These days many teenagers think that they should take taking an occupation before they going go to Commented

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university. Although there are some advantages and disadvantages together. In my opinion, they have Commented [WU2]: Sentence fragment.
some ability that can show in this time and it has useful experience for them.

In this case , there are lots of advantages for young generation . theyThey could be learn a job based on
their talent and they can explore and extend their abilities with due attention to their jobs and studiesy
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A further advantage is that they learn how to manage their money and save money that they need for
education; , by earning money, they become independent.

In addition, taking a job has several disadvantage . firstFirst, they maybe quit study , don`t go to the
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AlsoIn addition, they maybe may make relationship with some older people or their older co-workers
that might be harmful for them.

Furthermore, they have low qualification and experience , the manager of companies pay small amount
of money to them and their payment is lower than others.

All in all, I believe that takinge a job for a few years between school and university is beneficial, because
most companies think that work experience is important that some one needs high qualification.