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Ashton Gilbert

Miss Cook

Composition

May 3, 2017

D.H Lawrence Woman In Love Criticism Analysis.

British! British! British! D.H Lawrence was a british author that was ahead of his time.

Some of his books were not allowed to be published in america until years after because people

believed they were too graphic or sexual. One of these books is the Woman In Love. In this

book he used graphic writing along with war elements but not actual having the war interacted in

his novels. In the 1900s women were getting more rights, cutting their hair, wearing shorter

dress, and even becoming more of the work force. In this literary analysis I will discuss how the

book relates to Lawrence in a physical way along with historical events.

First off, to understand why Lawrences writing as an author was much different from

other authors, why his writing was impacted by the culture of the time period, and his

understanding of the physically that was used in his novels, you have to understand the life of

Lawrence. Lawrence was born September 11, 1885 in Nottinghamshire, England. Lawrence was

raised in the working class. His mother was previously a part of the middle class but her

station dropped when her family was not longer financially stable. Because of this, she had

high hopes for her son Lawrence to make his way back to the middle class. Just like his mother,

he fell in love with books and writing. When he was in college Lawrence won a short story

competition. After he got his teaching certificate, in 1908 Lawrence took a teach position in

London. While he was teaching he still continued to write. As he got better and recognized

Lawrence quit his job as a teacher and focused on his writing career. In his life Lawrence had a
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lot of love affairs which you can see in his writing. He was engaged but broke it off after he

convinced a married women to leave her family and run off with him. This is one of the many

affairs he had in his life.

Secondly, in 1915 Lawrence published a novel call Rainbow. Rainbow is consider the

first half of Women In Love. These novels were considered very sexual for its time period. These

books are about two women Gudrun and Ursula Brangwen. Both fall in love:; Ursula the older

sister with Rupert Birkin and Gudrun the younger sister with Gerald Crich. These women are

strong and independent which in new to a lot of books around this age. You also have lovers that

is not normal in novel.

Finally,

In conclusion, D.H Lawrence was a great british novelist in the 1900s. Is novel Women

In Love was one in many to change everything that was one was unwritten.
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Rubric rating submitted on: 5/8/2017, 6:33:13 PM by danielle.cook@redstreaks.org

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W.1.a: Hook (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt

Your score: 3 creatively Introduction demonstrate, but demonstrate, but made)
demonstrated) paragraph a couple errors multiple errors Introduction
Introduction captures the exist) exist) paragraph
paragraph reader's Introduction Introduction captures the
captures the attention. paragraph paragraph reader's
reader's captures the captures the attention.
attention. reader's reader's
attention. attention.

W.1. a: Intro (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt) A

Summary creatively A brief summary demonstrate, but demonstrate, but brief summary
Your score: 2 demonstrated) A of the text(s) a couple errors multiple errors of the text(s)
brief summary analyzed is exist) A brief exist) A brief analyzed is
of the text(s) given to summary of the summary of the given to
analyzed is anticipate the text(s) analyzed text(s) analyzed anticipate the
given to reader's is given to is given to reader's
anticipate the knowledge anticipate the anticipate the knowledge
reader's level--no more reader's reader's level--no more
knowledge than a couple knowledge knowledge than a couple
level--no more sentences. level--no more level--no more sentences.
than a couple than a couple than a couple
sentences. sentences. sentences.

W. 1.a: (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt)

Introduce creatively Intro paragraph demonstrate, but demonstrate, but Intro paragraph
Claims demonstrated) clearly a couple errors multiple errors clearly
Your score: 2 Intro paragraph introduces the exist) Intro exist)Intro introduces the
clearly claims of the paragraph paragraph claims of the
introduces the body clearly clearly body
claims of the paragraphs. introduces the introduces the paragraphs.
body claims of the claims of the
paragraphs. body body
paragraphs. paragraphs.

W.1.a: Thesis (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted, but (Attempted, but (no attempt
Your score: 0 creatively The last a couple errors multiple errors made) The last
demonstrated) sentence is a exist) The last exist) The last sentence is a
The last thesis statement sentence is a sentence is a thesis statement
sentence is a that is clear, thesis statement thesis statement that is clear,
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thesis statement sophisticated, that is clear, that is clear, sophisticated,

that is clear, and insightful. sophisticated, sophisticated, and insightful.
sophisticated, and insightful. and insightful.
and insightful.

