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This proposal offers a clear solution to defined problem that is clearly important to the
author. She offers multiple problems with her topic, as well as multiple solutions and clearly
explains how these solutions could be carried out. The formatting of her essay, especially the
heading and subheadings, allows the reader to clearly see the authors main ideas throughout the
While the overall formatting structure is solid, there are some places it could be
improved. In the author topic sentence of the objectives section the author states that there are
two objectives, so this section should be broken up into 2 very short sections. She also lacks a
methods section. Further breaking down the solutions section into solutions and methods would
allow her to have both. Her current solutions section doesn't just cover the overall goal or
solution but also offers how to achieve it, or the method. Her solutions could be more broad,
and then more detailed in the methods section. For example I think her three main solutions are:
In her solutions section she could explain how each solution achieves her objectives. How do
these solutions make the housing process easier and make sure rising second year students
will be living on campus If she finds that her solutions and objectives don't match, then she may
need to change either one. This may be a problem because one of her objectives is for students to
live on campus, but the solution suggests students live off campus. Then in the methods section
she can explain how these solutions would be carried out. For example, in the section add more
housing she will explain how northeastern can achieve this by building more housing. To
expand on this idea she might consider the possibility of northeastern buying nearby off-campus
housing such as the many apartment buildings bordering campus on forsyth and hemenway, so
that they can include these buildings in their housing process so students do not have to move
off-campus. Then for her solution to improve the housing process she further explain how to
improve the housing selection process, her main point being, reserve more housing for second
years, let rising second-year students choose first and shorten the timeline. Her final
method would be Allow students to live off campus. Because this essay is a proposal, there
The context note for this essay is excellent in explaining the exigency of the essay, saying
how it is time sensitive, and how improvement could help students next year not have to go
through the struggle current students are going through. I like how she explained not only her
primary audience, but her secondary audience as well. The author was also able to keep her tone
consistent throughout the essay. One thing she could do to improve her context note is to explain
how the audience influenced this tone and style of the essay.