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Alex Parrish
ENGLISH 101 !1
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things that I successfully included and didn't include in my essay. Some elements made my
story click well and some made it feel empty and confused the reader. Being able to reflect
and revise is as skill that that all good writers need, using these skills to successfully convey
ideas to the audience is what all good writers aspire to do. As a writer I wanted to convey
the story of how literacy shaped my life and how I learned to write. When reflecting I
noticed I missed key points of P.I.E. and had a number of weaknesses including revision.
A major weaknesses I noticed was the lack of clarity, what made sense to me as
the writer didnt always make sense on the page and this a problem that should have been
caught in revisions. Until coming to the University of Arizona I have never revised an
essay on my own, and never opened my eyes to the benefit. I constantly had the arrogant
view that the words put on the page were golden and couldn't get better because I know
how to write. As I strolled into my first English class of college I was excited to prove how
well I could write and was awaiting a research topic or book to read, such as in High-
school. When given our first project I thought that it would be a great way to showcase
my skills and tell a personal story along with it. I sat at my computer crafting my story all
in one shot. I looked it over and thought it was perfect, but was blind to the essays
grammatical mistakes and lack of clarity. These mistakes are simple editing errors that the
narrative. P.I.E. can help develop a writing piece a being it to the next level. I found after
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revisions that I didn't make a point, illustrate it and give examples of how my summer job
changed my writing. This lack of P.I.E is something that should have been marked in
reviews especially with peers giving a fresh look on it. A mistake that I made was not
having an outside review of my essay and the quality of my work suffered for it. In
Some strengths I found with my literacy narrative, was the emotional attachment
to my major I conveyed to the reader and my critical thinking. The experience has made
me feel that I have already worked as an environmental professional and fueled my love
Establishing credibility as a writer is one of the first links you have to make with
the audience, and this can be one of the hardest things in writing. I think one of my
stronger parts of the piece was when I talked about my knowledge of environmental
studies and history. This established creditability and showed that I cared about what I
was writing. This emotional connection and use of ethos strengthened my work and is a
Overall my essay wasn't the strongest it could be and lacked some important
elements. Im glad I could identify my issues with a lack of P.I.E. and lack of revision, and
hopefully turn these weaknesses into strengths for the future. Revision and reflection is
one of the most important tools a writer can use to increase the quality of the work they
Passionissomethingthatapersonneedsinlifetofindwhattrulyexcitesthem,
andmotivatesthem.Manypeoplestruggletofindtheirpassioninlifebutthroughwriting
Iwasdiscoveredmine,motivatingmetobethebestIcanbe.GrowingupIwasalways
hadaninterestinscienceandhistory,butinevertrulyunlockedmypassionforthem
untilthesummerofmyJunioryearworkingatasmallofficeinLongIsland.
EnvironmentalSciencehasalwaysinterestedme,forcingmetothinkdeeper
thanjusttherightandwronganswerbutmakingmeaskthehardquestions.
Environmentalscienceisthestudyoftheenvironmentusingamixofhistoryand
sciencetokeeptheareasweliveincleanandsafeforeveryone.Goingintomyjunior
year,IjumpedontheopportunitytointernatanEnvironmentalconsultingfirmcalled
ImpactEnvironmental.ImpactfocusesinsolidwasterecyclinginNewYorkCity.This
specificrecyclingfocusesonsolidwasteordirtandsoil,whenabuildingis
demolisheditleavesbehindadistinctfootprintwitharichhistoryofwhatwasgoingon
inthepastgoingbacktothe1700s!WhatwedoatImpactisfindthatfootprintand
figureoutofitsharmfulthethepeople,plants,andenvironment,andifitiswesolvethe
hardissuesofhowtocleanit,orevenbiggerwheretoputthishazardousmaterial.
ComingintomyfirstsummeratImpactIdreadedEnglishclass,Ihadideasinmy
headthatIstruggledtoexpressonthepageclearlyandwithanyvoice.ThestrugglesI
wasfacingspreadtoeveryclassIwasineffectingmeinScience,andHistory.Ihadno
ideahowmuchcriticalthinkingandwritingskillscouldaffectmyeverydaylifeandbe
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usedinanythingmorethanjustenglishclass.WhenIstartedatImpactIwasdoing
basicworklikescanningindocuments,suchasmapsandfinancialreportsandmoving
officefurniture.ThiswasgoodformebecauseitkeptmeawayfromthewritingIsawso
manyofmypeersdoing.TheengineersIworkedwithmademefeelscaredtoeventest
thewater,theconstanttypingandsurveyingwasintimidatinganddaunting.
Afterafewmonths,movingboxesandmindlesslyputtingreportsintoexcel,I
wasaskedtoshadowandlearnfromsomeoftheengineersIhadcautiouslywatched
typingaway.TheengineerIshadowedshowedmetheropes,lettingmedoing
everythingIcouldtohelphim.Heletmeparticipateinsoilsamplingonamajorhighway
improvementprojectandperformpropertyinspectionbeingcompletedforabankina
sale.Themapsforthepropertyshowedittobeaformergasolinestation.Whowould
haveknown?Ihavealsobeengiventhechancetositinonvariousmeetings,andeven
activelyparticipateinsalescalls.TheexperiencehasmademefeelthatIhavealready
workedasanenvironmentalprofessionalandfueledmyloveforthisamazingindustry.
