In the book Mirror for Man, Clyde Kluckhohn uses some examples to explain the

differences and similarities between people around the world. He gives us a

definition about culture and behavior. The general abstract notion serves to
remind us that we cannot explain acts solely in terms of the biological properties
of the people concerned, their individual past experience, and the immediate
situations." He defines culture as "the social legacy individuals acquire from their
group." From my perspective, Kluckhohn's view seems to be correct in certain
aspects, but on the whole, it still has some unreasonable factors.
He defines culture as "the social legacy individuals acquire from their group."
This view can be applied in some examples between Chinese and Americans.
Modesty in China is a highly respected character. Chinese people who are
successful in the personal life or business are understatement. For example, in
China when others praise you, your first reaction is "where", "not dare not when".
However, in Western countries, people are good at describing their own success,
and most Americans think that humility is a sign of weakness. So when
Americans are praised, they tend to be smile and say "thank you" and even tell
you about their success stories. If people live in the group, the performance of the
group will greatly affect the behavior of each individual. Commented [jr1]: This paragraph discusses
One shortcoming in his idea is that culture accounts for all behaviors except understatement and humility. This final sentence seems
biological factors. This view is too absolute, he does not take other factors into to be about individual vs collective cultures- it is related,
account. He gives us an example about Americans. Americans may seem but confusing here at the end of the paragraph.
themselves as individualistic, but they always follow some certain patterns, such
Commented [jr2]: I like the way you bring up your
that they brush their teeth in the morning, they put on pants instead of a grass
critique here and clearly state why you think it is
skirt, they eat three times a day not four or two, and, they sleep in a bed, not in a
inaccurate. You make a good point, as well.
hammock or sheep pelt. All this is attributed to the "American culture." But in fact,
these behaviours may not come from the group. From the beginning of our birth, Commented [jr3]: Apply our lessons of summary/signal

all our actions are given to us by our parents. In other words, if their parents phrases here. Im pretty sure that youre summarizing

teach them to eat four meals a day, perhaps their habits will change, if the Kluckhohn here, but it should be made clear with signal

Americans were born in the forest rather than the city, perhaps their habit is phrases.

wearing a skirt rather than pants. That is to say, the environment is also an
important factor affecting the habit.
Another disadvantage about his idea is that Kluckhohn says that people differ
from individual culture, but in essence people are similar. One example he gives Commented [jr4]: unclear meaning- this is an important
is the practice of polygamy. American women only accept monogamy, they can part of your essay, since youre telling us one of his
not understand the behavior of sharing her husband with others, while the important claims. Be sure to work on this part to clarify
Koryak women of Siberia support polygamy, it is a kind of generous performance the meaning.
for them. Although there are some differences in women, there are many
Commented [jr5]: good job with the signal phrase here!
common similarities for most males all over the world. I think this example can
not fully explain this view. Although the behavior of men is seen to be similar, in
Commented [jr6]: You mention in your main claim that
terms of find the truth behind the problem, we should not distinguish between
Kluckhohns view is too absolute- is there a way to
the so-called differences and similarity in gender.
connect to that idea here? It would strengthen your paper
on.
to keep reminding your reader about your main claim as
Other phenomena also refute the idea of Kluckhohn 's influence on culture.
you go on- sometimes just a word or two to help recall
Kluckhohn's definition of culture is still unreasonable for. He says that human
your main point is good.
action is determined by the experience of the ancestors. In fact, however, the
basic principles of Marxism tell us that everything is moving in the development
of the movement, both now and in the primitive times, people will change their Commented [jr7]: I really like this point! It is an
behavior because of the needs of social development. At all times, society must interesting way to point out and support your main claim
be in motion, such as cultural exchanges and shocks between countries. We are in that Kluckhohns view is too absolute: here is another
a society of economic globalization, we wear clothes today may be made in China, widely respected view that you feel is sound.
with the US mobile phone brand, with the cosmetics may come from Japan. The
interaction between the state and the state is getting closer. Asians and Commented [jr8]: confusing
Westerners is gradually familiar with each other. If the culture defines the
behavior of a person is correct, then we may still still do not know the earth is
round, and now still think that the earth is the center of the universe. Columbus
and Copernicus are those who get rid of the cultural ideas at the time.

