Topic Sentences:

Original-
In the beginning of the novel, Robert Neville is presented as the hero that
attracts much sympathy. Using Nol Carrolls definition of a monster, Neville
becomes the monster.
Point of view is complicated. Even as a monster, the audience still
sympathizes with Neville. Ruth comes into Nevilles life and symbolizes hope
for him. Ruth is not a monster. One on one time creates an understanding
between Ruth and Neville.
Ruths kiss for Neville at the end signifies forgiveness.
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Peer Review 1:

Diana Pablo

First sentence: elaborate on the hero part or change it, because you
proceed in saying he is the monster later on.

How does he gain our sympathy. He gains our sympathy by which

you will prove in your paragraph.

Specify which point of view is complicated and how.

Transition from monster, to complicated, to monster again with

transition words.

Transition from Ruth being a symbol to not being a monster.

What is the understanding between Ruth and Neville.

Do they become ironic? For example, is role that they are both placed
in the novel, ironic?

Include your so what? What about Neville being the monster, what
about forgiveness. Is there a greater picture?

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Peer Review 2:
Carrington Tolliver
I think that the first sentence is good it takes a different approach instead of
saying that Neville is a monster goes on to explain that he is a hero with
much sympathy. I think in the second sentence ties directly in with the first. I
think that in the third sentence you can add a transitional phrase or word to
transition more smoothly. Also be careful not to focus too much on the story
giving too much summarization. Also not just proving that neville is the
monster because that is already established. I like the idea in the next
sentence about Ruth as a symbol of hope. Again maybe just add a
transitional phrase. I think that the next sentence Ruth is not a monster is
strong and can be proven and supported well and is definitely
argumentative. Good job in connecting all of your sentences. The last
sentence does not really flow as much with the theme of your paper. Also
remember that Neville is a character.
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Peer Review 3:

Sharon Li

What happened to the third sentence? Lol, did you just plop it in? Its a bit out of place.

Some of the topic sentences seem too short. Last two sentences can probably be edited
to combine into one. Fourth and fifth sentences can also be combined into one.

As it is right now, it feels very choppy. It does not flow that well. You can fix this by
mentioning a point in the previous sentence indirectly.

Topic sentences should be stating the primary point that you will discuss in your
paragraph. Final sentence is just evidence. What is the point you are trying to make?
(see back to thesis statements: is what I am discussing important?)

You only lightly touch the horror genre, and there is no mention of cultural or historical
connection. You can relate the forgiveness at the end to cultural context, which can give
your topic sentences more depth. Remember, has to be more than what you can get
from the novel. More broad, global.

You talk about Ruth and Neville like they are real people. They are how Matheson
portrays them to be, how Matheson uses language to convey the nuances inside of
them, and how the language that Matheson uses affects and impacts the reader.

More clarity in Carrolls definition of a monster-- be more clear and concise with this.
Focus on one or two traits of a monster that Neville contains within himself, and connect
to his rhetoric and how it is important on a whole.

Revision-
In the beginning of the novel, Robert Neville is presented as the protagonist
hero that attracts much sympathy. Through the course of the book,
Mathesons portrayal of Neville turns him into a monster according to Nol
Carrolls definition of a monster as being threatening and impure. Due to the
change in perception of Neville, Matheson displays how point of view is
complicated. Because of the change in view on Mathesons depiction of
Neville, Nol Carrolls statement about audience reactions brings Nevilles
existence to a grey area. The ambivalence on Nevilles character in question
brings Ruth into the picture as a symbol of hope because she is not
illustrated as a monster. The use of one on one time creates an
understanding that resolves in peace and forgiveness between Neville and
Ruth.

Final-
In the beginning of the novel, Robert Neville is presented as the protagonist
hero that attracts much sympathy. Carefully through the course of the first
half of the novel, Mathesons portrayal of Neville turns him into a monster
according to noted art historian Nol Carrolls definition of a monster as
being threatening and impure (55). Matheson displays how point of view is
complicated through the change in the audiences perception of Neville.
Because of the change in view on Mathesons depiction of Neville, Nevilles
existence as the monster becomes contradictory to the readers reception.
With the ambivalence on Nevilles character in question, Matheson brings
Ruth into the picture as a hero. By the establishment that Ruth is the heroic
figure in the grand scheme of the novel, Matheson uses Ruth as a symbol of
hope for Neville. The use of one on one time creates understanding and
sympathy. Understanding results in peace and forgiveness which is
Mathesons overall message hes trying to communicate.