W. 1. a: Topic (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted, but (Attempted, but (No attempt
Sentences creatively Each body a couple errors multiple errors made) Each
Your score: 2 demonstrated) paragraph exist) Each body exist) Each body body paragraph
Each body begins with a paragraph paragraph begins with a
paragraph clear, begins with a begins with a clear,
begins with a sophisticated, clear, clear, sophisticated,
clear, and insightful sophisticated, sophisticated, and insightful
sophisticated, topic sentence. and insightful and insightful topic sentence.
and insightful topic sentence. topic sentence.
topic sentence.

W. 1. b: (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt

Organization & creatively Claims, demonstrate, but demonstrate, but made) Claims,
Sequencing demonstrated) counterclaims, a couple errors multiple errors counterclaims,
Your score: 2 Claims, reasons, and exist) Claims, exist)Claims, reasons, and
counterclaims, evidence are counterclaims, counterclaims, evidence are
reasons, and effectively reasons, and reasons, and effectively
evidence are structured and evidence are evidence are structured and
effectively organized in a effectively effectively organized in a
structured and logical structured and structured and logical
organized in a sequence. organized in a organized in a sequence.
logical logical logical
sequence. sequence. sequence.

W. 1. b: Literary (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt

Criticism creatively Clear demonstrate, but demonstrate, but made) Clear
Your score: 0 demonstrated) explanation of a couple errors multiple errors explanation of
Clear the criticism exist) Clear exist) Clear the criticism
explanation of being used. explanation of explanation of being used.
the criticism the criticism the criticism
being used. being used. being used.

W. 1. c: (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt

Transitions creatively Thoughtful demonstrate, but demonstrate, but made)Thoughtfu
Your score: 3 demonstrated) progression of a couple errors multiple errors l progression of
Thoughtful ideas and details exist) exist) ideas and details
progression of with sound Thoughtful Thoughtful with sound
ideas and details transitions to progression of progression of transitions to
with sound show connection ideas and details ideas and details show connection
transitions to between points with sound with sound between points
show connection and paragraphs. transitions to transitions to and paragraphs.
between points show connection show connection
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and paragraphs. between points between points

and paragraphs. and paragraphs.

W. 1. b: Focus (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt

Your score: 1 creatively Maintains a demonstrate, but demonstrate, but made)Maintains
demonstrated) consistent focus a couple errors multiple errors a consistent
Maintains a throughout. exist) Maintains exist) Maintains focus
consistent focus Thesis is a consistent a consistent throughout.
throughout. effectively focus focus Thesis is
Thesis is woven throughout. throughout. effectively
effectively throughout Thesis is Thesis is woven
woven every body effectively effectively throughout
throughout paragraph, with woven woven every body
every body ideas always throughout throughout paragraph, with
paragraph, with related back to every body every body ideas always
ideas always thesis in order to paragraph, with paragraph, with related back to
related back to prove the central ideas always ideas always thesis in order to
thesis in order to claim. related back to related back to prove the central
prove the central thesis in order to thesis in order to claim.
claim. prove the central prove the central
claim. claim.

W. 1. b: (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt

Examples & creatively Contains demonstrate, but demonstrate, but made) Contains
Details demonstrated) effective, a couple errors multiple errors effective,
Your score: 0 Contains specific, exist) Contains exist) Contains specific,
effective, relevant effective, effective, relevant
specific, examples and specific, specific, examples and
relevant details to back relevant relevant details to back
examples and up major claims examples and examples and up major claims
details to back in each body details to back details to back in each body
up major claims paragraph. up major claims up major claims paragraph.
in each body in each body in each body
paragraph. paragraph. paragraph.

W. 1. b: (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt

Reflection of creatively Clear reflection demonstrate, but demonstrate, but made) Clear
Evidence demonstrated) on the evidence a couple errors multiple errors reflection on the
Your score: 1 Clear reflection is referenced exist) Clear exist) Clear evidence is
on the evidence from the text reflection on the reflection on the referenced from
is referenced and thoroughly evidence is evidence is the text and
from the text and clearly referenced from referenced from thoroughly and
and thoroughly explained to the the text and the text and clearly
and clearly audience. thoroughly and thoroughly and explained to the
explained to the clearly clearly audience.
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audience. explained to the explained to the

audience. audience.