DuringtheselongsummerdaysIreallydidinvokedapassionthatIhadforthe
subjectandcareerandknewthatwaswhatIwantedtopursuewhenIwasolder.One
ofmybiggestprojectsIhelpedwithwaswritinganenvironmentalimpactreportor
Phase1,namedbecauseitwasthefirstphaseinevaluatingifapropertywasaffecting
theenvironmentinanegativeway.WehadtogotoasiteandbecomeSherlock
HolmesandWatson,combingoverthesiteforanysignofenvironmentalimpactor
distress.Whenwewerefinishedthehardpartcame,thelongreport.Iwastaskedwith
justasmallpartofitbutitwasstillcompletelyhorrifying.Icouldbarelywriteabouthow
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LordoftheFlieswasaboutevil,howwasIsupposedtowriteaboutenvironmental
impactintechnicallanguage,aboutwhatweexperiencedatthesite.Thistrialbyfire
reallypushedmeoutofmycomfortzoneinthebestway,teachingmehowtowriteand
conveymyideasclearlysothatmyreadercanunderstandme.ThesoftskillsIlearned,
liketimemanagementandhowtoworkwithsomeoneeffectivelyissomethingIhave
usedineverysubjectsinceandIwilluseforyearstocome.CominginthatsummerI
hatedwriting,morethananythingbutIleftwithcompleteknowledgeonhowtowrite
clearly,andmeaningfullytransformingenglishclassfromadullclassIstruggledwithto
afunandengagingone.Theexperienceallowedmetolearnfromtopengineersinthis
amazingfield,andhastrulymademeseemyselfpursuingacareerintheindustry.
DuringmytimeatImpact,IreallydiscoveredsomethinguniquethatIloveand
lookforwardtodoinginthefuture.Thispassionwillmakemycareerfeellesslikeajob,
makingeverydayanadventureandfuelingthispassion.Ifyoufindsomethingthatyou
aretrulypassionateabout,wecanunlockourtruepotentialandnotonlydowhatwe
love,butlovewhatwedo.
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The Community Profile that we wrote, was a very enjoyable essay to write. It
allowed me to use my strengths of research and discovery but shed light on my weakness
of proper citations and critical thinking skills. The Community Profile allowed me to
investigate and bring to light an organization I not only care about but one I'm involved
in.
The Community Profile let me play reporter and investigate my new home of
Tucson and the amazing community it has. I looked into the Jr. Wildcats youth hockey
organization and interviewed its senior members and leaders. A big problem I had with
the profile was my citations and sources. This was a shock to me because I thought my
research was thorough, but after reflecting I saw that I could have added sources and
added more critical thinking and not just informing. My citations was by far my biggest
weakness, mostly because my in text citations of the interviews weren't put in. This was a
simple mistake that I should have fixed before my final submission but skipped over in my
final review. After reflecting I was hoping that I could fix these mistakes for the future and
Some strengths I had while writing my Community Profile was my work on the
article itself to look ascetically pleasing, and provide a hook to bring the reader in. It is
a gradual process, taking hold not over weeks and months, but over years, decades, and
entire lives. The game engraves its way into the body and envelops itself around the soul
completely, hockey becomes us. The opening really is a strength and intrigues me to
across to the reader providing examples of events and ways to get involved. The
organization has a simple mission; provide children with a fun, wholesome sport-fitness
activity to promote sportsmanship and safe, competitive play and to help the children
improve their knowledge and skill. By showing how much enthusiasm I have I hope that
transfers over to the audience intriguing them to learn more. Another strength that my
Community Profile had was rhetorical awareness. This awareness was used to promote
the organization is a positive way by using pathos, showing the audience how much
passion the coaches and families involved had for the organization.
I think that my Community Profile overall was one of my strongest essays of the
year and promoted my strengths. The weaknesses I had is something to reflect on and in
hindsight are easy fixes going forward. Diving into such an amazing organization on
campus was my favorite project this semester and I go so much out of the experience.
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Brett Bushnell
President
It is a gradual process, taking hold not over weeks and months, but over
years, decades, and entire lives. The game engraves its way into the body
and envelopes itself around the soul completely, Hockey becomes us. Jeremy Hiltabidel
Head Coach
Three miles north of The University of Arizona, at the Tucson Indoor Sports
Complex three students run the very successful youth hockey organization, Graduate Student
and introduce kids to the wonderful sport of hockey. Brett Bushnell, a senior
here at the University is the president of the organization. He donates
countless hours of his time, despite the fact that he plays goalie on the
Universitys hockey team, is a full time student and plays in the UA
marching band. Brett works along two graduate students, David Sticker and
Jeremy Hilatabidel who all selflessly donate their time coaching the Junior
Wildcat teams. The Junior Wildcats were established in 2013 as a way to
get local kids interested in the sport involved with the hockey team. Over
the last few years the organization has taken off and has expanded to David Sticker
include multiple age groups and skill levels. The organization has a simple Coach/ Treasurer
mission; provide children with a fun, wholesome sport-fitness activity to
promote sportsmanship and safe, competitive play and to help the children Graduate Student
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NATIONAL CHAMPS!
