Today, many people prefer to watch television rather than reading books.

There are three points

of view, which show reading books are better than watching TV. Reading books can make people
to gain more knowledge, (can allow people to gain more knowledge) it can make people to learn
to be quiet and it does not harm our body, and it can also let people got (get) into a habit of reading
so when we feel boring, (bored) we can find a book to read. 最后的句子中的解释有点过于长。
读起来吃力。 写 essay 要用最好的词语马上讲到点。
比如： Reading books allow people to gain more knowledge, while also learning the value of
silence which is beneficial for the health of the body. Additionally, once a habit of reading is formed
whenever a person is bored they can easily find a book to read as entertainment.

Firstly, reading books can let us learn more new knowledge. “The book is the ladder of the
progress of mankind.” (good quote) More readings can help us know more new interesting things.
We can get (这里写 learn 比较好)ideas by reading magazines, we can get wisdoms by reading a
novel, we can also gain useful learning by reading a literary work and we can even know much （a
lot） news from newspapers. Reading will bring many good things in our life.

Secondly, reading books can make us be quiet in any environments and we can be calm in any
situations. In fact, watching TV can help us know about those things as well, but it will make us
shallower. The noisy sounds that come from TV will make us excited, and in that case people would
not be calm and they will watch some irritant (irritating) movie to release their pressures. Also,
watching TV is very bad to (for) our eyes, and it is much even worse than reading a books.

Thirdly, more(continuous/ substantial) reading of books can be one of our hobbies. It can be a
continuous habit. According to statistics, in2011, every Chinese person’s average reading each year
is only 4.75(reading in paper), though this number is increasing gradually. However, comparing to
other countries’ average reading volume, this is an enormous difference; in Russia, almost every
people can read 55 books each year, and in Israel, the average reading volume is even reached
more than 60 books yearly. The time of reading books has been displaced by playing phones and
watching TV. Especially, children’s reading volume is much less than adults, because they have used
time to watch TV, having wasting (wasted) time when they feel boring that is a very serious problem.

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Finally, as can be seen from the above points of view, we have a conclusion of reading books is
better than watching TV. We will get a lot of useful knowledge that we did not know before, and
this will also be a good help to our physical health and mental well-being if we read the right books.

Overall essay structure is good~

整体 每个 point 和你的 argument 可以再写的更精致一点。
注意句子不要过于长， be careful of run-on sentences.