W. 1. b: (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt

Analysis of Text creativiely Clear and demonstrate, but demonstrate, but made) Clear and
Your score: 0 demonstrated) accurate a couple errors multiple errors accurate analysis
Clear and analysis of the exist) Clear and exist) Clear and of the literature
accurate literature using accurate accurate using the chosen
analysis of the the chosen analysis of the analysis of the criticism.
literature using criticism. literature using literature using
the chosen the chosen the chosen
criticism. criticism. criticism.

W. 1. b: (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt

Consideration of creatively Demonstrates demonstrate, but demonstrate, but made)
Prompt demonstrated) thoughtful a couple errors multiple errors Demonstrates
Your score: 1 Demonstrates consideration of exist) exist) thoughtful
thoughtful the task & Demonstrates Demonstrates consideration of
consideration of thoroughly thoughtful thoughtful the task &
the task & answers the consideration of consideration of thoroughly
thoroughly prompt or the task & the task & answers the
answers the assignment thoroughly thoroughly prompt or
prompt or requirements. answers the answers the assignment
assignment prompt or prompt or requirements.
requirements. assignment assignment
requirements. requirements.

W. 1. f: (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt

Rephrase Thesis creatively Conclusion demonstrate, but demonstrate, but made)
Your score: 1 demonstrated) restates thesis a couple errors multiple errors Conclusion
Conclusion and supports the exist) exist) restates thesis
restates thesis claims in the Conclusion Conclusion and supports the
and supports the essay. restates thesis restates thesis claims in the
claims in the and supports the and supports the essay.
essay. claims in the claims in the
essay. essay.

W. 1. f: So What (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt

Your score: 0 creatively Conclusion demonstrate, but demonstrate, but made)
demonstrated) offers closure a couple errors multiple errors Conclusion
Conclusion and leaves the exist) exist) offers closure
offers closure reader thinking Conclusion Conclusion and leaves the
and leaves the by answering offers closure offers closure reader thinking
reader thinking the So What? and leaves the and leaves the by answering
by answering question. The reader thinking reader thinking the So What?
the So What? significance the by answering by answering question. The
question. The major claim is the So What? the So What? significance the
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significance the clear to the question. The question. The major claim is
major claim is reader. significance the significance the clear to the
clear to the major claim is major claim is reader.
reader. clear to the clear to the
reader. reader.

L. 2: Sentence (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt

Complexity/Vari creatively Sentence variety demonstrate, but demonstrate, but made) Sentence
ety demonstrated) is effective and a couple errors multiple errors variety is
Your score: 2 Sentence variety sophisticated. exist) Sentence exist) Sentence effective and
is effective and variety is variety is sophisticated.
sophisticated. effective and effective and
sophisticated. sophisticated.

W. 1. e: Style & (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt

Tone creatively A formal style demonstrate, but demonstrate, but made) A formal
Your score: 1 demonstrated) A and objective a couple errors multiple errors style and
formal style and tone is exist) A formal exist) A formal objective tone is
objective tone is established and style and style and established and
established and maintained. objective tone is objective tone is maintained.
maintained. Writing is clear, established and established and Writing is clear,
Writing is clear, concise, and maintained. maintained. concise, and
concise, and strong. Writing is clear, Writing is clear, strong.
strong. concise, and concise, and
strong. strong.

W. 1. d: Word (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt

Choice creatively Word demonstrate, but demonstrate, but made) Word
Your score: 1 demonstrated) choice/vocabula a couple errors multiple errors choice/vocabula
Word ry is exist) Word exist) Word ry is
choice/vocabula sophisticated choice/vocabula choice/vocabula sophisticated
ry is and effective. ry is ry is and effective.
sophisticated sophisticated sophisticated
and effective. and effective. and effective.

