer This answer summarises the key features of
both charts and integrates them well. Clear trends are identified and supported with appropriately-selected figures. The answer
could only be improved by adding an introduction to the general topic of the charts.
The information is well organised, with a clearly-signalled progression. Linking words are used accurately and precisely, although
there is occasional omission. Paragraphing is used well initially, but lapses in the later section.
A wide range of structures is used and most sentences in this answer are accurate. Errors are rare and do not affect
communication in this answer.
21 words in one complete line x 11 complete lines = 220 insufficient word count
Good range of vocabulary although with some errors in word form and awkward word choice
You can improve it by using more formal expressions and using synonyms for redundantly used words
Was able to make good and clear sentence structures although with some errors in subject-verb agreement, verb
tense and omissions on articles and preposition
Incorrect verb tense Missing preposition Unnecessary preposition
Incorrect word form weak expression Vague statement what do you mean?
Unnecessary comma missing comma Quite a very long sentence weak sentence fragmenting
Better not to use but, and, because and or in the beginning of a sentence this are conjunctions which connects to clauses
Incomplete idea since you used the expression whether you need to mention both sides of the argument
Avoid using question sentence structure the task is for you to express your ideas , not as your examiners opinion
Do not use the word you / your because it means your examiner use a general term
It is unnecessary to mention your opinion in the discuss both views essay in the introduction
You can mention it in the 3rd body paragraph or conclusion
Weak transition expression can be used for spoken English but not for formal/academic writing
Be careful with using absolute expressions they make the idea wrong and gives an impression that you have limited
knowledge
Since you used the expression whether you need to mention both sides of the argument
Remember that the chart is not included in the answer sheet so this expression will not make sense; besides, its not below, it is
above
It could have been better if you briefly discussed the opposing side of the argument
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The candidate has made a good attempt to describe the graphs looking at global trends and more detailed figures. There is, however, some
information missing and the information is inaccurate in minor areas. The answer flows quite smoothly although connectives are overused or
inappropriate, and some of the points do not link up well. The grammatical accuracy is quite good and the language used to describe the trends is
well-handled. However, there are problems with expression and the appropriate choice of words and whilst there is good structural control, the
complexity and variation in the sentences are limited.
The length of the answer is just acceptable. There is a good attempt to describe the overall trends but the content would have been greatly
improved if the candidate had included some reference to the figures given on the graph. Without these, the reader is lacking some important
information. The answer is quite difficult to follow and there are some punctuation errors that cause confusion. The structures are fairly simple and
efforts to produce more complex sentences are not successful.
It is better you presented these details in a manner of analysis. I mean compare the figures
of males and females or the year recorded highest numbers and the lowest numbers. What
you've written above do not present any comparison or analysis.
It seems you have an understanding of overall structure. But make your writing more
presentable.
This report covers the requirements of the task. The main trends and features were sufficiently developed. The
candidate has arranged ideas coherently, though at times they report data in a repetitive way. The range of
vocabulary is adequate. There are a few errors in grammar and word choice (mouse over the underlined words
shows suggestions for improvement). Overall, this task response meets the expectations and seems good enough
to achieve Band 7.
The reason for writing is very clear in this letter but it is not clear who the letter is to. The writer gives information to cover
allthree bullet points, but only one is well extended, and the whole response is underlenght at 135 words, so it loses marks
for this.The information is organised and it is easy to follow the message. A range of linkers is used across the answer and they
aregenerally accurate, but in some places, especially the first paragraph, sentences are not well-linked.The range of vocabulary
is sufficient for the task and there are some quite precise expressions. There are no errors in wordform, but some very basic
spelling errors occur. In terms of grammar, the range is rather limited with many very shortsentences and few complex
structures. Grammar is generally well-controlled, however, with only a few minor errors andoccasional inappropriate punctuation
Assessment:
OBS: 5.5
The changes you find here are only grammatical and mechanical. Any change in content is for you to incorporate. Ideas set in
bold (if any) are the ones that need to be improved, developed or changed.
We are very pleased to have you seek our services. I hope Papa English will be able to satisfy you as we do our best to help you
with your IELTS/TOEFL review.
With this organization, you are able to discuss both the views, organize your essays that there is no confusion, and you are able
to present your own opinion.
Recommendation for the conclusion will make it more impressive and prevents redundancy of statements
Assessment:
OBS: 6.5
One very common mistake in Task 1 is to use grammar and vocab that is too simple and to use
the same grammar and vocab too many times. When you practice, get used to using as many
different ways to say things as you can and get familiar with how to include some complex
grammar structures.
Common phrases to see are "the proportion of" or "the percentage of"
However, you can also use other words and fractions. These are some examples:
a small minority
This table presents some examples of how you can change percentages to fractions or ratios:
Percenta Fraction
ge
80% four-fifths
75% three-quarters
65% two-thirds
60% three-fifths
40% two-fifths
25% a quarter
20% a fifth
5% one in twenty
If the percentages are not exact as above, then you can usequalifiers to make sure your description remains
accurate. Here are some examples:
Percenta Qualifier
ge
This table presents some examples of how you can change percentages to other phrases:
Make sure that you compare general trends, differences and similarities; and make sure you back
this up information from the diagram. DONT just write a list of all the information, and DONT
focus too much on all the details.
The changes you find here are only grammatical and mechanical. Any change in content is for you to incorporate. Ideas set in
bold (if any) are the ones that need to be improved, developed or changed
We are very pleased to have you seek our services. I hope Papa English will be able to satisfy you as we do our best to help you
with your IELTS/TOEFL review.
When describing a flow chart, you should use different transition expressions that are used for
occurrence / sequence / chronology
First, Second, Third
Next
After that
Then
Afterward
Later
Thereafter
Finally
Lastly
Eventually
Following this
Synonyms for step
Stage
Next
Phase
Level
Period
Process
Development
Part
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if the student is absent/cancelled the class not an hour before the class for whatever reasons, 30 minutes is deducted from the
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