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Taylor-Jo M. Crace

Miss Cook

Composition-01

5 December 2017

Cardiothoracic Surgery

I dont dawdle, Im a surgeon. I make an incision, do what needs to be done and sew up

the wound. There is beginning, a middle, and an end.

-Richard Selzer

For my career research paper, I chose to write about cardiothoracic surgery. The work

of a surgeon is so much more than just making an incision and stitching it up. When a surgeon

makes that first cut there is a life on the line and they must do everything possible to fix the

problem and end the procedure with a heartbeat remaining on that monitor. I would like to be a Commented [1]: Awesome hook!

heart surgeon because of my family history. I would like to reach the point in my career when I

will be eligible for research money and grants. I would like to achieve this because I want to find

out more about what has been going on in my familys heart health history and possibly find a

treatment or even a cure for it. I am very passionate about pursuing this career. I think that

becoming a cardiothoracic surgeon would suit me very well because I am a very determined and

driven person.

Many people think that cardiothoracic surgeons only deal with the heart, but this

common belief is untrue. Cardiothoracic surgeons specialize in the pharmacology and the

anatomy of the lungs and the heart; they also study medical ethics (Cardiac Surgeons: Career

Information for Becoming a Cardiac Surgeon.). They can perform repairs for heart conditions,

valve replacements, and bypass surgeries, as well as many other things (The Road to Becoming
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a Cardiothoracic Surgeon.). Most would agree that summed up, the job of a surgeon is to save

lives. Although there are many positives to this career, there are still drawbacks. The biggest

would be losing a patient. You cannot save every patient that lays on your operating table. You

must come to terms with the fact that your losses may be greater than the lives you save, but at

least you saved a life. Another drawback would be your social life. When you become a surgeon,

surgery must be your top priority. When in school you will have to have extreme focus and study

for long hours. When you are finally working in the hospital you will have to work long hours

and sometimes remain as an on-call surgeon in case something goes wrong.

The typical day of my future job will consist of many things. Some of those things may

be check-ups, charting, follow-up exams, and scheduled surgeries as well as emergency ones too.

Check-ups and follow-ups consist of making sure that everything is okay with your patient pre

and post-op. Charting contains records of a patient's medical history and treatments given, the

surgeon will need to keep this up-to-date.The most incontestable thing that this job contains

would be surgery.

There are many qualities that you must have in order to attain this career. In order to

even become a surgeon, you must be highly motivated and always search for every possible

solution. In order to keep your patients in good spirits, you should be a very optimistic person

with a very good attitude. You must be able to keep excellent focus for some surgeries may take

an extended period of time. It would be very hard for a doctor to get attached to a patient when

there is always a chance that they will not subsist the surgery. To prevent any attachment to

patients, minimal conversation is made unless to provide comfort about an upcoming procedure.

Many different surgeons receive different pay; it always varies. The average

cardiothoracic surgeon in Chillicothe, Ohio as of October 30, 2017 was about $410,598 yearly Commented [2]: Wow!
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(Ohio Surgeon - Cardiothoracic Salaries.). It is predetermined that jobs in this field will

increase during 2014-2024 by twenty percent (Cardiac Surgeons: Career Information for

Becoming a Cardiac Surgeon.). The pay can be very well, but it should be expected that their

schedule is very grueling. The average workweek of a surgeon is about 55 hours, but it may go

all the way up to 80 hours a week. There are times when a patient is in critical condition or other

reasons, during these times a surgeon may be labeled as on-call and can be paged into the

hospital at any time. The schedule of a surgeon can be very demanding, this may cause an

overload of stress and cause them prostration over time.

The lengthy road to becoming a surgeon is the longest of that in the medical field. In

order to achieve a medical degree, you must complete a four-year pre-medical degree, preferably

with a major in science. Next, you must take the MCAT which is the Medical College

Admissions Test. Scores for this test that are most commonly accepted are a 125 in each section

and a 500 overall score (Whats a Good MCAT Score?). A four year medical degree must be

obtained and you must be an intern for a hospital for at least a year. After this, you must

complete a residency and the length is dependant upon the program that you are in. Once you

have completed your residency, you must take your board exams to become certified by the

American Board of Medical Specialists. To go into this career you must be very competitive

because everything is a race and you have to do everything you can to stay on top and get ahead

because hospitals want to make sure that they are hiring only the best of the best. If you are

interested in pursuing this career, the mentorship program would be a great thing to get involved

in because if you can get time with a surgeon and sit in on surgeries to job shadow them it will

put you ahead of the others trying to get into this very competitive field. Another thing to get

involved in, that shows that you are interested in pursuing this career, would be the pre-med day
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program that is hosted by/at Shawnee State University. The pre-med day provides a lot of

information and insight from current and former students on what to expect when going into a

medical program.

In conclusion, this career will take a lot of hard work and dedication. It will be a long

road to reach a very successful point in my career as a surgeon. I believe that any person that is

very motivated and driven has enough potential to do anything that they would like, even if

people try to tell them that they cannot-as people have told me that I will not make it to being a

surgeon. I will not let the long hours and lost patients get to me, the key is to focus on the

positive and remain optimistic. This job is suitable for me because I have a very vigorous

personality and a strong-willed soul. Money is a plus, but you should always do something you

love and not purely focus on the money. Not many people can handle this job, but I think it

would be very satisfying that you are saving lives daily.

Works Cited
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Cardiac Surgeons: Career Information for Becoming a Cardiac Surgeon. Study.com.

http://study.com/articles/Cardiac_Surgeons_Career_Information_for_Becoming_a_Cardi

ac_Surgeon.html

Salary.com, Site Built by:.Ohio Surgeon - Cardiothoracic Salaries. Surgeon -

Cardiothoracic Salaries in Ohio and by Education, Experience, Location and more -

Salary.com. https://www1.salary.com/OH/Cardiothoracic-Surgeon-salary.html

Shawnee State University. Pre-Profession Studies | Shawnee State University,

www.shawnee.edu/academics/natural-sciences/minors/pre-profession-studies.aspx.

The Road to Becoming a Cardiothoracic Surgeon. The Society of Thoracic Surgeons.

https://ctsurgerypatients.org/what-is-a-cardiothoracic-surgeon

What's a Good MCAT Score? Kaplan Test Prep, 31 July 2017,

www.kaptest.com/study/mcat/whats-a-good-mcat-score/.

Writer, Leaf Group. Environment for a Cardiothoracic Surgeon. Chron.com. 12 August

2013. http://work.chron.com/environment-cardiothoracic-surgeon-24384.html

Rubric rating submitted on: 12/13/2017, 5:58:24 PM by danielle.cook@redstreaks.org

5 4 3 2 1 0

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analyzed is given to summary of summary of summary of given to

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Body W.2.b 5 = Fully and 4= 3= 2= 1= 0 = No

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Evidence & 5 = Fully and 4= 3= 2= 1= 0 = No

Elaboration creatively Demonstrated Attempted to Attempted to Attempted to attempt made
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MLA Format 5 = Fully and 4= 3= 2= Attempted 1= Attempted 0 = No

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