The Travel teams of 8 and under, 12 and under and 18 and under all
finished in first place last year in the youth national tournament in
California.
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We typically have practice twice a week, and games on the weekends Stickler said It can be a lot
so volunteers from the Arizona team really helps. Stickler grew up in Tuscan and has played all
over the country. He attends school here at the University of Arizona and plays for the Cats, and
made it clear he doesnt wanna leave. My roots are here, I think we have made something here
that is bigger then uswe feel that we really make the difference in the community. The Team
wants to continue playing for years to come, opening hockey up to kids of all ages. We are lucky to
have so many great people to keep the team going for years Coach Hilatabidel says.
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ALEX PARRISH OCTOBER 17, 2016
Brett Bushnell
President
It is a gradual process, taking hold not over weeks and months, but over
years, decades, and entire lives. The game engraves its way into the body
and envelopes itself around the soul completely, hockey becomes us. Jeremy Hiltabidel
Head Coach
Three miles north of The University of Arizona, at the Tucson Indoor Sports
Complex three students run the very successful youth hockey organization, Graduate Student
and introduce kids to the wonderful sport of hockey. Brett Bushnell, a senior
here at the University is the president of the organization and he selflessly
donates countless hours of his time, despite the fact that he plays goalie on
the Universitys hockey team, is a full time student and plays in the UA
marching band (Bushnell). Brett works along two graduate students, David
Sticker and Jeremy Hilatabidel who all donate their time coaching the
Junior Wildcat teams. The Junior Wildcats were established in 2013 as a
way to get local kids interested in the sport involved with the hockey team.
Over the last few years the organization has taken off and has expanded to David Sticker
include multiple age groups and skill levels. The organization has a simple Coach/ Treasurer
mission; provide children with a fun, wholesome sport-fitness activity to
promote sportsmanship and safe, competitive play and to help the children Graduate Student
1
ALEX PARRISH OCTOBER 17, 2016
NATIONAL CHAMPS!
The Travel teams of 8 and under, 12 and under and 18 and under all
finished in first place last year in the youth national tournament in
California (Wildcats).
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ALEX PARRISH OCTOBER 17, 2016
We typically have practice twice a week, and games on the weekends Sticker said It can be a lot
so volunteers from the Arizona team really helps. Sticker grew up in Tuscan and has played all
over the country. He attends school here at the University of Arizona and plays for the Cats, and
made it clear he doesnt wanna leave. My roots are here, I think we have made something here
that is bigger then uswe feel that we really make the difference in the community. The Team
wants to continue playing for years to come, opening hockey up to kids of all ages. We are lucky to
have so many great people to keep the team going for years (Sticker).
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A Final Reflection
This semester has been one of the hardest academic periods of my life, I survived a major
geographic change, regulated myself with a continuing work load, faced challenges with sports
and friends and most importantly learned about myself as a person. I feel this semester has
warmed me into my new home of Tucson and I love it. Reflecting on these past writing
assignments has really made me reflect on my work habits and how much I've changed since my
first day here at the university. It showed me my biggest weakness of time management and
revisions and my biggest strengths of community involvement and being creative with a project.
All of this opens the door for growth in the coming semester and reflection on how to conquer
upcoming challenges.
Throughout the semester, the SLO I most improved on was my revision and reflection.
This skill was something I neglected before I came here and has developed into something useful
that I use in every one of my classes. With all the improvements I have made this year I feel that
I still have much to learn, both about English and myself and am open to finding the best way to
The SlO that I still need work in is conventions, my grammar and basics are sometimes
skipped over because Im excited about my Idea. This goes back to editing and revision because I
need to go back and revise, as well as use peer editing to ensure quality of my work. I hope to
improve my writing skills in 102 and really focus on developing more as a writer to benefit
myself in the future. Overall my experiences, the good, bad and the ugly shaped me as a writer
and has showed me who I am and how I am most efficient and that is one of the most valuable
In the following semester I expect to reflect on and actively use the skills I gained in
English 101, but to also increase my knowledge of English. Even with my revision process bring
something I struggled with I hope that I can successfully use it in English 102. Going into next
year I will defiantly need to change some study habits that I was sure worked and be more open
minded to change. I think English 101 got me over initial challenges that I knew I would face
English 101 has transformed me into a better student and has successfully prepared me
for writing in every class that I will be involved with in the next four years. I truly believe that I
have evolved into a better writer and critical thinker. The friendships and lessons learned in this
first semester will not soon be forgotten, and Im excited to show the world what I got for next
semester. The memories I have made in English 101 have been truly special and was a true