Brown-Quigley 1

Isabella Brown-Quigley

Professor Holly Batty

English 102

10 December 2017

Reflection for Drama Analysis

I have made revisions in my essay that analyzes the play, M. Butterfly, by David Hwang.

The first thing that I modified was my title. My professor suggested that I take out the word

analysis from my title to clean it up. Although my thesis was strong, I revised it because my

professor pointed out a new counterargument. She explained that one of the main characters,

Song, goes back to the traditional masculine stereotype. At the end of the play, Song no longer

breaks the binary mold. I put this idea as my counterargument for my revision. Then, I added a

new first body paragraph to expand on my claim to make it more concise. The first body

paragraph enhanced and supported my thesis. The next couple of body paragraphs I edited

grammar. The fifth and sixth body paragraphs were originally one lengthy paragraph, but I split

them up. In these paragraphs, I further explained my new counterargument. In the seventh body

paragraph, I revised my interpretation about Shimakawas quote to accurately represent her work

and ideas. I revised the conclusion by inputting the new counterargument. Additionally, I

revised the organization of my essay by moving around a few ideas in a more logical order.

Overall, I have revised my title, thesis, support for my thesis, counterargument, grammar, and

organization.