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KylieGoodstartonyourroughdraft.Youhavethefocusesyouneed(politicalparticipation,
education,economicindependence,andwomensengagementinmanagerialpositions).Ive
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EvaluatingStatusofWomeninSouthKorea

ThecentralfigureoftheshockingscandalcausedinSouthKoreawasthetwo

women:thepresidentParkandtheinfluentialpersonbehindhernamedChoi.Ms.Choi

manipulatedandcontrolledthestateaffairsdespitethefactthatshedoesnotofficiallyhave

anyrighttoinvolveingoverning;furthermore,thepresidentParkactedashermarionette.

Thetwowomen'smanipulationdrawsomeblameonwomenbeingpositionedinpolitics.

Suchattackonwomen'spositionquestionsqualityofwomen'srightinSouthKorea.Inthis

paper,politicalparticipation,literacyrate,economicindependenceandmanagementpositions

inorganizationswillbeexaminedtoevaluatequalityofwomen'sstatusinSouthKorea.

Contradictorytowhatitisappearing,women'slifeconditioninSouthKoreaislow.

Koreanwomen'sliteracyrateisveryhigh.EducationinSouthKoreaUnderstanding

SouthKorea'sEducationSystemexaminesachangeinKoreanliteracyratethrougha

comparativeapproach.ThearticledemonstratesthatKoreansliteracyratehasincreased

dramaticallyafterJapanesehadoccupiedtheterritoryandoppressededucationopportunityin

SouthKorea.Thearticlepresentsalowliteracyratein1945:therewere78%ofKoreanhad

nobasicliteracyskillsacrossthecountry.Thisestimateincludesbothmaleandfemale.

Today,women'sliteracyrate,whoareage15andovercanreadandwrite,surprisingly

increased.Thearticledescribesthefactthatfemaleliteracyratehasmultipliedupto96.6%
whilemaleliteracyratehasincreasedto99.2%outoftotalpopulationof97.9%("South

Korealiteracy").

Kimdiscussesthecontinuousphenomenonthatthenumberofwomencandidatesin

politicsstayinverylowlevelcomparedtomalecandidates.Sheidentifiestheseriousgap

happenedin2004thatfemalecandidateswereonly66outoftotal1175.Thearticleobserves

thatthenumberoffemalecandidateshasgraduallyincreased.However,suchobservation

doesnotsimplyconcludethatwomenhavebeeneventuallyempoweredinpolitics.Tobe

specific,adistributionofgenderinofficedoesnotvaryinitsratioalthoughtheactual

numberoffemalecandidateshasgrownwidely.Asanexample,mushroominginthenumber

offemalecandidate,whichincreasedupto215in2008,wassimultaneouswiththetotal

numberofoverallcandidates,whichraisedto1301.In2012,142womencandidatesranfor

anelectionoutof1090.Likewise,thereductionoffemalecandidatein2012doesnot

depreciatethequalityofempowermentofwomenoverobtainingpositionsinoffice.(Kim).

KimcriticizeslowlevelofeconomicindependencethatmanyKoreanwomen

confront.KimprovidedthefactthatKoreaisratednumber53ingenderinequalityin

economicactivity.Thearticleobservesthatonly50.1%offemalewhoisfifteenorolder

participatesineconomicactivity.Ontheotherhand,thearticlefindsthattherateofwomen

whostayathomeinordertocontributetofamilyandhouseholdismuchhigherthanmen.

ThefindingreflectsthatKoreanwomenaremorelikelytostayathomeratherthanhave

economicindependence(Kim).

Asitcouldbepredictedbythelowvalueofwomenseconomicindependencein

Korea,thedegreeofKoreanwomeninmanagementpostsisalsolow.Kanganalyzesthe

resourcesofmanagersbygenderandbyjoblevelwhichproposesthatwomenareusuallyin
thelowerlevelormiddlelevelmanagerialpositions.Kangnotesthatthereare90.3%ofmale

executivemanager,94.3%ofmalegeneralmanager,and94.2%ofmalemanagerin2002.

Suchextremeoccupationamongmenshowsthatwomeninmanagementratioislowerthan

10%foreachposition.(Kang)

InConclusion,theevaluationofqualityofgenderequalityandempowermentof

womenthroughthepaperrejecttheassumptionthatpoliticalmanipulationbytwowomen

couldreflectahighstandardofempowermentofwomeninKorea.Despitethehighliteracy,

politicalandeconomiclifeofKoreanwomendoesnotmeethighstandardinitsqualityas

expected.SuchcontradictorybetweenthehighliteracyrateandthetreatmentthatKorean

womenhavereceivedinpoliticalandbusinessarenaimpliesthatempowermentinwomenin

SouthKoreaisinsufficient.
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