Stay Hungry Stay Foolish

Rhetorical Analysis Final essay

by Brigette Pitts

Submission date: 29-Sep-2017 03:27PM (UT C-0500)

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Stay Hungry Stay Foolish Rhetorical Analysis Final essay
GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

91
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Comment 1
good job!

Comment 2
nice :)

Comment 3
this should be in the same order as in your thesis

Comment 4
why is this in quotes

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QM Missing ","
Missing comma:
T hough it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can of ten help to prevent a
misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that
is logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), it is a great help to your
reader to place a comma af ter that introductory element. Such phrases will of ten begin with
words like "because," "while" or "although," as in the f ollowing example: "While everyone was
f ighting, the bear wandered away." As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be
conf using.
QM Unnecessary Comma
Unnecessary Comma

QM Missing ","
Missing comma:
T hough it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can of ten help to prevent a
misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that
is logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), it is a great help to your
reader to place a comma af ter that introductory element. Such phrases will of ten begin with
words like "because," "while" or "although," as in the f ollowing example: "While everyone was
f ighting, the bear wandered away." As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be
conf using.

QM Repetitive
Unnecessary repetition:
Avoid redundant use of words or phrases. Be aware of what is inherent to the words you
choose to use, e.g. you would not write "the resulting ef f ects" as "ef f ects" are results and thus
are always resulting f rom something. Also be aware of what the acronyms and abbreviations
you use stand f or, e.g. when using the acronym "AT M" you should not write "AT M machine" as
"machine" is already in the acronym.

QM Wordy
Wordy:
If you use too many words to describe a relatively minor point, your paper may seem wordy. In
order to be as concise as possible, trim your sentences down and use longer, more meaningf ul
words. T ry to use f ewer two- and three-letter words, passive constructions, and weak verbs
such as "seem" and "appear."

QM Unnecessary Comma
Unnecessary Comma

QM Missing ","
Missing comma:
T hough it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can of ten help to prevent a
misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that
is logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), it is a great help to your
reader to place a comma af ter that introductory element. Such phrases will of ten begin with
words like "because," "while" or "although," as in the f ollowing example: "While everyone was
f ighting, the bear wandered away." As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be
conf using.

QM C/S
Comma splice:
A sentence must have both a subject and a main verb in order to be complete, but it cannot
have more than one subject or main verb. A comma splice is a variety of run-on sentence that
occurs when two complete sentences, each with its own subject and verb, are joined mistakenly
by a comma. T here are generally three methods of correcting this problem: 1) Replace the
comma with a stronger mark of punctuation such as a period or semicolon, 2) use a
 coordinating conjunction ("and," "but," "or," "nor") to join the two constructions, or 3) make one
of the two sentences a dependent construction by linking it to the other with a subordinating
conjunction ("if ," "when," "so that," "although," "because") or relative pronoun ("that," "which,"
"who," "whom," "whose").

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Comment 5
awkward punctuation

Comment 6
why is it necessary that the reader know that it is these 2 paragraphs?

QM No Personal words- No I, you, we, us, "one", etc

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Comment 7
this should not all be centered...please look at f ormat f or works cited page
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