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The short article or advertisement for this benchmark appears below, followed by the task the
candidate read before beginning the letter. The benchmark letter appears on the next page.
Task:
Write a letter to the Ministry of Education giving your suggestion
about how to spend the money from Ms. Lee. Describe the one
project that you believe would benefit your school the most.
ECCE Benchmark A: Letter
I am a 17-year-old boy who attends highschool. I am writing to give Rich development; original
supporting details
my sugguestion on what to spend the money Ms. Lee has given to the organized logically and
coherently in paragraphs 2
Ministry of Educations. I think this a remarkable act, that must be always and 3.
This way they would avoid many problems they currently have. For Broad vocabulary range
used appropriately (use of
instance, most of the times children who share a book cant get together synonyms, collocations,
idiomatic expressions).
to study. Also, sometimes they cant go to the public library. This issue is
of major importance for children who live far away from their school or
highschool. Finally, its obviously impossible for parents to buy these books
as they are very expensive.
Taking everything into account, it seems to me that the Ministry
should take advantage of this opportunity to solve this issue. Buying text
books would be the best way to use the money.
I hope my suggestions will be useful.
(comments on second page)
Comments
This is a detailed, linguistically complex essay. The writer selects a single topic to focus on,
describes the problem in detail, and explains why current approaches to the problem (e.g.
sharing books, going to the library) are unsatisfactory. This particular selection and arrangement
of ideas help the writer achieve his/her communicative goal.
Linguistically, the writing is extremely accurate, with only occasional deviations in grammar and
spelling. These are not distracting to the reader at all; rather, the reader must pay close
attention even to spot some of the errors. Many of the sentences and phrases are extremely
natural sounding, and the author successfully uses a variety of transitional and connecting
devices.