IELTSTutors Comments

A good attempt at the task. The purpose of the letter is generally clear but the tone is
sometimes inappropriate (Id like to recommend). Some parts of the task should be
expanded more; the task response would be improved if there were more suggestions for types
of suitable jobs.

The letter is generally easy to follow and the range of vocabulary is minimally adequate for the
task. The occasional mistakes dont cause too much difficulty for the reader.

There are many examples of complex grammatical structures but these often contain errors,
sometimes making the meaning difficult to follow (because is take you to real practical
study).

Dear Anggan,

Hi there! Its been so long since Ive heard from you, I hope you are doing well, and your
family are doing fine.

I got was surprised to get your latter letter after so long, and very glad to knowing know you
graduated with a good grade., tThis will help you to get a job easier. Id like to recommendI Commented [SM1]: This phrase is a bit too formal for a
think its better for you to get a job after your graduateinstead of continuing your education, letter to a friend.

because is take you tothis will give you real practical study experience, not only Commented [SM2]: Graduation is already mentioned
before. Its a good idea to try and avoid repetition.
theoriticaltheoretical knowledge like our study at school.

Well mMost people like to have another other experiences and try new things., bBy Commented [SM3]: We use Well at the start of a
continuing your study studies Im worry youll not have fun and drop out as most of my sentence typically more when speaking than writing.

friends did. If you go to work youll have a different routine, youll meet new friends, and Commented [SM4]: experiences is plural.

youll have more responsibility., tThis will teach you in real lifehow the real world works, so Commented [SM5]: It is common to pluralise your
studies.
before continue gorather than going to collagecollege, getting a job is a good decision.

About what job you could get is not soIt shouldnt be complicated to choose a job, you can try
to apply send your CV in someto many different companiescompany. As you graduated
from the Ssecretary Ddepartment you also can also apply at my travel agency, while since Commented [SM6]: The Secretary Department sounds
now our manager is currently looking for a secretary staff. like a department in a college. Remember that the friend
hasnt been to college yet.

Well dear, thats all for now. Please contact me anytime you need help and wish to see you
very soon, bye. Commented [SM7]: bye is used when speaking rather
than writing.
Best wishesLots of love, Commented [SM8]: Best wishes is more for close
business associates. For friends we should use Yours, or
Lots of Love,