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writing?*
People identify lawyers witb convoluted language almost as mucb as stage, before you write a word. If a document such as a consumer
with wigs. The British National Consumer Council moved to do contract is to be easily understood, you must first identify the needs
something about the language barrier and published a booklet Plain and abilities of its potential readers.
English/or lawyers. A condensed version of the bookJet appeared in Remember that
1985 Law institute Journal 665-669. I many people have a reading age below that needed to read a
newspaper;
"Lawyers have Iwo common failings. One is thaI they do not write 2 sixty-five per cent of children leave school at the minimum
well and the other is that they think they do." (Felsenfeld "The plain leaving age; and
English movement in the United States" (1981-1982) Canadian 3 you are much more familiar with written documents than most
Business Law Journal.) people. It is wrong to assume that your ability to understand a
.. Be shorl. be simple. be human." (Sir Ernest Gowers The complele document will be matched by the typical reader.
plain words.) At the outset, therefore, try to put yourself in the reader's shoes and
imagine that you know nothing about the document's subject-
The truth is that very few lawyers receive any formal instruction in matter.
legal writing. Nor are there many courses specifically for lawyers, in The commitment to produce working documents for their intended
any I'orm of communication. The trainee solicitor may learn how to audience must be shared throughout an organization. It is no use if
use the precedent books and, unfortunately, is almost certain to get you, the writer, concentrate on the real needs of the real reader, if
t he message that you cannot go far wrong if you repeat what has gone your senior colleagues then reverse your approach.
before. The problem only seems to be getting worse as lawyers make The only golden rule, then, is to think first - and to keep thinking-
more use of word processors and ot her new technology. about the needs of your reader. Writing a plain English document
And as Lord Denning said, when presenting the 1982 Plain English such as a contract then involves three separate steps:
Awards, "Lawyers try to cover every contingency but in so doing I What should it say~
they get lost in obscurity." The wordy, repetitive phrases of legal 2 How should it be said~
documents in 1984 still conjure up a musty Dickensian image and 3 What should it look like?
make them unintelligible to most non-lawyers, the very people who Our guidelines concentrate largely on the second step - the use of
Reproduced by Sabinet Gateway under licence granted by the Publisher ( dated 2011)
are the ultimate users of many of these documents. Consumer clear and simple language. But the first and third stages - substance
contracts, in particular, are incomprehensible to the consumers who and design - are equally important.
sign them.
But legal writing does not have to be like this. Enlightened lawyers
have recognized that good professional writing does not read as
though it has been written by a lawyer. There is nothing clever about The only golden rule is to think/irs! - and to keep
sounding clever. The result is usually pompous and obscure. thinking- about the needs o/your reader.
The result of bad writing may also be professionally calamitous. A
firrn of solicitors was recently ordered to pay 95 000 damages for
giving "disastrous" advice to a client. A badly worded letter from the
solicitors misled a property company client into thinking that a lease
could not be terrninated and that existing tenants could stay on at the
What should it say?
same rent until 1986. Part of t he letter was phrased in "very obscure"
English, according to Mr Justice Jupp; it was not surprising that the The production of an intelligible document calls for some hard
r.;:cipient, who was not a lawyer, misunderstood it. thinking about its content. Contracts have rarely been designed
1t would be foolish to pretend that writing in plain English is easy. It specifically for their immediate purpose. Most lawyers start with
is usually more difficult to write simply and to the point than it is to precedents, then add what is needed for the particular transaction.
warne. Many lawyers will have some difficulty, at first, in switching This bad habit is now rnade worse by great helpings of turgid phrases
to a plain English style. It is a skill that takes practice and is time- that have been locked into word processors and can be called up at
the touch of a button. Lawyers are better at addition than
consuming.
But it can be done. You might, in fact, find you enjoy deleting every subtraction.
"herewith", "hereunder", "undersigned" and "aforesaid". It is So, first, you must decide on the content. Keep to essentials.