L. 2: (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt

Capitalization & creatively Sentences demonstrate, but demonstrate, but made) Sentences
Punctuation demonstrated) demonstrate a couple errors multiple errors demonstrate
Your score: 4 Sentences correct exist) Sentences exist) Sentences correct
demonstrate punctuation and demonstrate demonstrate punctuation and
correct capitalization. correct correct capitalization.
punctuation and punctuation and punctuation and
capitalization. capitalization. capitalization.
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L. 2: Spelling & (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt

RO/Frag creatively There are no demonstrate, but demonstrate, but made) There are
Your score: 2 demonstrated) spelling errors, a couple errors multiple errors no spelling
There are no run-ons, and/or exist) There are exist) There are errors, run-ons,
spelling errors, fragments. no spelling no spelling and/or
run-ons, and/or errors, run-ons, errors, run-ons, fragments.
fragments. and/or and/or
fragments. fragments.

L. 1: Usage (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt

Your score: 1 creatively Correct and demonstrate, but demonstrate, but made) Correct
demonstrated) consistent verb a couple errors multiple errors and consistent
Correct and tense is present; exist) Correct exist) Correct verb tense is
consistent verb words are used and consistent and consistent present; words
tense is present; correctly. verb tense is verb tense is are used
words are used present; words present; words correctly.
correctly. are used are used
correctly. correctly.

W. 8: Relevant (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt

Information creatively The quotes used demonstrate, but demonstrate, but made) The
Your score: 1 demonstrated) in each body a couple errors multiple errors quotes used in
The quotes used paragraph are exist) The exist) The each body
in each body relevant and quotes used in information paragraph are
paragraph are effectively each body from research relevant and
relevant and support the paragraph are used in each effectively
effectively thesis and the relevant and body paragraph support the
support the claims. effectively are relevant and thesis and the
thesis and the support the effectively claims.
claims. thesis and the support the
claims. thesis and the
claims.

W. 8: Integrating (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt

Information creatively Information demonstrate, but demonstrate, but made)
Your score: 1 demonstrated) from the text is a couple errors multiple errors Information
Information integrated into exist) exist) from the tex is
from the text is the essay Information Information integrated into
integrated into selectively to from the texh is from the tex is the essay
the essay maintain the integrated into integrated into selectively to
selectively to flow of ideas, the essay the essay maintain the
maintain the avoiding selectively to selectively to flow of ideas,
flow of ideas, plagiarism, and maintain the maintain the avoiding
avoiding overreliance on flow of ideas, flow of ideas, plagiarism, and
plagiarism, and the text. avoiding avoiding overreliance on
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overreliance on plagiarism, and plagiarism, and the text.

the text. overreliance on overreliance on
the text. the text.

W. 8: Citations (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt

Your score: 1 creatively Each demonstrate, but demonstrate, but made) Each
demonstrated) quote/paraphras a couple errors multiple errors quote/paraphras
Each e is exist) Each exist) Each e is
quote/paraphras appropriately quote/paraphras quote/paraphras appropriately
e is cited using in- e is e is cited using in-
appropriately text citations. appropriately appropriately text citations.
cited using in- cited using in- cited using in-
text citations. text citations. text citations.

L. 3: MLA (Fully and (Demonstrated) (Attempted to (Attempted to (No attempt

Format creatively Paper is demonstrate, but demonstrate, but made) Paper is
Your score: 2 demonstrated) formatted a couple errors multiple errors formatted
Paper is according to exist) Paper is exist) Paper is according to
formatted MLA guidelines, formatted formatted MLA guidelines,
according to including: according to according to including:
MLA guidelines, heading with MLA guidelines, MLA guidelines, heading with
including: name, teacher, including: including: name, teacher,
heading with class & period, heading with heading with class & period,
name, teacher, and date, name, teacher, name, teacher, and date,
class & period, centered title, class & period, class & period, centered title,
and date, and correctly and date, and date, and correctly
centered title, formatted centered title, centered title, formatted
and correctly paragraphs. and correctly and correctly paragraphs.
formatted formatted formatted
paragraphs. paragraphs. paragraphs.

Comments:
Total: 0/100

This is not an analysis essay at all. There's barely a mention about the book. I'm not sure which
theory you're using or how all of the information about his life fits into the essay. It seems like
filler. It is clear based on this and your essay sketch that you did not read the book. Furthermore,
there are no citations or a works cited page for the researched information. This is plagiarism. I
know it's the end of the year, but I am completely baffled that you would think it would be
appropriate to turn in a paper like this. If you were to do something like this next year in college
you would not only fail the assignment, you would face failing the class. You know better.