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We didnt completed the job yesterday. Disposing of electronics properly becomes a
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Her father is the most success software engineer in the firm.

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The team is putting emphasis to their defense. Hybrid vehicles need more workers for
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We have enough homeworks to last a week. The wastes have to be dealt with
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I like apples they are delicious. The manager bought yesterday a new computer.

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We enjoyed the book and the movie, but it was more violent.

In the book Mirror for Man, Clyde Kluckhohn uses some examples to explain the
differences and similarities between people around the world. He gives us a
definition about culture and behavior. The general abstract notion serves to
remind us that we cannot explain acts solely in terms of the biological properties
of the people concerned, their individual past experience, and the immediate
situations." He defines culture as "the social legacy individuals acquire from their
Commented [jr9]: necessary information?
Commented [jr10]: look for a more formal academic
word
Commented [jr11]: you do a nice job of introducing this
quotation- try to do the same or similar for the previous
quotation.
group." From my perspective, Kluckhohn's view seems to be correct in certain
aspects, but on the whole, it still has some unreasonable factors.
He defines culture as "the social legacy individuals acquire from their group."
This view can be applied in some examples between Chinese and Americans. Commented [jr12]: look for a preposition to use with
Modesty in China is a highly respected character. Chinese people who are applied
successful in the personal life or business are understatement. For example, in
China when others praise you, your first reaction is "where", "not dare not when". Commented [jr13]: unclear- work on this translation
However, in Western countries, people are good at describing their own success,
and most Americans think that humility is a sign of weakness. So when
Americans are praised, they tend to be smile and say "thank you" and even tell
you about their success stories. If people live in the group, the performance of the
group will greatly affect the behavior of each individual.
One shortcoming in his idea is that culture accounts for all behaviors except
biological factors. This view is too absolute, he does not take other factors into
account. He gives us an example about Americans. Americans may seem
themselves as individualistic, but they always follow some certain patterns, such
that they brush their teeth in the morning, they put on pants instead of a grass
skirt, they eat three times a day not four or two, and, they sleep in a bed, not in a
hammock or sheep pelt. All this is attributed to the "American culture." But in fact,
these behaviours may not come from the group. From the beginning of our birth,
all our actions are given to us by our parents. In other words, if their parents
teach them to eat four meals a day, perhaps their habits will change, if the
Americans were born in the forest rather than the city, perhaps their habit is
wearing a skirt rather than pants. That is to say, the environment is also an
important factor affecting the habit.
Another disadvantage about his idea is that Kluckhohn says that people differ
from individual culture, but in essence people are similar. One example he gives
is the practice of polygamy. American women only accept monogamy, they can
not understand the behavior of sharing her husband with others, while the
Koryak women of Siberia support polygamy, it is a kind of generous performance
for them. Although there are some differences in women, there are many
common similarities for most males all over the world. I think this example can
not fully explain this view. Although the behavior of men is seen to be similar, in
terms of find the truth behind the problem, we should not distinguish between
the so-called differences and similarity in gender.
on.
Other phenomena also refute the idea of Kluckhohn 's influence on culture.
Kluckhohn's definition of culture is still unreasonable for. He says that human
action is determined by the experience of the ancestors. In fact, however, the
basic principles of Marxism tell us that everything is moving in the development
of the movement, both now and in the primitive times, people will change their
behavior because of the needs of social development. At all times, society must
be in motion, such as cultural exchanges and shocks between countries. We are in
a society of economic globalization, we wear clothes today may be made in China,
with the US mobile phone brand, with the cosmetics may come from Japan. The
interaction between the state and the state is getting closer. Asians and
Westerners is gradually familiar with each other. If the culture defines the
behavior of a person is correct, then we may still still do not know the earth is
round, and now still think that the earth is the center of the universe. Columbus
and Copernicus are those who get rid of the cultural ideas at the time.