Lawyers, businessmen and consumers should be involved in testing
certainly easier to use personal pronouns like I, we and you.
the necessity of every provision. Is this term really necessary? Has it
The rest of these notes outline sorne of the groundrules and pitfalls,
ever actually been used? Is it a "just in case" term covering a minor
for lawyers aiming for clarity and cornmon sense in their professional
contingency that has not actually happened for the past twenty-five
documents.
years? It is often possible to drop complete sections from an existing
document. The search for clarity involves hard substantive analysis
Starting off just as much as good writing. The largest bank in the USA, Citibank,
was able to drop over half the contents of its promissory note when it
Clear and simple language and design are vital, but there is an earlier came to re-write the note in plain English and believes that
simplification could not have been achieved without this editorial
'Reproduced by kind permission of the British National Consumer process.
Council, Ed Simplified documents will rarely be true translations of their
concerned with the making of this contract shall be deemed to have been
made."
"I f there is a dispute arising from t his agreement, the two sides will refer it
to an agreed arbitrator. If they cannot agree on one, the president of the
British Association of Removers at the time of the dispute will appoint a
barrister to arbitrate. The arbitration will take place in accordance with
the law of the country where the contract is made (as set out in clause
22)."
Active verbs
The law is not abstract. It is about the real world where people live,
move and do things to and with other people. Verbs express this life
and motion, but verbs are simple creatures which lose much of their
vitality when they get dressed up into nouns or adjectives. Lawyers
seldom act - they take action; they do not assume - they make
assumptions; they would rather draw conclusions than conclude.
Statements and objections abound.
These two sentences say the same thing, but the second uses verbs to
describe the action while the first uses nouns derived from those
verbs. (The second sentence is still not, of course, ideal from a plain
English point of view.)
Binnington Copeland and "The conclusion which has been reached by my client is that if there is a
continuation of your action in t his manner, the termination of the contract
Associates will be taken into serious consideration by her."
Engineering and construction contract consultants "My client has concluded that if you continue to act in this way, she will
seriously consider terminating the contract."
PO Box 4268 Tel: (011)7891104
Randburg Ttx: 4-51305 Those sentences also demonstrate the disadvantages of the passive
the object. Here, there is a seventeen-word gap between the verb here are some suggestions:
(gives) and the direct object (a cause of action): "The proposed 1 Use clear type in legible sizes.
statute gives to any person who suffers loss by reason of 2 Use headings liberally. They should accurately and helpfully
discrimination based on race, religion or sex a cause of action for describe the document and its different sections.
damages." 3 Leave adequate spaces between sections. This will allow
One remedy is to make two sentences. Another is to move the headings to stand out and act as reference points for the eye.
intervening words to the end of the sentence: "The proposed statute 4 Where possible, phrase questions so as to minimize the amount
gives a cause of action for damages to any person who suffers loss by of writing needed to respond. Ask people to give their answers by
reason of discrimination based on race. religion or sex." ticking yes/no boxes.
5 Leave plenty of space where information does have to be filled in
in handwriting. People without good writing skills generally need
Avoid quirks more space than you do.
6 Do not use long lines of type, It is difficult for the eye to follow
People usually read legal material because they have to, not because them,
they want to. So their attention is, in any case, liable to wander. I f you 7 Do not use "justified" type - where the lines of text end at
distract them even more with fanciful writing - or language quirks- exactly the same place in the right-hand margin. It is harder and
you may lose their attention altogether. costlier to correct. is often more expensive to produce and may be
A language quirk is any small distraction which draws your reader's harder to read.
attention away from your meaning. "Elegant variation", for 8 Avoid too many capital leiters in a sequence. They are difficult
example, is often practised by those whose English teachers told to read. Reading is based, in part, on the recognition of word shapes,
them never to use the same word twice in one sentence. At worst, it not on the individual letters. To emphasize a word or phrase, use bold
can be absurd. "The first case was settled for 2 000 and the second type - but sparingly. 0
When a gamble is not a gamble: the Pepsi-Cola case (Continued from page 68)
It is clear that the Pepsi decision has had far-reaching effects in the Footnotes
marketplace, hence the large number of similar promotions which
currently abound. At the time of writing, the first cracks in the Pepsi I EM Burchell and P M A Hunt vol I General principals of criminal law
judgment are emerging: in S v Mbonambi 19863 SA 839 (N) Wilson 2 ed (1983).
J says he disagrees with the judgments in the Pepsi and Boardman 2 See definition of "subscription".
cases in so far as they appear to indicate that something in the nature J See Davies v Cape Times Umiled 1915 WLD 82: Rex v CO/lerill 1927
of a specific stake is required. CPD 48; and Rex v Morrison 1914 TPD 329. 0